erbody

CHO:
Erbody get up...erbody get crunk
Erbody get up...erbody pop trunk
erbody feel bass erbody feel sound
erbody with dey klik and dey hold dey klik down
Where you at nigga...durty south nigga
Where you at nigga...durty south nigga
Where you at nigga...durty south nigga

So wuz up

Verse:
Im in day durty south with my klik holdin it down
sippin shit, pushin whip, bass bumpin round town
im just lookin fer a fight reppin tampa all round
waitin fer a nigga to step up so i can knock dey ass down
if ya talikn bout plexin youll get knocked da fuck out
im in One and only and triple "s"* you know we some troops
so show respect stand strait and give us are salute
If a nigga disobey,... they end up in ICU
cant care for them selfs in a coma getin feed through a tub
cant breath so they got an oxygen machine
but thats the affects of the auto-matic machine**
cuz when hot steel hits ya,... ya drop dead stilla den a picha(picture)
your last stand will be no help no matta whos witcha
ill leave ya there and drive off, nigga ill letcha rot in the street
nigga get eat by some birds cuz they starvin fer some meat
and im starvin fer some bread ill do anything to get it
erbody know the reap, im not just a bleep on the map nigga I is it***

*one and only and Triple "s" are the rap groups in in
** im talkin bout a machine gun
*** im refering to myself as the map

Tell me whatcha think


LINKS
time is like the wind by marshall
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270804
these days
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270736

wack

tks fer that feed nigga uppin lets get some feed tks

lol... yur 20? shit...
First... get a better topic than some gay fucking gangster deal. Second, work on imagery, rhyme scheme, wit, wordplay...EVERYTHING.... honestly, id give up if I were you but w/e...

^^^don't give up --just elevate ur topic choice like he said
everybodys done these kinda pieces so we all look 4 whats original
i liked ur hook the best but ur overall flo wasn't bad neither so keep workin @ it

"and im starvin fer some bread ill do anything to get it
erbody know the reap, im not just a bleep on the map nigga I is it***"

^^^i'm not sure bout how u ended dis tho...i think u coulda done somethin better but just try again--mayb try 2 build more of an image next time...
Newayz, aiight drop overall but a lil more originality wouldn't kill ya
keep postin

chk my OM if u gtz the chance tho, Gracias!
-Mari

"Letter From A Ryder"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270190

4-sho Southside ya shit was nice keep it up

battle needs votes:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271183

I dont like the topic, dont like the rhymes and text sucks.
And you need train more on the vocals, and you have no imagery at all
this is crap, trash going quick, leave off the open mic.

iight keep feedin

[QUOTE=Mariposa Latina]^^^don't give up --just elevate ur topic choice like he said
everybodys done these kinda pieces so we all look 4 whats original
i liked ur hook the best but ur overall flo wasn't bad neither so keep workin @ it

"and im starvin fer some bread ill do anything to get it
erbody know the reap, im not just a bleep on the map nigga I is it***"

^^^i'm not sure bout how u ended dis tho...i think u coulda done somethin better but just try again--mayb try 2 build more of an image next time...
Newayz, aiight drop overall but a lil more originality wouldn't kill ya
keep postin


i agree wit mami right here.. nahmean.. but its up 2 u weather u take tha advice or not.. stil hope 2 read suttin more orignal from u nex tym aiite..1 :coolio:

uppin fer feed

Same as I always saw, man, come on now... Please try come original somewhere, go find a decent topic and run with that, good luck :)

iight dawg read some of my other ones and see how they are

uppin for some feed back

uppin

this wasn't all that good, honestly. you had alright flow but you need serious work on concepts and shit. add metaphores and all that

this shit wasted my time.

iight main tks fer teeling me i need to improve all feed is good feed

hey u in tha crew aiite.. jus tell young tone u add u on tha roster aiiite...1

it was aight at best needs some work to be the dope shit it could be ....... check out my drop "i'm flying higher"

iight ladydeee
tks fer that feed T check the other stuff in my sig