Sex With Kashia

before you read ima tell you there is a hint in the story within the typing...thats all ima say...the hint is at the bottom after the story...but dont look at it....really try to figure it out by yourself....it makes it funner :2thumb:

Sex With Kashia


As her sent gracefully passed by i was aroused
broken neck to eye her direction i had doubts

Long blonde hair flowed in the wind meZmeriZin
beautiful big smile senting rays like its energyZin
the suns riZin as i stroll towards her with pride
sigh'd in relief when my first words came out nice
no price and my game was flawless Zero mistakes
not even a retake i was on the ball like A.I. shakes
she quakes in excitement as i lead her to my car
imagination far off as if it had touched the starZ
we glide into the house and the door slamZ behind
i turn to see her seductive stare opening my mind
she walkZ towards me one foot in front of the otha
pulls me to her whisper eroticly.."im the ultimate lova"
brings me to the bedroom and pullZ me down flat
ripZ shirt off and digs nails into my chest like stat
rolls tongue to my belt and removes with teeth
not a flaw in her pursue perfect circle like a reef
i feel the drippin saliva from her tongue on my dick
lay back in amaZement, slow an deep. but also quick
she throats it to the point of gagging an lookZ at me
pity like, if she was telling me to cum on her please
got off her knees an laid back, aZ poured it on her face
she ate it all, swear she woulda drank it out a glass case
sheZ was extra quick to mount me and ride the rodeo
couldnt even keep time myself, i had ta use the radio
itZ craZy though, she had warped into a total sex addict
at that moment she had even asked for it in the attic
she had it....and wasnt stoppin till the skin ran raw
never once a flaw, the best iZ all i thought an saw
fought the cause of cuming again cuZ the enjoyment
knew if i had her i would be back at umemployment

Thought aww fuck it, as she was finishing the ride i felt it
A smack rite upside my head "wake up, class starts bitch"






HINT:- See how i capitalized all the Z's......like when people fall alseep they always put those Z's above em.....yea its like that lmao...and notice how i only had it in the middle paragraph...like he was awake the first 2 lines then passed out....then woke during the last 2 lines....hence why there arent any cap Z's in the beginning or end..illy lol

heres my links

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262692
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262736

lmao your an ass..............who the hell falls asleep in class and then has wet dreams lmao or imagines sex.............*well i did once but it was for personal purposes* but structure was good vocab was fairly basic, a hellava lot of imagry and some emotion i like the twist at the end lmao damn good read........overall 8/10

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Originally Posted by Xtreme Malice

lmao your an ass..............who the hell falls asleep in class and then has wet dreams lmao or imagines sex.............*well i did once but it was for personal purposes* but structure was good vocab was fairly basic, a hellava lot of imagry and some emotion i like the twist at the end lmao damn good read........overall 8/10

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:coolio: ...it's a man thing......nice twist.....emotion was good......structure was on point....imagrey.... :boobies: :jerkoff: ......:)

good drop now ummmm yea.....

8.1/10(top's malice)

LMAO damn homie I haven't read nothin from you in a while.I was really felling the energy in this piece and the Imagry was great cuz I was picturing in my head what was going on in this piece and it was crazy.And the emotion in this piece was good too when I read it it really felt like I was in the piece.And the opener really opened my eyes to really read this piece and when I read the closer I was LMAO cuz it was a dream in that prespective.This piece right here was dope homie.Keep up the good work.

thanks yall...did any of you catch the hint in the middle paragraph to the ending??....look at the typing in the middle paragraph theres hints lol

enough with the suspense lmao

fine fine.....see how i capitalized all the Z's......like when people fall alseep they always put thos Z's above em.....yea its like that lmao...



EDIT: and notice how i only had it in the middle paragraph...like he was awake the first 2 lines then passed out....then woke during the last 2 lines....hence why there arent any cap Z's in the beginning or end..illy lol

lmao..............creative homie very........i wanted to ask you bout that

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Originally Posted by -=|TumTum|=-

fine fine.....see how i capitalized all the Z's......like when people fall alseep they always put thos Z's above em.....yea its like that lmao...



EDIT: and notice how i only had it in the middle paragraph...like he was awake the first 2 lines then passed out....then woke during the last 2 lines....hence why there arent any cap Z's in the beginning or end..illy lol

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I just notice that and I read the piece 3 times lol

yo i was feelin this peice it had spectacular imagery an pretty consistant flow an some damn good wordplay so just keep at it an i liked how it all changed at the end

I didn't even have to read to know the 'hidden' shit behind it, lol.


I'm so dope

im glad somebody caught it lmao....will you leave feed please

second line should be EnergiZin...yah i noticed the z's but didnt expect the sleep shyt...lame basterd...but good peice...Almost got my soldier to stand....but your not that good:mad:...try harder...

Next erotic peice you do ya lil bitch

I WANT IN ON IT...yall know how my mind works :evilgrin:...hit me up

dope peice 8/10

lmao word....collabo time for part 2.....ft. dvsmind word

up fo feed pelase

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ha....i actually thought that was it...im nice..that was hott , i like the concept..it was original..but u made me fall off cuz u forgot to cap a "Z"

"itZ crazy though, she had warped into a total sex addict
at that moment she had even asked for it in the addic" <--- and learn how to spell attic

lol 8/10...

lmao i aint even notice that....and fuck you i was high...and i dropped out i cant spell hoe lol...up

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yo i can come up some cool shit for part 2 if you wanna let me in on it too if so hit me up in pm

lyrically its pretty shit, the flow is nice and the story telling side of things is good, i can follow your flow, but with regards to rhyming structure and vocab its pretty basic.. the Z idea with the text is nice, but this wouldnt be noticed if it was audio.
there was a few funny lines in there, and some deep ones, so its nice to keep a mixture. i got a little bored of the story towards the end, but hey, thats just my english oppinion..

6/10

word^^^^but thats why it would never be an audio....duhhhhh

Good job, man, I was impressed with the imagery and the whole hidden Z thing, lol, I was onto it though :coolio: Decent vocab and as a twist, it was played, but I've not seen it like this so well done :), an imagination is strong and evident in this one, nice work pard'ner!.

PLEASE check out Letter To Heather in my sig, sleeeeepepeped on :(.

Oh, and you can extend the Z's to make it in an audio lol, :rolleyes:

i liked it... i think the Z thing is remotly witty but I actually caught before the hint. Good deal though. Imagery was good, rhyme scheme was on point, structure was flawless. Not a bad verse. Ive seen better out of you but it was good. Its harding writing on sex and you did it well. Sweet.
HIT MINE UP BITCH

LOL this is a funney peice
NIce concept and some nice rythmes
Vocab and wordplay waz rite and so waz struture
Wanna see more work from u
Nice drop

thanks...up fo more

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I left you feed, return favour..........

aight my bad ill get at it now lol

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