apocolypsE noW

Let me tell you about APOCOLYPSE now
The forced annihalation of Muslims, Christians, and Taos
All religions, all races, the radical and the passive,
no one will escape the horrendous, and massive
end of days as we call it, but NOT by God's hand
Apocolypse will come by the blunders of Man.

Drugged masses like chinese were with opium habits,
Succumbingly numb in the government has us
infatuated not hated we beam at their status
they laugh at our ignorance, and plan to backstab us

You think it's inconceivable like 2 sterile people?
that a government will kill citizens to make itself lethal
dropping 2 towers and anthrax, preventing we breath full
overpowering, leave us cowering, and leave us so feeble

Taliban, Illuminati, Al Queda, all the same
Priory of Scion, they're lyin, there's just one group to blame
A democratic Jihad, they're playin one helluva game
trying to change the planet's name to the US of A

Propoganda round the world blamed tectonic plates
even though atomic particles were found in the waves
consequences taken, thought out, and then weighed
waves raped em, arranged for cadavers be laid

Niggas caught up by dealing rocks monthly
that the government brought up with our taxable money
drugs havoc on the rich, poor, healthy, and weary
all truthful, not some made up conspiracy theory

A two-sided blade who's hypocrisy hidden
the whitey's who provide em, are the ones who fucken forbid em
Acquit em, and quittin their freedom is given,
to hit men who hit them with institutionalized livin

Distort us with wars to give veterans stories they fought in
they leave us with woes then blame Osama Bin Laden
Despicable unbelieveable you belive news that is brought in
by politicians whose souls have gotten to rottin

Allegations are laid away from Bush's camp
more outrageous than a faget claimin menstrual cramps
a puppet whose dull as a bulb in broke lamps
dumber than deadbeat dads dying to buy cars with food stamps

Let me tell you about APOCOLYPSE now
The forced annihalation of Muslims, Christians, and Taos
All religions, all races, the radical and the passive,
no one will escape the horrendous, and massive
end of days as we call it, but NOT by God's hand
Apocolypse will come by the blunders of Man.


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Yo this was sum good shit....i was feelin the topic and the deatail you put into this and the great flow smooth as hel..easy read...rhymes were good ..you had sum multies/doubles and sum good rhymes not too simple..i lked this drop..keep it up...peace--

thanks man.....i've been readin and liked alot of your shit too =)....uppin for more feedback!

more feed plzzz

hollaaa blipppity booo bah

thanks for the feedback ^^

I liked this it was well thought out, the wordplay was good also, I love a bit of wordplay it always makes an MC stand out ya know.
You abvioulsy know a little about what you speak to which is good, I hate listening or reading peoples stuff when its obvious there trying to talk the talk but dont know what there on about.
Its not unlike what ive written, same kinda topic anyways which is why I had a look in the first place.
Keep it up.

thanks for the feed guys....XL and pakaveli...if u have other peices out....why dont u send a link so i can read?...i'm always up to read some bites other than stereotypical shit about how gangsta u are, blah blah

Nice choice of wordz.
I was feelin tha rhymes in tha joint

Keep doing ya thang ima watch for ya

thx for the feed, i'll make sure to hit ur beats up

leave a note before u head out ^^

bump ittt

read my siggy, im a fat kid

Wordplay: Great
Vocab: Good
Flow: Good
Structure: Finally, i see some structure...

ADVICE:
Juss keep elevating, u doin good...only thing i can suggest is to get rid of the blue cuz the contrast is a bit hard on the eyes...

VERDICT: 8/10, Dope piece

...Fantastic...

PS: Peep my open mic's in my sig...and battles....

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oh, and do ya research, cuz the illuminati was a scientific organisation who were against religion's views on science...they weren't no terrorists, they were smart people...

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nice fam...vocab was fire...some gud similies in thurr...
couple a mettas...flow was overall consistant...i aint
got to much critique...some of the transitions was
shaky but nuttn to much...i only seen one line which
you shoud seriously think about changin it just doesnt
belong in hurr...

a puppet whose dull as a bulb in broke lamps
dumber than deadbeat dads dying to buy cars with food stamps

bad flow,streched bad,transition,get rid of it fam...
its killin ya piece ...ya feel...no hate cos i liked dis shit
creative as fuck,keep em commin , im out

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Originally Posted by StRiNgThEoRy

oh, and do ya research, cuz the illuminati was a scientific organisation who were against religion's views on science...they weren't no terrorists, they were smart people...

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i wasn't really pointing it at just terrorist organizations, but i see why you thought that....i really was just using groups of "secret organizations" that are blamed for the many failures of our government


but yeh, thanks for the feedback guys, i really appreciate it, and i'll hit you guys up first chance i get

don't leave without feeding!

lalalala

gd drop
i ws feelin this
gd wordplay
gd flow
gdish structure
i liked this piece

keep @ it

read and reveiewwww plz

pooppp that

word you havent got too much feed i see, well this was a nice piece man it was very complex i didnt see anything really bad that stuck out, you deffinately got structure and flow, some nice use of your multies and vocab i wouldnt say you perfect yet but you gettin there keep workin at it to get better, id give this a 9/10, hit my OM up in sig please need some good feed,

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This was a good peice, sort of a common topic but i liked thr way you told your views, nice choice of words, good multies and a decent structure. as someone said before dont do it in blue next time, sort of distracting. Keep It Up.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271070

read n feed. Thanks.

Closed. Don't up old stuff.