liein cuffed, runned down, sittin strapped, wit da safety off

i shatter souls as i launch your corpse in the manifold of a catapult
you thrive off my street anecdotes like fiends that feel that need to overdose
i'm your life's chosen course, listen: my prose is so discourse it will end earth's existence
i AM the worst, one worthy of a DEATH worse then jesus of nazareth's
skills so intense, like the volts blasphemests sense off an electrical fence
i split DENSE unstable elements atomically, and comically have you look like SEDIMENTS, anatomically [nuclear explosion]
fuck, ya'll thinkin illogically, wantin to battle me ill shatter your teeth like a cavity
don't flatter me, tell your bitch to get a new saddle for when i straddle her, ill piss on your fam till i bust my bladder
call me the mad hatter gettin props on the net, gun cocked, still no respect? yall should try n get me blocked
when someone get me shot, cops gonna chalk a huge oval round where i used to hang my COCK

Alrite, nice vocab...flow was decent..the rhyming was there

Iunno what the hell is up with the title...but hey whatever works

The story itself was a little...iunno what the word is...but keep elevatin duke..you know

6/10



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i loved how this built up energy and flowed along so easily...good shyt for a keyed up dose of dope

awesome job here man, I think this was really good, keep it up, i like the choice of words you have in there and stuff too...

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thanks for all the feedback

keep it comin

the vocab to me was really good the flow and the way it was built was also really good nice peice overall i give it 8/10
leave feed on my om what happens next

i liked this..topic was interesting and different pretty creatvie...could have been a bit longer thoguh felt like there could have been more to this and impriove ya vocab and complexity.....rhymes were good..multies were iight..flow was iight..stucttre was ok too.......overall this was good drop..keep at it.peace

let's keep it comin, im not done with this one just yet :D

uppin

sick multies, was a little stretched at points, vocabulary was pretttttttttttttttty dayum good at times, flow was on point, but at some places it feel off because you forced so many multies. try not to force as many. also, make it longer. good read peace

what are multies?

i really don't know, n everyone keeps sayin the word, plus i wanna improve on that

inner rhymes like

yo my flow is a show
you hoes will be like whoa, bro


word, the italicez ones are multies, but dont use them like that, try and make it a bigger word

uppinz

you got talen andability it was conveyed improperly but you made it known you have skill.... this wasnt great but a start you just have to make it more umpgh wordplay isnt everything the message and delivery is important....keep elivating.

i shatter souls as i launch your corpse in the manifold of a catapult
you thrive off my street anecdotes like fiends that feel that need to overdose


Nice...Good structure and Nice flow...with tha multi's...Vocab is nice also...the whole overall concept was aiight tho'..but ur Vocab,Multi's made it read Dope tho'...I like it...For ur 1st...You did a Damn good Drop.

9/10

sorta reminds me of Papoose...