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Sure thing.
alright this guy is really Cannabarz, he used to mod LLL Jr, he's been banned for biting and if you search the the line *swap insurance* he's flipped it four times and he was kicked from A.I. when certain members were gonna leave due to his presence.. *dead*
ahem,
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
Coz you ain't famous to me, this grubby scruff needs to see
..that his only touch of brilliance meant a laundrettes for me
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
I'd give you props if it was due, when I see dope rhymes I'll say
But you recycled a line I'd never drop... four times since may
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
Bitch I'm as sharp as a razor and I'm on point like a target..
...and I'd have used some better wordplay, but its only you dude you're garbage
Coms not a thug, On the streets youll see me
Shit bitch the only trouble you ever seen, Was on sky TV
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
So...
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
Coms the worst, still got his newbish ways, So ill explain shit first
The type of dude to have been here so long.. and still explain his verse
Youll be quick to fall, Stamp on you whle im standing tall
Com doesn't stand a chance... Becuase he wont be standing atall
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
couldve been reworded a bit and made it a different sub-concept
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
vs
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
v/ com
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
-not feelin it, mabye it dont understand the wordplay...
Coz you ain't famous to me, this grubby scruff needs to see
..that his only touch of brilliance meant a laundrettes for me
-grubby scruff. wtf... this punch made no sence
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
-k, the punch was solid, set up was good, but bars dont connect at all...
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
-lol,
I'd give you props if it was due, when I see dope rhymes I'll say
But you recycled a line I'd never drop... four times since may
-ok
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
-nice
Bitch I'm as sharp as a razor and I'm on point like a target..
...and I'd have used some better wordplay, but its only you dude you're garbage
-nope.
overall com dropped shit for him. but he threw in a couple of punches that were ok.
vs
Coms not a thug, On the streets youll see me
Shit bitch the only trouble you ever seen, Was on sky TV
-nope, if the concept behind this was flipped better...mabye
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
-played punch, same setup as 1st bar really...
So...
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
-iight. good flip
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
-bad flip, and com made it to playoffs...
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
-what? tight dudes, k? wtf is that. punch is played.
Coms the worst, still got his newbish ways, So ill explain shit first
The type of dude to have been here so long.. and still explain his verse
-fed off his post. poorly done
Youll be quick to fall, Stamp on you whle im standing tall
Com doesn't stand a chance... Becuase he wont be standing atall
-naw, doesnt read right...
alot of your concepts were flipped poorly phayme...
so,
vote - com.
^ find me a link to the "played" compact punch.
and 0-2
which part,
the compact wordplay...
or
the suitcase part...?
using two different played concepts into a newly worded punch doesnt make it fresh can.
but no hate, it just read played to me.
ok.
fair enough
ahem,
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name<--good punch/opener
Coz you ain't famous to me, this grubby scruff needs to see
..that his only touch of brilliance meant a laundrettes for me<---iight flow
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum<---decent personal
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry<---lol
I'd give you props if it was due, when I see dope rhymes I'll say
But you recycled a line I'd never drop... four times since may<---good personal
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving<---good flow/punch
Bitch I'm as sharp as a razor and I'm on point like a target..
...and I'd have used some better wordplay, but its only you dude you're garbage<---lol
vs
Coms not a thug, On the streets youll see me
Shit bitch the only trouble you ever seen, Was on sky TV<--wasnt feelin/ kinda played concept
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse<---good punch
So...
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free<--nice nameplay/punch...good line
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second<---...good punch
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase<---so-so
Coms the worst, still got his newbish ways, So ill explain shit first
The type of dude to have been here so long.. and still explain his verse<--decent
Youll be quick to fall, Stamp on you whle im standing tall
Com doesn't stand a chance... Becuase he wont be standing atall<---so-so
overall
com - nice drop, some real decent personals and punches. well thought out, real good consistent flow.
phayme - you had some real nice punches and ya flow was on point, but the you shouldnt have used that opener, and it slipped a lil at the end. i think with the caliber of punches you drop, next time you should take a lil more time w/ it, cuz you coulda won, but he had better consistency.
no diss/hate
v - com
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
good, but bah bah boo boo wording
Coz you ain't famous to me, this grubby scruff needs to see
..that his only touch of brilliance meant a laundrettes for me
beh, not feelin at all
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
lmfaooo nice.
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
nyeh, sorry no.
I'd give you props if it was due, when I see dope rhymes I'll say
But you recycled a line I'd never drop... four times since may
lol cool
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
ok i guess =\
Bitch I'm as sharp as a razor and I'm on point like a target..
...and I'd have used some better wordplay, but its only you dude you're garbage
wooo way to close wackly lol
Coms not a thug, On the streets youll see me
Shit bitch the only trouble you ever seen, Was on sky TV
lol i gets, i likes
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
no
So...
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
fuck off with that wack shit nikka
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
wooo great shitty ass wordplay fuckface
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
come on are you serious? i seen this mad times
Coms the worst, still got his newbish ways, So ill explain shit first
The type of dude to have been here so long.. and still explain his verse
hmm decent
Youll be quick to fall, Stamp on you whle im standing tall
Com doesn't stand a chance... Becuase he wont be standing atall
bleh.
v/COM, better concepts simple as. but i dun't like his rhyme scheme.
^lol, this fool said bah bah boo boo...
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
Decent
Coz you ain't famous to me, this grubby scruff needs to see
..that his only touch of brilliance meant a laundrettes for me
Meh
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
Ha
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
Ha Again
I'd give you props if it was due, when I see dope rhymes I'll say
But you recycled a line I'd never drop... four times since may
Meh
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
Good
Bitch I'm as sharp as a razor and I'm on point like a target..
...and I'd have used some better wordplay, but its only you dude you're garbage
Good Closer\
Coms not a thug, On the streets youll see me
Shit bitch the only trouble you ever seen, Was on sky TV
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
So...
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
No
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
No
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
Meh
Coms the worst, still got his newbish ways, So ill explain shit first
The type of dude to have been here so long.. and still explain his verse
Ha
Youll be quick to fall, Stamp on you whle im standing tall
Com doesn't stand a chance... Becuase he wont be standing atall
Good
Good battle but com came doper
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
I thought the wording was good. it was simple, but not overly simple, and the concept was good... 'add an L to your name' could be both a phrase (he has ______ to his name) and be taken literally. for those who dont get it phayme + L = flame. in fact, i think trying to word it much differently would have killed the line, and caused a lot of people to not understand the wordplay. basically the flame line was my favorite here, some solid stuff from com. some alright stuff from phayme/canna, but not enough
v- com
com got this easyily,
the line feeble quoted above got the battle for him that was a hard shot, cannabarz realy didnt come with ne heat here.
com for his opener. cool shit.
i gotta go com but just barely cuz of his opener, upon first read i was actually going for phayme but com just got it. and sirus i dont know how u recycle a play on someones name especialy some1 named Com but neway, i was feelin the vacation...compact line.
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
couldve been reworded a bit and made it a different sub-concept
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
^All nice..
So were you born boring is that it? your sense of presence is appauling
I mean the mods got rid of Jr to stop you posting in their forum
^meh. Good concept but really fucked wording
vs
Your not a gangster, Fuck u and your spouse
Because Coms only Clique... Is the one of his mouse
Ill re-arrange ur face, eh Mystery, why was this dummy let in?
And fuck second coming.. That shit just means your coming second
^Good..
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
^That line was Played...
I feel Com came doper. More quotable lines..
V/Com
thx for the explanation feebs.. you were right in thinking most of these people didnt quite get it...and seeing as this is allready won I'll explain .... add a L to his name is on two levels... 1. adding a loss to his name... 2. adding an L to his name to get flame.. oh and the laundrette line which noone seemed to get was the fact he touched me with dirty hands... lol I'll try and it make it more obvious next week.. but thx for the vote people
^ hows the seed?
he's really good thx for asking.. he's saying the odd word now lol he can say Dadda and Mamma and Nanna and he can pull himself up on the sofa and walk along it ... its crazy
time has passed it seems thats good tho
yeah he's nine month old nowQuote:
Originally Posted by Meks.
Com:
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
Phayme:
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
Overall:
Flame was the best of the bunch I'd say. Com came aight,
nice couple of concepts and consistent. Phayme had the
com stress free line which I think was his best. Fair few
highlights from both, but in the end Com just had the
better punches. Simple really.
Vote: Com
Props.
I'm bringing hell to your game, since when you got Phayme?
So I'ma make this dude hot and add an L to his name
Got his crew ghosting for him but now his fanbase is shoddy
And I hate to see my heroes fall so to the Jr kids I'm sorry
I'm dismayed at this geek, and I'll dismember you breathing
He's the only guy to join A.I. and make the members start leaving
vs.
try and not to be decieved, understand us best, see
when we say we feelin com its only cos were stress free
ima just relax, i'll tell u how this guys tight dudes, K?
This feels like a vacation and i got compact in a suitcase
Pretty good battle but Com got this imo. Better lines and had the best one with that flame line. Nice.
V/ Com
Com wins Improves to (2-0)
Phayme loses (0-1)