About Today...

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February 25th, 2006, 03:20 PM
EyeCandy

About Today...

aiite on a real i'm tryna change my style of writin, so only today i wrote this as a freestyle>>>> let me kno what yall think...

...........About my day 2day............

In life there’s temptation, always agony occurred
With only a lil sensation, yet wantin more is preferred
Got so many dreams, but only little is achieved
Tryin so hard 2 succeed, while they try & deceive
As i’m con-cen-tratin, i get pulled to other angles
Don’t want non ha-tin, Traumatized how much i handle
& still i cant be eliminated, cah i’m down & devoted
i spit out fire, tha flames waitin to be reloaded

Someone breakin trust, is like slugs goin right thru ya
Tha truth it fukin hurts, u be like “wish i never knew ya”
But chu learn from dat shiit, it only gets u more wizer
Careful who might snitch, & who gon’ be tha bloody lier
Life is like a tiger snake, cah fa real its very poisonious
Gotta watch out fo tha fakes, cah they DON’T be avoidin us

Hate is like glue, cah it always follows u around
Ur own friendz so true, say they loyal but never down
Ent nobody straightforward, envious eyes to much jealousy
They’d rather see u get lowered, then sit back & sip Hennessy
Muthafukas keep testin me, laydeee snypah ent restin b
If this shiit gets u hyped up!... then i’ma let dis be....yep!
February 25th, 2006, 03:21 PM
EyeCandy

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...42#post4027342

link 1...
February 25th, 2006, 03:22 PM
EyeCandy

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=274946
February 25th, 2006, 05:52 PM
Breannah

sick shit mami
the vocab was strong you used some aggressive words here that was some tight shit some real life feelin to it the flow was sick as well keep up teh good shit your good at this
February 25th, 2006, 06:02 PM
EyeCandy

thanx fo' readin.. feed appriciated!
February 25th, 2006, 06:06 PM
Breannah

:) your welcome i wish i could write some shit like that imma have yo try
February 25th, 2006, 06:22 PM
EyeCandy

trus me theres DOPE heads here.. & i'm far from it... but yeah i would like 2 see shiit from u stil..
February 25th, 2006, 06:42 PM
EyeCandy

dammit! so many views yet hardly any feed! v.g
February 25th, 2006, 06:48 PM
themaster

im feelin it man
February 25th, 2006, 06:53 PM
Soule

2 b quite honest i didnt like this piece much. dont get me wrong, it was aight but not the best ive seen. the structure and vocab were good, gotta giv u props 4 dat. but i found this piece to be almost pointless, it was just random blabbering about random shit. and i can tell you like to take that G approach on things, which is all good u kno cuz its workin 4 ya and all, but try and make a point or message 2 ur pieces. the rhymes were good, just i dont think you need 2 make them a different color, its kinda annoying... we can all read and we know what rhymes and wut doesnt so keep it all 1 color plz... the rhymes seemed kinda forced in there, it didnt seem very natural and ur gonna have 2 work on that... i liked the multis i saw tho, good work on that... the flow was good, but a lil more choppy towards the end so u might wanna revise that...

all in all it was decent, but i think ur capable of doing better. the thing i like about u is that ur not a predictible female artist, you dont just write about guys and getting your heart broken. and you try and do something new everytime. so good job and keep it up

return the favor and leave feed on my OM in my sig...
February 25th, 2006, 06:55 PM
EyeCandy

Quote:

Originally Posted by themaster

im feelin it man

that all... :spank:
February 25th, 2006, 06:58 PM
EyeCandy

Quote:

Originally Posted by Belligerant

2 b quite honest i didnt like this piece much. dont get me wrong, it was aight but not the best ive seen. the structure and vocab were good, gotta giv u props 4 dat. but i found this piece to be almost pointless, it was just random blabbering about random shit. and i can tell you like to take that G approach on things, which is all good u kno cuz its workin 4 ya and all, but try and make a point or message 2 ur pieces. the rhymes were good, just i dont think you need 2 make them a different color, its kinda annoying... we can all read and we know what rhymes and wut doesnt so keep it all 1 color plz... the rhymes seemed kinda forced in there, it didnt seem very natural and ur gonna have 2 work on that... i liked the multis i saw tho, good work on that... the flow was good, but a lil more choppy towards the end so u might wanna revise that...

all in all it was decent, but i think ur capable of doing better. the thing i like about u is that ur not a predictible female artist, you dont just write about guys and getting your heart broken. and you try and do something new everytime. so good job and keep it up

return the favor and leave feed on my OM in my sig...

aaaw so fuckin sweet! thanx.. nah fa real i appriciate ur feed.. i'm workin on it stil.. feel me.. but thanx for checkin it..
i'll check ur om out 2moro i gotta go now.. 1
February 25th, 2006, 09:13 PM
Arsenic P

i see why you downed my shit cuz u under me this right here was know where near hot.the only thing nice about it is that you changed the colors of ya letters. you wack but anyway why you and the otha chick the only one i see replyin to this shit?
February 26th, 2006, 01:27 AM
ace baby

even thouigh imma newbie but this was hott but ive seen bettah from . it was still tight thopgh. i like the flow of it and the complexity with it girl keep doin yur thing. u still got sick talent iiaght
February 26th, 2006, 02:26 AM
AKM

But chu learn from dat shiit, it only gets u more wizer
Careful who might snitch, & who gon’ be tha bloody lier

this line was wack.rest was pretty good tho.u arnt that consistant wit ur level of rhymes or flow.jus need to elevate a lil.thats all
February 26th, 2006, 01:44 PM
shazzzzzar

i liked this peice. vocab was strong, and your flow seemed pretty consistent, bit choppy towards the end. but it was good. good multis and your rhymes were pretty good. nice peice. keep it up.:)
February 26th, 2006, 01:51 PM
dopestspitaeva

Quote:

Originally Posted by Arsenic P

i see why you downed my shit cuz u under me this right here was know where near hot.the only thing nice about it is that you changed the colors of ya letters. you wack but anyway why you and the otha chick the only one i see replyin to this shit?

fosho.. thats what it is

1..........................
February 26th, 2006, 02:42 PM
EyeCandy

thanx shaz for tha feed, & the rest yall fuckin dried herbz! fa real.. lmfao
i mean i be leavin honest feed in ur shiit not my fault yall don't be readin stickes & follow tha goddam rulez! but yo who cares what yall say about my ish... i ent sayin nuttin.....1 yeah..
February 26th, 2006, 02:44 PM
EyeCandy

upps...
February 26th, 2006, 06:25 PM
LadyDip*Harlem

I liked the meaning behind this piece. Some lines I didn't like that much but other than that this was good here. The vocab and structure were cool. I'll give it a 6/10.
February 26th, 2006, 06:28 PM
massive attack

u is good mami im not new juss new to this site u got made skillz gurl keeep ur vacab and no u arnt consistant bu that is easly fixed juss keep practicng your skill then yuo will be sumin to reakin with iiaght
February 26th, 2006, 06:32 PM
EyeCandy

thanx lady & massiv.. feed appriciated i kno itz not perfect but itz good stil..
February 26th, 2006, 06:58 PM
EyeCandy

sleepers sleepers yall muhf''kin sleepers... huh.........
February 27th, 2006, 06:48 PM
big j da fat boy

i liked the way you did somethin new it made it more interestin an i could feel how you felt it flowed very well an it had vocab in it you did ya thang on this one ma peace out
February 27th, 2006, 10:28 PM
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