I Need To Be An Artist.

I Need To Be An Artist.

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I lust the expression of depression and meddling art holds
An obsession to make an impression as a possession unfolds
I want moulds of a true artist, I oblige my mind to go wondering
Will I find my eyes open to success, or go blind from blundering?
I clench thundering pains in my brain, from powders I’ve snorted
I don’t do it for the image, but to get that image distorted
Unsorted visions imprison my head and shed thoughts that tamper
I indent my finger with the blade and blood lingers on the canvas
The plan thus, that my soul is freed in my studio of mood swings
I snort a line, find the chalk and paint what ever my mood brings

I’ve screwed rings of companions up,

Friends have been lost forever

I’m hoping that like my art, I rip them

Then they come back together,

I need the bad weather, I pretend that my friends have it in for me
I'll paint and obscene, scene of grief just to receive sympathy
Arts within me, the insanity and inhumanity with twists
Are the people shocked by my pieces, or the pieces off my wrists?
I couldn’t give a shit, well that’s the attitude I need to posses
In love with the life of stress, mess and to pain I’m obsessed
I’ve dressed my nose with cocaine, slow reductions of my brain
My minds on a simple plain, but far from simple and plain
I'll never regain what’s vanished, damaged years of my health
But I NEED to be an artist, cause arts an art in itself
Himself and I are attached, simply matched with a passion
Of displaying naked images, visions in our own kind of fashion
Satisfaction is a bonus, my hopeless body floats as a vapor
Rushing threw life none existent from paper to paper.


Signed
Oliver Kenyon



Artist Notes.

This is a piece i wrote in my early days of writting, a true story of a freind and it still haunts me, so i decided to re write it and add more with my experience and this came out, i personally think its the best work ive ever done and am asking you to read this in depth and get in his mind. I hope you enjoy it. - K.

This is a really emotional, it's obvious that you were writting a true story rather than a story you've merely thought out in your head, that was evident in the emotion you placed so well in the peice, It's not usual for me to read something that actually reaches me to the extent this did, the imagery just grabbed me from the start to finish, that for me is what made this peice as good as it came out, i thought even befor i read the peice that the topic sounded excellent, yet had no idea it would grasp my attention to this extent.

You left nothing to the imagination, as your description was almost flawless the whole way through, this also added to the magic of the peice... the vocabulary was extreamly good, with out going over the top, as most people use big words yet place them in the wrong context, or they just don't make sense to the peice, yet although yours was complex it was also clear for anyone that read the peice to see exactly what you were talking about... On top of that the flow of the peice was on point the whole way through, and at times amazingly complex, this would sound amazing on audio, personally i think you should record it, maybe to a mellow beat, the beat i read it through to would be perfect for this peice to be on audio, if you want it feel free to pm me for it...

Thank you for this read, i really enjoyed it... Btw i've read alot of your work prior to reading this, and yes i'd agree this is your best, definately out of what i've seen befor, some of your work i havn't really felt fully, but this really did reach and grab me.

Well done, good work.

Btw i nominated this peice, it's definately worthy of being in HoF.

thanks alot man, pm me that link.

'crying in the chapel'...

In my sig my friend, and thanks for the read.

K

Ill paint and obscene, scene of grieve just to receive sympathy
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umm, I know you too well to assume you don't know this, but maybe you over looked something.

I'll paint an obscene, scene of grief just to recieve sympathy

The way you used grieve is out of context in that sentence, I looked at it in every possible way, but I think you meant to say grief. Unless I'm so sick and zombied out from lack of sleep that my mind is not functioning today. People use and in place of an all the time, it;s something to do with thinking faster than you type. I know because I suck at typing and spelling in general...

Good shit man, touch it up...


This was rahter touching and done in an abstract way, some very good word choice here. Ver y nice indeed, but I'd hate to see such a nice peice like this not touched up.

^i got you thanks my man, you no ks spelling :(

Up!

this is a nice peice..i like your wordchoice.

K, my sonny Jim. Leave some feedback on other writers work and leave the links. You know what to do.. I can't have another set of rules for my homies.

Yo man, that rhyme was hot. I liked the fact that you were writing about something real, something personal and In my experience those are the pieces that turn out the best anyways. The flow was tight, and the vocab was nice as well. Overall man, a very good read. Enjoyed it. That was deep!

nicee art yo fosho.. i like the rip effect ......... nice vocabs w/o going over the.. sum dope eternal rhyming kept the flow on fire
I thought maybe the word "I" was a bit overused as a line starter.. but I guess that helps you to throw yourself into the piece more...structure was interesting i reckon..
lots of emotion throughout
yeah i liked the whole scheme of this ish right here

hof ish fosho

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brix sure man going away tonight so ill gert them 2moz you fuck up!

yo man this shit is fuckin dope i loved it the vocab and the overral complexity of the piece not overflown with large word which i also like in a piece seems like you took your time and thought this out extremely well man overrall dope piece

can u leave some feed on a om in my sig

the topic was reeli gd and culd fell tha emotion. tha use of vocab was excellent. overall a real good work. keep it cmin.

I havent been on this board in a minute.. but this was a really good drop. You have a good use of imagery & volcab didnt seem to be forced at all. All in all the theme of the drop was carried out pretty nicely.

Satisfaction is a bonus, my hopeless body floats as a vapor
Rushing threw life none existent from paper to paper.

This was my favorite line... mainly because that is how i feel sometimes.
Nice piece man.

thanks yo!

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I lust the expression of depression and meddling art holds
An obsession to make an impression as a possession unfolds
I want moulds of a true artist, I oblige my mind to go wondering
Will I find my eyes open to success, or go blind from blundering?
I clench thundering pains in my brain, from powders I’ve snorted
I don’t do it for the image, but to get that image distorted
Unsorted visions imprison my head and shed thoughts that tamper
I indent my finger with the blade and blood lingers on the canvas
The plan thus, that my soul is freed in my studio of mood swings
I snort a line, find the chalk and paint what ever my mood brings

I’ve screwed rings of companions up,
Friends have been lost forever
I’m hoping that like my art, I rip them
Then they come back together,

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Cool man. Cool. I liked the way you kind of distorted your structure if you will, the little breakage in the flow was dope. I loved this piece because it had tremendous amounts of complex vocabulary, and your determination of being an artist was highly anticipated. You know I like all your pieces, but I believe this one deserves alot more than HoF nominations. Even though I'm not fond of artist notes or author's notes, I will put that aside and base your nomination on the actual content of your drop. Legends. Look for it.

eh yo thanks!

this is like all of mine, Nash's and Ike's peices in one maybe more.
Story was fucking tight. Loved the structre. Masterfull wordplay and Flow was str8 up dope.
10-10,100%,2 big thumbs up.
Keep it up K you on top.

wow!simply wow! this peice was very good,you have an unreal ability in telling stories,it had me hooked from the first line.it flowed very well in some places,in others it wasn't as good,but never bad.your vocab was very complex,but not so complex that people couldn't understand it.This was as near perfect as I have seen.......I really did enjoy this peice,keep dropping and I'll keep reading :2thumb:

thanks fellas.

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Originally Posted by Verbal Insanity.

This is a really emotional, it's obvious that you were writting a true story rather than a story you've merely thought out in your head, that was evident in the emotion you placed so well in the peice, It's not usual for me to read something that actually reaches me to the extent this did, the imagery just grabbed me from the start to finish, that for me is what made this peice as good as it came out, i thought even befor i read the peice that the topic sounded excellent, yet had no idea it would grasp my attention to this extent.

You left nothing to the imagination, as your description was almost flawless the whole way through, this also added to the magic of the peice... the vocabulary was extreamly good, with out going over the top, as most people use big words yet place them in the wrong context, or they just don't make sense to the peice, yet although yours was complex it was also clear for anyone that read the peice to see exactly what you were talking about... On top of that the flow of the peice was on point the whole way through, and at times amazingly complex, this would sound amazing on audio, personally i think you should record it, maybe to a mellow beat, the beat i read it through to would be perfect for this peice to be on audio, if you want it feel free to pm me for it...

Thank you for this read, i really enjoyed it... Btw i've read alot of your work prior to reading this, and yes i'd agree this is your best, definately out of what i've seen befor, some of your work i havn't really felt fully, but this really did reach and grab me.

Well done, good work.

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Wow! lmao took the words right out of my mouth, very good article 'K, i really enjoyed reading this all the way through, i was impressed at the writing technique, and your creativity, you were very thorough in your imagintion in giving prime and descriptive details to your thoughts and feelings about that situation, you were very consistent with every flow forming word, and structure was ridiculous-*(Nice). This i feel is HoF nom. 'K you had excellent vocabulary meta's and just an abominal amount of wordplay, look forward to reading more, thanks for this piece, keep writing, i also liked the twist you put on it from your old creative writing to your now, only gets better, ~1

dope man thanks.

Congrads on the Legend Peice homie.
Collab some time?

thanks doubt it will go in tho.

fams i was feeling the topic, this piece had very good imagry, real deep emotion, i felt what u was talking about. also the concept was real clear, very understandable to read. it also flowed smoothly, added with the multies, your vocabulary, fit so right in your verse, but i think theis piece needs a hook. but it was a excellent drop tho...

hit the sig fams....

coo.

wow my new sig n avy is sexy.

hmmmm.

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