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A Change Of Heart
A Change Of Heart
Street lights shining, as im headin back home…
Keeping my eyes forward, cuz im walkin alone…
Sidewalk empty, fuck, Its already 2 in the morning…
Silence all around me, shoulda took this as a warning…
Workin all night, fuck and im sleepin all day…
Takin the night shift, just so I get better pay…
Im walkin faster, the sounds of footsteps follow…
I look all around, but the streets still hollow…
I hear a faint scream, about a few blocks down…
Thinking to myself “fuck, what do I do now?”…
But I keep steppin, tryin to keep my focus ahead…
Try to forget, but im hearing something else said…
The scream gets louder, as my footsteps fade…
Tryna keep quiet, try to listen to what they say…
“Bitch I oughta blow ya head off for what you did”
“No please tommy don’t, what about the kid!”
“fuck him, ill kill him too, he still only young,
I’ll put the gun to his mouth, blow a hole thru his lung”
“Tommy fuck off, kill me, let him live!!
Hes only 3 years old fuck tommy, HES A KID!”
I thought to myself, “fuck I gotta save this girl”
Cuz if I don’t act quick, this thug gunna end her world.
And just as I lifted my head, I heard it end…
Bang..bang…bang…shes full of 3 pieces of lead…
My heart stopped, I got weak, but damn I couldn’t move
This thug had a gun, what if he shot at me too?
I ran around the corner, waitin for that wacko to leave…
But thinking to myself, “man, this cat cant get free”
What was I to do, I was weaponless, I wasn’t armed…
But this thug couldn’t get away un-harmed!...
I saw him leave, he looked both ways and ran.
My heart felt as it was sinkin in quick sand…
He was out of sight, I ran quickly to help the girl
But what I saw next, just about stopped my world.
I couldn’t believe what I was seeing, words couldn’t describe
As I grabbed the girl in my arms, and bowed down beside
Fuck…it was my own girlfriend…having an affair…
MAN I didn’t have a fuckin clue, I wasn’t aware….
Why hasn’t she told me? Why did I deserve this…
Thinking to myself what I’d do with my last wish…
Id bring her back…id ask her what the fuck went wrong
She told me she loved me, and only me for so long
She was hidin a kid, she was fucking hiding a guy…
I thought we were fucking more…then just a fucking lie
I let her go, I turned around and ran back home…
Whether I deserved this or not…now I was alone…
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...72#post3811072
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...81#post3811081
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Ya'll Mus Be Tired, Cuz You Sleepin On This...Haha
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yo this was a hot drop boy. The topic was good flow was there, good use of vocabs, aand a good structure. keep it up homey
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yo this was a hot drop boy. The topic was good flow was there, good use of vocabs, aand a good structure. keep it up homey
sic shit
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Street lights shining, as im headin back home…
Keeping my eyes forward, cuz im walkin alone…
Sidewalk empty, fuck, Its already 2 in the morning…
Silence all around me, shoulda took this as a warning…
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word not bad man, liked a few lines here and there and the flow was cool and shit, structure wasnt bad an all, the piece as a whole had its moments and shit, not much else to say, pretty cool read man. maybe the only complaint is the text color you used, that shit hurts my eyes lol.. but other than that keep dropping man. word up.. the topic was cliche though, so i guess next time write about something more original i guess.
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Thanks For Feed Uppin This
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werd man this was very good--u had everything....just keep it up famm.,soryy for the short feed but erybody pretty much covered it
plz hit up the Fleeing the shadows link in my sig
pz
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a sweet drop
lookin forward 2 more of ya drops
flow awesome
struture kk
rhymth sweet
keep@it
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it sucks horrbly
lmfao nah j/p its dope the only word i can describe it
hit up this battle thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=266067
now stfu
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nice style.. flow..format delivery..yeah!
diddnt like the end lines much..sort of an anti climax..
had good imagery thruout still// cool text...good consistancy
seems a bit repetitive on certain words to me.. uhm?... maybe it can work that way as well... vocab could of been a lil more extensive....or sharper in places.. but still you did get your voice accross pretty well..
topic can easily work well coz its like sum from the heart stuff. with plenty of emotion in there.. so yea good joint
check this 1 yo
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264921
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feelin dis shiit fa real B .. niice flow, gud vocab cudda been betta but stil da topic was good... nice emotion ya used & i like ya style of writin..
deffo read mo' shiit from u... keep workin @ it...
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was i the only one that noticed that G souljha and gansgta disciple had the exact same comment?
I like the drop, it told a story. No real multies but the flow was good. My only question is, How could your girlfriend hide a 3 year old kid from you?? Head Scratcher.
keep writing.
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this was a good om. it had everything. great flow good topic an it stayed on topic. i liked it alot just keep at it. oh an wasn't expecting it to end like that
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real good quality peic eman, flow was real consistent and rhyming wa son key, nice stuff man. Structure was alright, few lines were forced, but this was real nice man.
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aye hot shyt man... right now im just speechless man i mean like dam thats some sad shyt i hope that shyt never happens to me man i would piss my pants or been gone ... i deffiently wouldn't be tring to hear they convo lol man tight shyt though
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Whooooooooooooooooooooooooo boy - yo i done seen a lot of ya battles n i aint know what the fuss wuz about cuz it seemed like ya skills wasnt matchin ur rec - but damn, good imagery, had niggaz into it, had a hell of a twist n i good asss endin - this is the first o.m. ive seen from u, hope 2 see more, good fuckin drop
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yeah i know shit you deserve it shit keep it up..................
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Wow....Just wow. Everything was just right in this man. Good topic too. I liked it man, stay on your game. If you got time could you take a look at the battles in my sig and vote on them. Thanks man.
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Damn... complicated rhymy structure and vocabulary.. i like it.. You stayed on topic and all.. good shit for a freestyle or a writtin. Would be tight to see some more metaphors and stuff in there...
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