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LLL Jr. Week 3
yup 3rd week of season
last weeks no shows are gone
2 more weeks and belts will be introduced
boot matches also as the league is too big currently
As for this week same rules as previous weeks
Check by wednesday drop by friday
no fucking around
Good Luck :2thumb:
check, idc bout lines 10-14 u can pick
whatever dude.
check.
Aight, 12's cool.
sounds good.
here ya go...
your 2-0, thats a typo or something, dun
cause to say thats fair, i'd have to be at one
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
i'll hide, your ugly, but i'll still rip you, you'll die now
when i open'd that^ image, your nose almost poked my eye out
and to say hes my dog, it'd be a female one, kid
cause when ya think about it, i know alph'a'bit'ch
there. i know links are gay, but open it. it goes with the verse and is a lil funny.
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
LOLoolololol rolf!!! omg its fuckin Elf
Lmao at the alf punch.
Ill drop tonight, i ain't sleeping.
Got school shit n basketball.
The story won't be untold, everyone'll see ya earn ya first loss
And i'd impale ur ass into jesus, just to get my points across.....
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This purple font bitch, comin with gay concepts, he wins the fag award
And if this cat is straight, then so is my grandmothers spinal cord
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
Leader of verbal intercourse? text? well that it explains it yet
cause the only inter-course you ever got, was from a teacher on the net
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
N just think, your positivly attracting wackness like a fucking magnet
& ya ur ryhmes r original... cuz not even an herb wud wanna sayya shit
The story won't be untold, everyone'll see ya earn ya first loss
And i'd impale ur ass into jesus, just to get my points across.....
ok
This purple font bitch, comin with gay concepts, he wins the fag award
And if this cat is straight, then so is my grandmothers spinal cord
gay lines played
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
naw streched could been dope
Leader of verbal intercourse? text? well that it explains it yet
cause the only inter-course you ever got, was from a teacher on the net
no
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
heh mad me laugh but no direct punch
N just think, your positivly attracting wackness like a fucking magnet
& ya ur ryhmes r original... cuz not even an herb wud wanna sayya shit
naw
vs
your 2-0, thats a typo or something, dun
cause to say thats fair, i'd have to be at one
ok
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
naw
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
lol
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
ROTFL LMAO HAHAHA :ROFL:
i'll hide, your ugly, but i'll still rip you, you'll die now
when i open'd that^ image, your nose almost poked my eye out
heh
and to say hes my dog, it'd be a female one, kid
cause when ya think about it, i know alph'a'bit'ch
meh
al-battle verse was simi okay i liked couple bars in your whole verse that hit direct and the other ones was either statements and wasnt hitting hard at all didnt come consistant.one bar could of been dope if it wasnt so streched structre was cool
untold-verse was pretty coo but id have to say id give you this win cuz you has some real witty punches dunno if your trying a new style but its cool couple punches was funny the alf pic heh mad me laugh and the "i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it" was kidna witty i liked it pretty decent verse
v/u
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
meh, guns n shit are played, but it's not bad
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
sounds like the type of punch i would've used
this coulda been better with the right wording
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
not bad, but yes links are gay lol
vs
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
good
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
this one isnt being quoted im just lettin you know it's played
v/ untold......btw, the point across punch is almost as played as 'cum' punches lol
Fuck, didn't think any of that shit was played, ive never heard it anyways.
shit happens, playa. up'n.
If it all was played, didn't give you the competition you deserved i guess.
Yeah, after looking this over, i guess i rushed it and dropped like shit.
Record's reducing me 2 herb status in the next mag... fuck
your 2-0, thats a typo or something, dun
cause to say thats fair, i'd have to be at one
^^heh, ok
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
^^nah
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
^^blah, newb style
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
^^ok
i'll hide, your ugly, but i'll still rip you, you'll die now
when i open'd that^ image, your nose almost poked my eye out
^^no. Man, it's not even a real pic of him
and to say hes my dog, it'd be a female one, kid
cause when ya think about it, i know alph'a'bit'ch
^^meh forced, not a bad idea though
vs.
The story won't be untold, everyone'll see ya earn ya first loss
And i'd impale ur ass into jesus, just to get my points across.....
^^nah, point across is well played
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This purple font bitch, comin with gay concepts, he wins the fag award
And if this cat is straight, then so is my grandmothers spinal cord
^^heh, ok
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
^^meh wording
Leader of verbal intercourse? text? well that it explains it yet
cause the only inter-course you ever got, was from a teacher on the net
^^forced (no one calls the net "inter")
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
^^lol just no
N just think, your positivly attracting wackness like a fucking magnet
& ya ur ryhmes r original... cuz not even an herb wud wanna sayya shit
^^ok concept but needed much better wording
having read this battle, I wish I hadn't :(
still v/untold
since he came more direct and less stretched
course, as in teacher, not inter as in internet. but word.
yes, I got the course/teacher bit and the double meaning on intercourse. Dude, I'm comin back in this from LLL
Lol i know. You should stay up there too.
shits straiight. i drop'd weak to. i was just trying to finish this up quickly. s'all good though, maybe next week'll be better.Quote:
Originally Posted by Alphabetized
well anyway I'll try to make feedback useful for peeps who deserve it. You don't seem like the typical whiny big-mouthed kid, so respect for that, and don't worry it wasn't bad for the amount of time you've been at it.
And nah I ain't good enough to get better than a 4-3 record in LLL yet, so I'll stay here to elevate some more
^^ I love Vaskez lol
man i hope Aines puts me back in im ready to win dammit
makes no sence cuz his name is back 2 normal.
you wish kid... lets get some more votes and more in the one in my sig.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=254563
hit up the link dammit
your 2-0, thats a typo or something, dun
cause to say thats fair, i'd have to be at one
(Naw.)
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
(Eh..doesn't make too much sense)
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
(Naw.)
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
(Heh.)
i'll hide, your ugly, but i'll still rip you, you'll die now
when i open'd that^ image, your nose almost poked my eye out
(Naw.)
and to say hes my dog, it'd be a female one, kid
cause when ya think about it, i know alph'a'bit'ch
(Ugh. Forced)
vs.
The story won't be untold, everyone'll see ya earn ya first loss
And i'd impale ur ass into jesus, just to get my points across.....
(Naw.)
.
.
This purple font bitch, comin with gay concepts, he wins the fag award
And if this cat is straight, then so is my grandmothers spinal cord
(eh.)
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
(Heh, ight.)
Leader of verbal intercourse? text? well that it explains it yet
cause the only inter-course you ever got, was from a teacher on the net
(Meh.)
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
(No.)
N just think, your positivly attracting wackness like a fucking magnet
& ya ur ryhmes r original... cuz not even an herb wud wanna sayya shit
(Meh.)
/v Alphabetized. I guess, this battle was actually ight and real close. I dunno..too close to judge almost, but I felt Alpha just edged it.
your 2-0, thats a typo or something, dun
cause to say thats fair, i'd have to be at one
lol made me laugh, was aight but not a hard punch
his ass is strung, hes done with no effort
i'll put you in the mag, but not the one by record
nah this was weak and way too basic
alph hates pussy, but dicks 'n ass'ment to his abdamins...
i'd tell this fag to kiss my ass, but he'd make an attempt at it
lol this was aight, humourous
alph, your unpopular and none of your shits tight
s'when we all think of alf, its always of this guy
No comment, i got no who idea who that guy is...But every single voter has said it was funny, i will just take there word 4 it. If ya feel the need to let me know who it is, would appreciate it.
i'll hide, your ugly, but i'll still rip you, you'll die now
when i open'd that^ image, your nose almost poked my eye out
lol aight
and to say hes my dog, it'd be a female one, kid
cause when ya think about it, i know alph'a'bit'ch
okish but kinda weak 4 a way 2 finish
v
The story won't be untold, everyone'll see ya earn ya first loss
And i'd impale ur ass into jesus, just to get my points across.....
aight opener, liked it
This purple font bitch, comin with gay concepts, he wins the fag award
And if this cat is straight, then so is my grandmothers spinal cord
lol i like the comparison, but callin people is gay, guess i kinda tried to freshn it up. ok
Ya elevation never soared, and being as wack as u, idk how u could live
funny how u never gave self glory, probably cause theres NONE to give
aight
Leader of verbal intercourse? text? well that it explains it yet
cause the only inter-course you ever got, was from a teacher on the net
weak
And if you are what you eat, then its funny how it stays in sink
to why your downing boxes of twinkies, you fat fucking twink
weak again imo
N just think, your positivly attracting wackness like a fucking magnet
& ya ur ryhmes r original... cuz not even an herb wud wanna sayya shit
weak closer
I wouldnt normally vote because i didnt understand one of untolds bars, because i dont know the "guy" in the pic, but without that bar he still won this battle imo.
Only 1 line that i thought was really weak, the rest was average, nothin great but aight, ive seen better from ya.
Alpha - U started off aight, which was on par with untold, but u kinda faded towards the end for me. I think u had some aight ideas, just need to reword some of ur punches, so they surprise who ever is readin it and aint as predictable.
V/ untold, for more consistency with the aight lines, both couldve came better though imo.
All honest feed.
Both check my battle, thanks.
Lol, at least i got 1 vote. I'll keep this near the top thanks for the feed y'all.
v/told. will explain in mu fuckin mag.
untold wins
Alphabetized (2-1)
Untold (3-0)