:2thumb: BY bobericc....Dic-tion-ar-y....and other puzzled minds.... :2thumb:
verses will b dropped within 2 hourz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...77#post3566377
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3566388
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:2thumb: BY bobericc....Dic-tion-ar-y....and other puzzled minds.... :2thumb:
verses will b dropped within 2 hourz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...77#post3566377
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3566388
the love...the hate of these puzzled thoughts
the place far from reality where right from wrong's sought
mistakes are made...but pieces together, and never a knot
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:speaker: whos to say the complexity of thoughts are simple???
all those in oppose...have plans sorted like "wheres my thimble"
my ways of explainin are far out...like horizon's through windows
our theories tip below ur average minds, like we'z playin limbo
our puzzled ideas come from the deepest emotions of gangta~life
see...we thinking before we rape and suffocate gangtaz~wifes
our secretive thinking connects to many things...Dots u cant follow
feel da rhymin part...skin deep, only if u knew how dese tips iz hollow
i describe the detail of human life...life-like...sumtimes w/ sergical knifez
im the craziest mo'fuccer, wit the iron first to set any wrong nigga rite
judgin like Dredd...drop my heavy spiked mallet over a puzzled~HEAD
dis santa aint got presents in his sled...bodies in blacc bags instead
glory beholdz the next nigga to decieve me...ur puzzlement'll drown
ill make u da chiccen crossing a rode, watz next? riddler owns da crown
my theory iz that the heart pumps solely so the brain smaccs
ill leave the audience clappin guns and hands for my puzzled act :speaker:
Ayo that shit was dope as fuck imma probably drop in a little while
the love...the hate of these puzzled thoughts
the place far from reality where right from wrong's sought
mistakes are made...but pieces together, and never a knot
Look my mind so puzzled that all i can do is destroy
they say i'm ill going into war wit my son as a decoy
i'm puzzled and shocked knowin dudes out to gut me
and not caring about no mother fucker on earth..but me
I walk onto the battle fields with no click and no gun
my mind puzzled and confused but still scared of no one
i know i'm bout to die so i role up some...trees.....
got enemies watchin but there hands cant fuck wit these
it's always the little ones to start some trouble
while my mind puzzled and i'm high so i'm seeing a double
before he can talk he had blood pouring out his lip quick
i hit him with a brick i'm in the wrong set so i try to leave quick
I'm so puzzled and confused not thinkin bout the danger face me
i'm just feelin so good as his five brothers chase me
my body feeling hot,and my chess start to sweat,my shirt getin wet
But i wont stop running till i make it back to my set
i run in my house lock and load ready to let them things explode
make a couple phone calls tell my boys get ready to role
You know we in the car crusin back to the enemy set
and the hole car strap wit nines ready to make a enemie wet
i use to act hard now its time to prove my act now
as my mind puzzling i have thoughts to back down
we cutt the lights let the car role straight down there street
when i pulled out the heat dudes start ducking in trash cans like
oscar from seasame street
i know they saw the shit we tote but still my gun stuck his face
to his door like a sticky note
yo itee ya'll here's mine....
nice verse homie
itee.... Look.....
My words, from crazy minds, hit n fuck up minds,
so quick, so deadly, swallow this sick "tip", but it's not even from a "9",
fuck bein kind, im heated,.....piss still boilin,
i been past dat point.....Im new but still spoilin,
nigga,...just get it, relax, swallow some coffee,
because if u don't, u'll swallow red cells 2 get off me,
so follow me, im da leader......my mind has been mixed,
so ima take a second........oops u "shot", There's yo fix,
i don't flinch, twitch, i just watch the blood splatter,
Im so "Vain", feelin so much pain, nothin 2 gain, so ima touch n watch a nigga shatter,
it's just da Puzzled reaper, corrupted finger "Tip" of destruction,
u bust from my combustion, LL, got bitch's hushin, so wen shit rushin,
it's a guaranteed 2 leave a concusion, so stop fussin n rest n peace,
I'll swallow yo brain, spitted it out deformed n mixed, It'll b puzzled burnin underneath...
nice shyt
CLOSED---------------------no more verses from other puzzled minds.......
now ACCEPTING FEED
uppin 4 feed
lol at within 2 hours...
when i freewrite most of my lyrics... that just sounds ridiculouse...
but not bad... take out the pictures and shit... work on the flow a bit
and try to increase your vocab... not bad at all though... just nothing speical...
keep at it bro.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=254738
this was a good collab............
bobericc- u had a flow going, but at some pointr i got lost. vocab was great. ur structure was clear as well. the problem was that you need to make your piece more visionary...7.7/10
pusha c- you had an ok flow, and i like your structure. very understandable.really clear as well. vocab needs to extend more, everything else was good....good drop
6.6/10
dic-tio-nary- you had an off flow, good vision. also need to improve with the vocab, your structure was clear, your concept was ok to uderstand.....6/10
this was a good topic to talk about, your group. thats good.. but good luCC wit ya crew. and i hope you keep writing.....overall= 7/10
WoRD^^
uppin 4 feed
uppin
hhm uppin
babump
Pusha C- Felt you could've done a lot better but you brought some imaginations and shit to this...Some of your lines were nice and some were just mere basic fillers...structure doesn't matter so I won't nag about that...your flow was off in some parts but for the most of the verse you were on key...Wordplay and vocabulary was meh but you did fine...overall I'd say it was hott...
Dick- No...verse was nearly horrible, not much imagination, lines need to be a little more stretched and your flow was off...you need to use less of all this shit in your verse: !$&*!@%^!@)^%!$!@${}{}{ $><)((''''''*....seriously fucks with the whole goddamn thing...you need elevation...
Bobericc- Decent...the best verse in here by far...I suggest next time you do a collab do it with people more highly skilled than these people...Pusha C I ain't complaining about but people like DICK here sure fuck it up for the rest of the people...Your verse consisted of constant flow but some little falloffs here and there...nothing you couldn't or didn't pick up on...you brought some vocab to the piece as well..good job...the structure of this whole verse was kind of wack...all of you should've PM'ed the verses to one person and had them color coded and posted up in the same thread...but it's too late for this now...Good job overall...
Keep working on your shit push and dick...and bob, for the most part your on track, some flaws buy your doing good...
*~Leaves the room Nameless~*
Bob
[Nice open]
whos to say the complexity of thoughts are simple???
all those in oppose...have plans sorted like "wheres my thimble"
my ways of explainin are far out...like horizon's through windows
our theories tip below ur average minds, like we'z playin limbo
our puzzled ideas come from the deepest emotions of gangta~life
see...we thinking before we rape and suffocate gangtaz~wifes
[this was ight]
my theory iz that the heart pumps solely so the brain smaccs
ill leave the audience clappin guns and hands for my puzzled act
[my fav from u was u'r closein]
Overall nice drop homie
{pusha c}
Look my mind so puzzled that all i can do is destroy
they say i'm ill going into war wit my son as a decoy
[lol i liked this]
i'm puzzled and shocked knowin dudes out to gut me
and not caring about no mother fucker on earth..but me
[dig that shit]
I walk onto the battle fields with no click and no gun
my mind puzzled and confused but still scared of no one
[shit nigga u sound like me lol]
i know i'm bout to die so i role up some...trees.....
got enemies watchin but there hands cant fuck wit these
[lol damn so far every line u done dropped i liked]
my body feeling hot,and my chess start to sweat,my shirt getin wet
But i wont stop running till i make it back to my set
[ahh amn this shit so funny]
when i pulled out the heat dudes start ducking in trash cans like
oscar from seasame street
i know they saw the shit we tote but still my gun stuck his face
to his door like a sticky note
[nice closein homie]
{Dictionary}
[this was ight]
My words, from crazy minds, hit n fuck up minds,
so quick, so deadly, swallow this sick "tip", but it's not even from a "9",
so follow me, im da leader......my mind has been mixed,
so ima take a second........oops u "shot", There's yo fix,
[this was ok not bad]
i don't flinch, twitch, i just watch the blood splatter,
Im so "Vain", feelin so much pain, nothin 2 gain, so ima touch n watch a nigga shatter,
[nice flow, work on structure]
it's just da Puzzled reaper, corrupted finger "Tip" of destruction,
u bust from my combustion, LL, got bitch's hushin, so wen shit rushin,
it's a guaranteed 2 leave a concusion, so stop fussin n rest n peace,
I'll swallow yo brain, spitted it out deformed n mixed, It'll b puzzled burnin underneath...
[nice wordplay and choice of words]
overall this was a good drop I'd rate it a 7.9/10
my fav verse was Pusha C's
Keep it up yall and make sure yall go check out my crew OM
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Originally Posted by SIX6
^^^ Word.....everything he said is true....
nice job
uppin
take out the sigs and shit...or jus do it as 1 drop (pm all the verses to 1 person)
verses all flowd well
gd structures
gd reads
mainly gd rhymin
keep @ it
thanx for feedback
The king is here rhyme gangsta.hit hard like a punch leavin you daze.ak by my side many hoe ready to lock load and ride.
Closed, stop upping older open mics.