Let's Clear The Air

Verse 1:

Girl calm it, we'll rock this town, just need to breathe out
Respiration gets faster as yo let me pull your pants down
Let's hit the sack, now let's play games to make you shout
But damn trout! That marine-like smell is so damed foul
Do you wash down there? The question earns me a scowl
"Fuck your bed-games, I ain't gon' be cleaning my bowel"
Grabs a towel, covers that thing and the atmosphere clears
Intoxication levels disappear, no longer for my life I fear
She sits on the bed's end, and to the floor her eyes peer
Deflated dear depression directs dis deathly diversion,
With a knife point, she awaits to me the lord in person,
So I'm stuck with a decaying carcass, let's clear the air son

Hook (to the tune of She Will Be Loved by Maroon 5) :

I don't like spending night to day
Out in the garden in the pouring rain
Tryin' to get rid of bodies' signs
Cops will discover me in my due time, so
Let's Clear The Air
Let's Clear The Air.

Verse 2:

Several weeks down the line, sir my conscience hurts
What if I'd just gone down on her, could it be worse?
No answers from God, he's pre-occupied by converts
No concerts, I'm too worried to leave my close 'premises'
Still I reminisce, how's a girl made my life hell to live?
I'm insecure, but do I deserve to feel like a terrorist?
I should neglect it, and so my life continues regardless
Walk in the street and it feels my reputation's tarnished
"There's man-beast from who's hand that girl vanished"
Chatter's harmless, then the town increases in tension,
Front page articles my ex-girlfriend's a 'Missing Person'
My calm turn into a red-mist, so let's clear the air son.

Hook:

I just hate spending all my days
Walkin through town in the pouring rain
Inhabitants have all lost their smiles
Seems I'm crazy but my mind just whiles, so
Let's Clear The Air
Let's Clear The Air.

Verse 3 / Outro:

"Missing girl's body was finally excavated last night
From her wounds, I would guess she lost a knife fight
The light for this case came from residential insight,
No recitings, this was no simple copy-cat murder case
Seems the only untouched part, was her wonder face
But here's a disgraceful aroma from her under-lace
There's no trace of a forced entry, this one isn't sexual
It seems that this deathly duel is far more "contextual"
For only a fool would attempt making her genetilia drool
Seems cruel, don't speak of the life-death conversion
But this reporter has experienced this situation in person
it certainly appears there was something in the air son"

Yea, upping and all that, I know someone will leave feed some time.

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lol, i liked this, (admitting i only read first couple of verses because i'm seriously tired) i liked the flow and structure in what i read, it was funny
keep it up D

nice peace man, nice. a couple multi's here which were good. vocab was very nice, its complexity was damn good. when you said "the marine like smell is so damn fouled" from there for a while it had me giggling. the description of the smell was hilarious. then, the second verse came in which brought the more emotion. the emotion was nice. the outro was in quotation marks.. if it was quoted, who from? cuz it was nice also. dope piece man, if i remember.. once December nominations for OM HOF come ill nominate this. it was a very enjoyable read.

Thanks man... the quotation was to make it seem like a reporter was speaking. It was all written by me, last night. I just picked up the pen and wrote it all, freestyle.

Thanks for the feed, feels an honour to be nominated, never had that before. Thanks for that feed... uppin for more people....

it was hot could ogf been better but keep it up

So let me know what needs to be improved, what you liked, what was good, how the flow was, etc. That was hardly feedback man...

this was a pretty different topic adn thats good
rhymes were good and flow was good
stuructre was good but chorus flo and struuctre was a bit off
vocab wasnt that good......not that complex man
a bit simple but still this was hot...feelin ikt
keep it up man....leave feed on my OM..called Respect thanks
peace

You thought my vocab was basic? Well that's cool, I thought in parts it was pretty complex, but that's by-the-by

Thanks for the feed, I'll get to your piece in due course.

It was nice man.....could've been better but you had some good stuff...Emotional was a good role in your piece left me emotional....yeah.......This is a piece were people in a relationship should read to clear there thoughts about people...yep...Nice.

Yea, for real... uppin feed from others...

Up for more feed people.

this is damn hilarious. i've been in those shoes before.
i could almost smell the stank on your bref.
"Deflated dear depression directs dis deathly diversion,"

tiiiighhhhht

Haha.. thanks a lot for that man.

uppin once again

After 7 weeks... uppin again

I really liked the opening verse and i thought it was original that u out a hood into ur piece. I t flowed well and had good transitions.
Reply to my newest piece if u can.

Peace

nice. reppin the uk man cool