icebling verse Revamped

10 lines
no hate crew... etc...
due in 1 hour....
check in due 5 mins....
blind spit.....
goodluck..

checkity check bizznitch......................................... ,..................................

checkin in good luck

You can hope to win but the loss is what ya 'likely gettin', the only way you on my level is if you 'bite my writtens'
When I first read your challenge I thought you 'might be kiddin', I'll leave ya 'head checked' like a 'Nike fitted'
No matter where you hide I'll find ya, I'm even 'checkin ya home', I'll bring the fight to your head like holdin '9's to ya dome'
I'm unstoppable when I 'get in the zone', dismember ya limbs when I rip the 'flesh from ya bones'
Ice wishes he could be me, the way I'm 'toppin the stats', dead on target when I'm 'poppin the gats'
I kick mad game, while this kid couldn't get pussy if he tried 'adoptin a cat'
Better hope this don't end in a draw or we'll be 'fightin it out', your only tight rhymes is when you bitin it clown'
Dude you jealous cuz I rap and get pussy, don't be 'trying to doubt', shit I'm fuckin right now while I'm 'typin-this-out'
You never brought it hard that's why you'll 'die in disgrace', compared to you I'm so high I'm 'flyin thru space'
This no pussy gettin faggot ass herb must be ugly, thats why in his pic he's 'hidin his face'

dude ya crew’s so insignificant, I cant even remember they bitch name
I’d blow-up Revamped’s image, but he already got a rep… as a shit stain
Ya team leader LG’s an ass, da bitch shudda jus put me twice versus 6
he’s not much talent also, yet stood next 2 red least he gotta modest bit
& since he a shit-faced hypocrite… ya homie king01 might say your ill
but lets skip the bullshit, & move past ur hoe-assed excuse for a skill
I cud smite ya better-yet leav u dicks zombie like ‘em Haitian witchdoctors
ya squad’ll flop like twixted’s body-bags, guard ya do-rags bitch’s its ruckus
slappin fags red 2 black, I leave blue bruises like brutal pimps on dames
of course ya’ll LLL, let me explain: ya’ll penises is Ludicrous Limp n Lame

upin

aight yo i know yall niggas can do better then that but chea it goes to revamped

yo revamped ur text to small to read
and icebling ur structure waz all over the place

overall decent

yo this one goes to Revamped for better punches, worplay an structure...

P.S. NEVER USE FONT THAT SMALL AGAIN...EVER!!

lol but u gotta love small font :p

ayo revamped on a real post ur verse again.. make it bigger dow...

You can hope to win but the loss is what ya 'likely gettin', the only way you on my level is if you 'bite my writtens'
When I first read your challenge I thought you 'might be kiddin', I'll leave ya 'head checked' like a 'Nike fitted'
No matter where you hide I'll find ya, I'm even 'checkin ya home', I'll bring the fight to your head like holdin '9's to ya dome'
I'm unstoppable when I 'get in the zone', dismember ya limbs when I rip the 'flesh from ya bones'
Ice wishes he could be me, the way I'm 'toppin the stats', dead on target when I'm 'poppin the gats'
I kick mad game, while this kid couldn't get pussy if he tried 'adoptin a cat'
Better hope this don't end in a draw or we'll be 'fightin it out', your only tight rhymes is when you bitin it clown'
Dude you jealous cuz I rap and get pussy, don't be 'trying to doubt', shit I'm fuckin right now while I'm 'typin-this-out'
You never brought it hard that's why you'll 'die in disgrace', compared to you I'm so high I'm 'flyin thru space'
This no pussy gettin faggot ass herb must be ugly, thats why in his pic he's 'hidin his face'

punches rev
personals rev
struct rev
wordplay tie
v rev no hate

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rev you had better structure,wordplay,flow,punches.you need to make sure you drop in a reasonable size text,couldn't read it at first.

icebling you didn't have a good structure,no worplay, i wasn't feeling any of the punches.you need to improve on your punches by getting at people with simple lines not by over complicating yourself.

vote rev