Supernatural (0-0) vs Game-Ova (0-0)

LLL Jr. Week 2

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first week went kinda well no shows are gone and cats who showed and who signed up are now in...

same as last week check by wednesday drop by friday come good....if your opponent fails to check but shows then that will be allowed but they will be deducted 2 votes for failure to check.....
so all in all you MUST drop a verse this week.....

last of all voting.....im scrapping the 4 links this week, unless voting activity goes then this is how it will stay and if i catch anyone feeding off the first vote you will have votes deducted...constant offence then i'll boot your ass from the league.....


good luck all

:2thumb:

Im checkin it in now
good luck natural

check. 12?

Ok 12 it is good luck man

i'm just gonna key now since i won't have time tommorow..



A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!
the pain must make ya mad, you'd never pay the rent, hoe
plus his games played out so much.he broke his nintendo!
I'd hate to meet your family, I know ya act lika a rebel,
n' if its game over..s'cause you died on The Next Level!
you're gonna need sum contacts, by then you'll see straight
sum1 musta ate ya burger n' fries..since that's wendy be late
enough playing around,want in the mag?just keep it down,
of course we've all seen playedboys..guess its not a secret now!
one more punch to ya face, it'll leave ya down for thirty minutes,
but who'd let ya fight when its obvious you were never in it?

This fag has a pair of tits on him so how are u so
‘Natural’/
Luckily my rhymes never come to a ‘rear-end’’or u would fuck it up the
Ass-hole/

So far u got the people on ur side but in my eyes ur juss…
Over-rated/
U win by ur ‘dick-riders’ that juss shows how much u have
Online-dated/

See he spit fast he wanted to get his assed kicked n get the pain done
In-a-hurry/
Man u needed every second to take the win…So than why did u
Spit-early?/

U cant expect to win with played out shit it’s as old as a
antique/
U couldn’t make something nice? Damn man u had
a-hole-week/

-------------------Game-Over(finisher)---------------------------
Your mom is embarrassed of u that’s why she has u wear a mask everyday is
‘Hallo-ween’/
Throw u punches ill doge em not because they hurt I jus dun no Where ur hands
‘Have-been’/

Man u have no originality at least put a good title
under-ur-name/
When he spit his verse he must had his errection cause that’s the
Hardest-he-came/

A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!
(lol good opener)
the pain must make ya mad, you'd never pay the rent, hoe
plus his games played out so much.he broke his nintendo!
(alright)
I'd hate to meet your family, I know ya act lika a rebel,
n' if its game over..s'cause you died on The Next Level!
(2 be honest, i dont get it)
you're gonna need sum contacts, by then you'll see straight
sum1 musta ate ya burger n' fries..since that's wendy be late
(aight)
enough playing around,want in the mag?just keep it down,
of course we've all seen playedboys..guess its not a secret now!
(lol)
one more punch to ya face, it'll leave ya down for thirty minutes,
but who'd let ya fight when its obvious you were never in it?
(alright closer)

Besides me not gettin somthing, it was a DECENT verse.
Quotables:

Quote:

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A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!
the pain must make ya mad, you'd never pay the rent, hoe
plus his games played out so much.he broke his nintendo!

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VS



This fag has a pair of tits on him so how are u so
‘Natural’/
Luckily my rhymes never come to a ‘rear-end’’or u would fuck it up the
Ass-hole/
(naw... gay...)
So far u got the people on ur side but in my eyes ur juss…
Over-rated/
U win by ur ‘dick-riders’ that juss shows how much u have
Online-dated/
(lol good concept)
See he spit fast he wanted to get his assed kicked n get the pain done
In-a-hurry/
Man u needed every second to take the win…So than why did u
Spit-early?/
(that doesnt ryhme dude.)
U cant expect to win with played out shit it’s as old as a
antique/
U couldn’t make something nice? Damn man u had
a-hole-week/
(gay again)

First, your structure... let it all flow together on one line, ur punches wernt
to long to do that.. LOOSE THE /!!! theres no need for it. I know when
A senctance ends. Secondly, work on your flow. As of now... its like
im white water rafting.......upstream.
Qoutables:... Well... cause it was funny.

Quote:

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So far u got the people on ur side but in my eyes ur juss…Over-rated
U win by ur ‘dick-riders’ that juss shows how much u have Online-dated

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V/ Super- Harder punches, better flow concepts n everything else.

iight i respect ur thoughts^^^ Gettin this to the top for more votes

A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!
Nice


I'd hate to meet your family, I know ya act lika a rebel,
n' if its game over..s'cause you died on The Next Level!
Alright

They won the battle.

Game got a fucked up structure and didnt punch.

V/Super

Vote on me Vs Trahedy

Personally i disagree with me havin no punches but i respect ur opinion

Uppin this

A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!

I wasn't feeling this, the wording was way off.

the pain must make ya mad, you'd never pay the rent, hoe
plus his games played out so much.he broke his nintendo!

Concept was ok, but wording was weird.

I'd hate to meet your family, I know ya act lika a rebel,
n' if its game over..s'cause you died on The Next Level!

Didn't like this.

you're gonna need sum contacts, by then you'll see straight
sum1 musta ate ya burger n' fries..since that's wendy be late

Nah, wasn't feeling this either.

enough playing around,want in the mag?just keep it down,
of course we've all seen playedboys..guess its not a secret now!

Really overdoing it on the nameplays.

one more punch to ya face, it'll leave ya down for thirty minutes,
but who'd let ya fight when its obvious you were never in it?

Too simple.


This fag has a pair of tits on him so how are u so
‘Natural’/
Luckily my rhymes never come to a ‘rear-end’’or u would fuck it up the
Ass-hole/

Played.

So far u got the people on ur side but in my eyes ur juss…
Over-rated/
U win by ur ‘dick-riders’ that juss shows how much u have
Online-dated/

Didn't like this.

See he spit fast he wanted to get his assed kicked n get the pain done
In-a-hurry/
Man u needed every second to take the win…So than why did u
Spit-early?/

Weak.

U cant expect to win with played out shit it’s as old as a
antique/
U couldn’t make something nice? Damn man u had
a-hole-week/

Weak again.

-------------------Game-Over(finisher)---------------------------
Your mom is embarrassed of u that’s why she has u wear a mask everyday is
‘Hallo-ween’/
Throw u punches ill doge em not because they hurt I jus dun no Where ur hands
‘Have-been’/

Nah, don't use anything to do with masturbating or cumming as they are hella played.

Man u have no originality at least put a good title
under-ur-name/
When he spit his verse he must had his errection cause that’s the
Hardest-he-came/

Another cum line, weak.


Supernatural took this easy. I wasn't feeling Game's verse at all, he had the annoying played proboard type of style that I dislike. Super was better even though I thought his wording was pretty off throughout most of his verse.

v/ Supernatural

A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!

vs.

nothing.

i mean, seriously, this battle was way to one sided. game, fix that structure and work on punches. start looking at other battles or the helps thread. just keep elevating and maybe should battle in FL for a lil bit then come back. good job by super though. keep that shit up.

v/ super

upp for more votes.

A wack one? ya trapped son, bring ya sail down n' let me sea,
willy musta hit the rocks ....cause this whale never be free!

vs.

nothing.

other dude whole verse was off like strechted and hist structure was kinda fucked your flow kinda messed me up as for Super He Came Decent First Bar was Nice I Like It 3rd bar and first won it for you game ova u need to go flip yo ass out this tournament werd cuz you aint meet the requirnments werd life pz
v/sup

supa had a few punches that were up to par
a couple of the concepts were almost wasted because of poor wording
game-ova.....my god change your fucking structure! you didn't even throw any punches so there's really not much i can say

v/ supernatural

Supernatural wins

Supernatural (1-0)
Game-Ova (0-1)