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Suicide Bomber
the (brackets) are spit as backup voices
continue flow str8 after
if you see...three dots...
that means there is very brief pause
if -you-see-a-dash-it-flows-on
this structure is how i spit it, best i can explain
yo what a tragedy apparently my life is a misery
so the rebel academy wants to use my analogy on
(RAP ANARCHY)
catorgry depicts my mentality on reality...
politicians pleadin insanity yo they( MAD AT ME)
governments...
all wanna battle me-cos im crackin the shackles gee-
when attackin the faculty they aint trackin me
(ANATOMY)
hidden irraticly-when im spittin sparaticly-
use a mic like a gattaling
( YO YOU HEARD A ME)
come across invite you to murder me...
burn me in effigy...
dont care if you hurtn me...
(BY ANY MEANS)
enemy gon feel all my energy-from my birth to the cemetry-
recogniz'n my pedigree
yo my terrors (RAW)
and im’a die for the cause
so you can step into the light and recieve the (RAP...LORD)
to all my soildiers sik a bein ignored...
well you can follow me (POTNA) im goin to war-
im bout to...
cause some disorder amongst the law and the order-
because they...
crossin the border over land and the water-
my temper...
shorter than all da morters hitten supporters-
of fallen...
causes recorded by Osama reporters
they got me...
they gotme thinkin-thinkin back to the days-
ancient warrior waysss
am i just a slave to the pain
FUCK DISS SHIT IM'A PLAY!
IM'A PUT YOUR KIDS ON DISPLAY!
IM'A FIND THE INNOCENT
AND INTRODUCE A GRENADE!
aint no need for a truce!
fuk'a when i die i recruit!
aint got nutt'n to lose!
tell me when you walk in my shoes!
theyll remember my name!
(MADDUS)-blowin up in the game...
SUICIDE BOMB the whole site on his very first day!!!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...63#post3604963
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...73#post3604973
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Its coo it got a lil hard to read in some spots i like tha vocab and metaphors you use in this piece overall 7/10 keep it up homie
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I like it, hard punches in their, and some good flow, i was diggin it, keep it up Maddus
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Good flow dude, i was feelin it cuz i feel that this whole issue is extremely relevant, especially to our generation. Good to see someone aint slept on it...good job
8/10
~1~
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that was aiight, i was feelin it... was pretty good structure, and this was a lil different technique. was on point tha whole way and tha flow was gr8. Kept me readin this coz no parts were so much better then the other, they was all aiight and well written. keep droppin
~1~
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gud looks for da feed, i checked all of ya styles and gave feed,
yall got some hotness...peace
upppin for feed
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1st link dont work
2nd link bad feedback
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Uppin Fa Feed, Much Appreciated
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uppin fa feed, much appreciated
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damm can i get some feed, dont sleep peeps
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Yeah, that shit was hot. I liked your flow and your content, i could feel the anger, it was wicked mate. Keep it coming! Big up yourself blood
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good looks dusty...i replied to ya piece
i will reply to any one who gives feed peace
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hidden irraticly
when im spittin sparaticly,
use a mic like a gattaling
that shit was dope yo, keep spititn
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good looks for da feed diamond...i replied to your piece
give feed to my piece i will difinitely reply to yours...much appreciated
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alrite piece
flow - 6/10
structure - 5/10
rhyming - 7/10
like it? - 8/10
overall - 6.5/10
need to sort out your structure as loads of ppl will comment on tht, but i shouldnt really cus i did an om called 'Fuck My Structure' which had no real structure
anyway...try to work on your structure as tht in turn will improve your flow
can u comment on http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...0&page=1&pp=15 if you haven't already
thnx, peace
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whuts gud instigator...gud feed...took ya advice...
tryd to explain my structure more Good look...
and i replied to yours...peace
give feed on my piece, i will definitely give feed to your piece....
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that was aiight, i was feelin it... was pretty good structure, and this was a lil different technique. was on point tha whole way and tha flow was gr8. Kept me readin this coz no parts were so much better then the other, they was all aiight and well written. keep droppin
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uppin
give feed on my piece, i will definitely give feed to your piece....
