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Operation Nonexistence



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And so it begins....


Concealing all the proof in time lies were spreaded
Cuz really whats the truth behind nine eleven?
Sending all our troops to fight, Bribed as legends
Disguised, Silly goose did guys find the weapons?
Psychos marching free rapidly, Protesting tyranny
Psychological blasphemy, Infested vile schemes
Darwin's theories of mankind evolved from the apes
Started clearly from scratch, I solved his mistakes
Styles of punishment rupture the congress bluffed
While still the government covers there mess ups
In seconds a bombs detected personification flaws
Sections of arm injected with identification cards
Mark of the beast blue microchip part of your teeth
Marther luther king?, A few discarded his speech
Tombs an shrines a lost virtue ancients contained it
Who's behind the crop circles and alien spaceships?
When snipers start the gunning: Occupation? Blast
Right here in our country Concentration Camps
Fake videos of Osama was released to the public
Strange symbols showed & spotted he was a puppet
They say its the truth to hide evidence from us
So we save it and use it to blind Arabic justice
There takin the youth inside resident dungeons
Then trained as a troop to fight terrorist functions
So arrogant we missed warnings to natural disasters
No relevant defence informed actual pastors
New Orleans destroyed by presidential negligence
Two police beat more of residential helpless men
The mystery of pyrimids written on dollar bills
Pencilin that nearly script visions of God were real
False accusations from democrats posted online
Wrong allegations on memopads showin the lies
Blood spilled 9/11 an now fly paterns are really tight
But still, Just seven of the Hijackers are still alive
London bombing was sad none thought of it hardly
Why they have bombs in a bag but not on there body
Confusion of all sorts misconstrued an mistakin
Polution will fall short if misused, We erase it
New Constitutions an Testaments forced as if loyal
Who is loosin and yet to win?, In a war over oil?
Diffirent versions of the Bible displayed as a joke
Switching purgatory files, Replaced as an oath
Exposure from Alex Jones tryin to open your eyes
Left open then I arose rewriting the note was inside
Mad scientist reaseaching creating nuclear bases
At higher risk there learning makin stupid equations
Expecting the gas in this eye to catch fire this year
Excepting the fact in the sky the Pisces is near
George, Chaney, Jeb ties to Hitler, Osam & Clinton
Or maybe its disguised as Operation Nonexistence


Copyright © 2006 Ex Cal
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This Was A Deep Om'. Filled With True Fact's And Used With Nice Vocabulary. Imagery Was Great. Easy To Flow To.

Let Me Know If You Want To Collab Sometime.

^^Good looks, This was a Slam Poetry peice, Still upppin...

Yes i enjoyed reading this alot, it's very rare that i read something that has so many truths and facts in for this reason automatically i held it in high regard...
The imagery very well expressed and i could feel your emotion bleeding onto the page,
it was extreamly poetic, which as you know i love lol... it really added a good feel to the peice, and i can see your interlectual in your writting...
The vocab was simply flawless in my eyes, as you didn't go over the top on it, yet you kept the right ammount of interlect with-in your peice, i think you hit the nail on the head on terms of vocab.

Your rhyme scheme was also excellant, maybe even to go as far to say 'flawless' again, but i tend not to use rhyme in many of my peices (poetry) so i'm not really the best judge on rhyme scheme lol....

I love the structure you used, once again a poetry structure, quite evidant you thought hard about the emotion you wanted to be felt in this peice, and it really did rub of well for you...

All in all nice job... I hope to see more poertry and topical from you in the near future, and we should do that colab soon, as i said just pm me when your ready dude.

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Very intelligent writing. I've never really took the time to look at your shit because I havn't really enjoyed you as a person really. but your work here is well proven to be great. You've taken simple OLD topics such as the 9/11 bullshit and more facts and transformed them into a bit of a masterpiece here. Some flaws and things that could've been better worded here but this piece was deffinatly on the brink. and also deffinatly OmHoF material .. You've obviously put effort and time into the piece as well. The length was somewhat boring at points because it's so easy to fall off reading in such a big piece. JUST REMEMBER you DO NOT need to go big in your length of writing to make a big heart warming or a simply MOVING piece. but you got away with the length. Decent job, near perfection. Simple wordings ..Structure was ok (Which doesn't matter at all) ..flow was on point for the most part, some forced wording. but it's all good .. Keep it up

pz.

Edit: ..Nominated

this shit was fuckin dope dawg. best piece i've read in a while.. rhyme scheme was incredible. get at me on aim man..

Thanks for the indepth feed everyone, I really apreciate that seeing this was sorta a long drop, I'll try and return the favor if you guys leave links or names of the Open Mic you dropped I'll get at it, But still uppin for feed. Tryin to get this HOF...

Uppin

This was pretty good, you displayed some nice concepts and did so in an effiecent manner. Nothing too over the top, or involved. I thought you could have made this dope with some corrections to syntax in various parts of this peice. You had a few too many flaws here, just minor shit, but it takes away from the peice. I think some real good use of metaphorical devices would have pushed this over the top, you had some, just thought with this topic you could done more. Good writting none the less, but your potential is beyond what you did in this peice here. With some help and effort, I could see you doing really well here. Nice read though, with work it could be real dope...

fuckin awsome!!! dont really got much to say but fucking congradulations cus that shit was the bomb. it was deep and it blended with every line. that was so hot ass shit. vocab was great and most of that shit in there is pretty much true. good work on this piece kidd. i look forword to some of ur othe pieces like this.

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You've made partial effort in your feedback. READ the piece more and be personal with your feedback rather than "this was cool, structure was off" etc. Just a warning.

Iight

i thought this piece was class. good content and sticked with the topic all the way threw and everything was relevant.

Mark of the beast blue microchip part of your teeth
Marther luther king?, A few discarded his speech
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New Constitutions an Testaments forced as if loyal
Who is losin and yet to win?, In a war over oil?

they were my favourite lines just because i felt they made alot of sense. The whole structure and overall flow was good. and in all it was a very creative piece. good stuff keep it up.

just guessing but is it based on the Illuminati?

^^Not really, But thanks for the feed...

Damn..good peice man..you showed sum excellent strucutre and flow...made it way more easier and enjoyable to read....really good rhymes and you had a good source of imagery and complexity....vocab was nice as well.....overall this was a very good piece....keep it up.....peace

Good looks fam...

Wow this was some serious shit.....structure was amazing....and it just had everything in it.Creativity was brilliant and imagery was excellent.Rhymescheme was brilliant also.I really don't have any bad things to say about this.It was very impressive and was my 1st time reading any of your pieces and believe me i'll be reading more.Dope drop and i'll be looking foward to the next one

peace

Thanks, Up & away..

alighty then REAL FEED:

ok check it the piece was great. really classical and shit. never seen something like it.
in other words original. u had lots of multies and it flowed really well. i can see this in audio. u had alot of good points and flaws bout america and stuff. but i saw some lines were forced or didnt rhyme which kinda threw that off. but none the less this piece was still art work. congrats.

^^Thanks, Last up.