.::Lurking From The Shadows::.

night shadows sinister spare nothing blister the air leaving evil unseen
menacing thoughts haunt ur brain for the night breaths things u dont belief
until u grow silent where a keen ear can suddenly hear spirits from hell work
dispell reality compel morality a obscure curse, the darkness...........
..........where evil itself lurks..........
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Brisk air flows the pitch black shadows lurking staring back reflecting
afraid of the next thing noises louder than B4 caring for the unexpecting
senses quick ears sensing it vision wastd body shakin feeling in the dark
until a horrific flick of light screams into a silence only hearing a beating heart
corners grow morose sensation of ghosts growing angery floating close
flowin the room,inticapating doom,a frenzy breaks loose as more fear arose
still blackness shows cant "see" the outcome with painted black eyes
terror flies what lies beneath suddenly rise in this gloomy state of disguise
trembling touch on a slow pace tears run our face prayin 4 a more vivid place
unfortunatley not the case,tryin to embrace the night that covers this space
abnormal behaviors linger the outskirts while humans panic to get out first
unable to imagine the worse of the night air curse that impatiently lurks
feasts on the gloomy scenes,so scary what lies between me & the unseen
real means of all hollows eve,all conceived by those who dont believe
anticipating an attack of the shawow creatures that hunt in the black
hearing voices pokes on back,spinning on the unknown fact of wat is that?
breathing on ur neck all alone whisping by gruesome whispers arise
threats of evil haunt my ears,hoping for demise on this night with out lights
a vent of cool air flushes the room,now sensing that the haunting left-me
steps intensely fear sizes immensly no longer feelin the room is empty
more terrified then ever u sweat out pure fear drop silent for all to hear
creeping noises growing near eyes wide clenched fists shadow rise clear
screams,cries,nightmares so real appear followed by a rizing sun..........
...............as all evil lurking DISAPPEARS!..............

LINK1:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...31#post3569431

LINK2:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...32#post3569432

**please No Sleeping On This**

leave ur feed and drop some good links (if u give good feed, ill return the favor)

THANK YOU!

great topic u pulled that one off strong with powerfull rhymes, peace 7/10

thanx...but u keep that 1 liner shit up..ull end up getting banned!

juss thought ud like 2 kno

Honestly....dont make me have 2 get on all ur cases bout reply'n 2 this shit!

please hit this up with good feedback, and drop ur LINKS

i will hit ur shit up with an honest opinion!

igh

peze

well this was certainly a creative story with su good vocab and sum excellent imagery which made me into the peice with ya colorful vocab and desriptve style and to top that off it had great flow wicked smooth like perfect..struuctre was very even almost perfect as well...interesting topic and it was enjoyable to read..pverall tis was tight.keep it up..peace--

Thanx 4 the good feedback...thats great appreciated

really wish others would pull there head out of there ass, and spend a minimal amount of time on this 4 some dec. FB!

LEAVE LINKS..ILL HIT U UP!

Alright man, you left some sweet feed on my OM, so I'll rtf now,

Its like this ..

This topic, has been used, before, well, from what Ive seen on my old site, and Ive actually, wrote something along the lines of this before. But for being a somewhat played topic, you did a very good job of displaying the imagiry. I felt like that shit was creeping up on me man, I could no joke, feel that shit chilling on my shoulders, so great job with that. The flow, was the only weak point here, I meen, you did a well job on the multies and shit, but they were choppy alot of the time, not choppy as in you didnt put in the right words, choppy as in, you put TO MANY words, what I do, is read it over about 10 times and keep fixing shit until the flow sounds close to perfect. But a good job none the less. Your vocabulary was very sweet indeed, I liked some of the words you used in here, that kept me into it, because it wasnt a bunch of boring simple words, kept it interesting.

Overall, very nice job man, I liked this, I liked the way you added a big twist to this topic, and made everything just workout smoothly in the end, one thing, work on your flow, but great job for sure. Im looking forward to seeing more stuff from you dropped in the future, keep writing man, your good.

By the way, hit me up for a collab if your down.

Peace.

^^Thats what im talkin about...

appreciate the great FB....wish e/body would be a lil more enthusiastic and give something!...


UPPING...SO...YALL...WILL...LEAVE...SOME...FEEDBAC K...

uppppppppppppppping
u
lazy
ppl


upping

please leave links

Speechless at the lack of FB in OM....dissapointed


*shakes head....leaves*

You have an old-school text style....
Great vocab....word usage was unique

still blackness shows cant "see" the outcome with painted black eyes
terror flies what lies beneath suddenly rise in this gloomy state of disguise
^^Terror flies.....that bar is pretty dope.

threats of evil haunt my ears,hoping for demise on this night with out lights
a vent of cool air flushes the room,now sensing that the haunting left-me
steps intensely fear sizes immensly no longer feelin the room is empty
more terrified then ever u sweat out pure fear drop silent for all to hear
creeping noises growing near eyes wide clenched fists shadow rise clear
^^You got really strong here.....sweating pure fear.....last words of last bar were art

This was a solid drop.
Seems like you work hard on your internals.
Keep doin' it


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=255050
Peep my audio, plz^^

Wow man i was really feelin' this piece man the storyline was just there...Emotion was there too...Vocabulary was eh..but i was still feelin' it...But still man your lines were stretched as a mothafucka...lmao just shorten em lines up a bit..But overall: nice verse...Yea

THANX PS---GREAT FEEDBACK...THATS WHAT IVE BEEN LOOKING FOR...

Enphimus THANX---GREAT FEEDBACK...i hear ya on the stretchd thing..juss kinda how i do it...wordplay/internals are my THANG lol!..but i gotchu!

Extremely bored........so i was lookin through some of my om's

and felt like UPPING this one!


:)

nice concept and deep detail...you were extremely meticulous but thats a good asset as a topicalist..dope----not much to say man

pure extravagance

return da fav..plz in sig

man nice . i liked dat whole thing through out . u must have put alot of mind to it . i liked ur whole flow. dis sumthin dat must have took u a min to review. well nice an keep it up wit da hot flow . iight.