Thor (1-0) vs Antonio Banderas (1-0)

LLL Jr. Week 2

Word

first week went kinda well no shows are gone and cats who showed and who signed up are now in...

same as last week check by wednesday drop by friday come good....if your opponent fails to check but shows then that will be allowed but they will be deducted 2 votes for failure to check.....
so all in all you MUST drop a verse this week.....

last of all voting.....im scrapping the 4 links this week, unless voting activity goes then this is how it will stay and if i catch anyone feeding off the first vote you will have votes deducted...constant offence then i'll boot your ass from the league.....


good luck all

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Shit... I was just talkin to Thor bout this

Checkin in...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...99&postcount=9
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...31&postcount=6
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...2&postcount=11
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...89&postcount=7

Go 14 lines fuck, If I give you 20 your nose might start to bleed

14 is good I get 3 line structure punches count as 2 lines...

Ya crew's face is deformed & hiddeous, see what drugs do?
the vision of Written Warfare must be blurry,
.......................He's hardly seen with back to back Ws
Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it
Even his notes are off, ur a little flat when ya singin
Been quotin the Renegade so long U even voiced his opinion
Bitchin so much he became one, and bought a teeny purse
Lost by a hair so many times,
.......................Ud think he was waxed by bikini amateurs
Ya writtens a jargon, symbolic of Twisted recruitment
Yeah he's leavin a permanent mark,
.......................even has the ink stains to prove it
Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

Somethings wrong with this computer... UPPIN this to see if this thread goes to the top...

Take ur time Thor, u got til Friday. I only posted cuz I'm busy...

ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
dont pull a liar and say i suck, and that im played as shit
or ill leave u hangin on msn when u ask for elivation tips!
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand

whored

v..thor.

ant

Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it


eh its ok

Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

those were kinda nice.

Thor

too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors

poor wording but coo

ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand




VOTE THOR his 2 punches hit harder than the other dudes 3.

simple.

nothing great tho :(.

vote thor

didnt get the structure properly on banderas' verse

Ya crew's face is deformed & hiddeous, see what drugs do?
the vision of Written Warfare must be blurry,
.......................He's hardly seen with back to back Ws
-lol decent punch..
Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it
-nah not feelin this one much..
Even his notes are off, ur a little flat when ya singin
Been quotin the Renegade so long U even voiced his opinion
-lol this was alright..
Bitchin so much he became one, and bought a teeny purse
Lost by a hair so many times,
.......................Ud think he was waxed by bikini amateurs
-another decent punch once again..
Ya writtens a jargon, symbolic of Twisted recruitment
Yeah he's leavin a permanent mark,
.......................even has the ink stains to prove it
-didnt see much of a punch in this line, but gyea decent bar..
Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
-lol gyea im feelin this..
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown
-aiite pretty cool

vs.

ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
-lmfao funny punch yo.
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
-lol decent bar yo.
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
-haha another funny punch..
dont pull a liar and say i suck, and that im played as shit
or ill leave u hangin on msn when u ask for elivation tips!
-lol must be a personal ah? cool..
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
-nice.. i like it
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
-nah not likin' it too much
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand
-lmfao. sick closer.. nice

this battle was pretty much one sided shit.. AB came w/ mainly decent punches and lines.. where thor came more stronger w/ the punches.. he had a couple of dope lines in there.. AB started off kinda slow.. but picked shit up in the last 4 lines.. but he had to come more consistent to beat thor in this.. thor came decent or above decent in every line except one.. you doin good lately yo.. gj..

v/thor

pz..

Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it
Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

vs.

too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand

ab, good verse. some good concepts and nice punches, wasn't consistant though.
thor, dope verse. harder punches and way more consistancy with them.

v/ thor

v/thor. will explain in mag.. but good battle guys.

Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

vs.

too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand


vote -Thor.

v/ thor..

V/thor

for coming better

punches hit & personals

good shit thor, ant work on ya shit

is that it

8-0

Dam, y'all dropped early

AB

Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it

You had a lot of punches that were very close to being quotable, but they were killed by the wording. I was very impressed by your verse overall though and I think you'll go far in this just word your punches right because there not hitting how you want them to.

Vs.

Thor

the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand


Again you came very fresh with the concepts man. Most of your punches hit hard and were very witty. As long as you dont get burnt with concepts which I doubt will happen you should go far in this. You've been very consistent man, keep it up.

v//Thor

Thanks for all the feedback...

Finally, I'm losing by fair votes.. I aint never going back to the FL...

Uppn for anymore feedback

ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand
^im tired of you flipping the right hand line
vs

Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

well nothen thats dope i see but thor came more consistant in this battle and antonio just lost it and came back at the end

v/thor

Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

vs

too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand

not a bad battle, but thor had better verse overall, cuz i can't say he was actually better

V/thor

AB:

Sorry man, but you didn't have any quotables.
You did have a potential for an ok punch;

Yeah he's leavin a permanent mark,
.......................even has the ink stains to prove it

^^^ should have changed ink for shit.

Thor:
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!

Overall:
Pretty weak match. AB had some ideas but didn't do shit with them.
Thor looked like he quickly keyed a verse, because most of it was
kinda shit. Cept the line I quoted. But he looked like he could
post a little more fire. Not a good battle, nor a really bad one.
Props to both for showing.

Vote:Thor

Even his notes are off, ur a little flat when ya singin
Been quotin the Renegade so long U even voiced his opinion
Bitchin so much he became one, and bought a teeny purse
Lost by a hair so many times,
.......................Ud think he was waxed by bikini amateurs

vs

ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
dont pull a liar and say i suck, and that im played as shit
or ill leave u hangin on msn when u ask for elivation tips!
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!

v/ thor

Antonio:

Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown

vs.

Thor:

too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand

Pretty good battle. Looking foward to some more shit from both of you. Thor just had better concepts and wording. He won this slightly.

V/Thor

14-0 :)

Antonio
Ya crew's face is deformed & hiddeous, see what drugs do?
the vision of Written Warfare must be blurry,
.......................He's hardly seen with back to back Ws
nah...
Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it
meh...concept was cool. wording fucked it up.
Even his notes are off, ur a little flat when ya singin
Been quotin the Renegade so long U even voiced his opinion
meh, weak personal.
Bitchin so much he became one, and bought a teeny purse
Lost by a hair so many times,
.......................Ud think he was waxed by bikini amateurs
concept was weak, wording didnt help it either.
Ya writtens a jargon, symbolic of Twisted recruitment
Yeah he's leavin a permanent mark,
.......................even has the ink stains to prove it
nah...
Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
meh....just meh..
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown
weak closer...

Overall...just not up to parr. You had some good ideas with most of your concepts, but your wording needs work. Didnt really have any flow to your verse when I was reading it out loud. Just work on wording.

Thor
ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
meh...
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
lol, i liked the wording on this concept
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
meh....kinda weak
dont pull a liar and say i suck, and that im played as shit
or ill leave u hangin on msn when u ask for elivation tips!
personal
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
hair concept is cool, not dope or anything, just cool
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
i liked this. first line connected with he punch. with out it there was no punch. good wording
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand
meh....

Overall. You were consistant Thor. I like the way you word your concepts. Good shit nig.

Vote Thor.

Just Better.
Nig.

Crucial Were You Be At damn like you pop up unoccationally anyways yeah my vote said it all

Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet

vs

the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand

Banderas change your structure because it just fucks up your punches. I didn't like the milk line at all, the G String line was ok but the wording was wack, the lock punch was cool and with better wording coulda been dope. Thor you came consistent and did enough to win. I really like the fall off line and the cocky line was cool too. I didn't feel the TNL line and the msn personal was ok but woulda been better with wordplay.

V/ Thor

Ya crew's face is deformed & hiddeous, see what drugs do?
the vision of Written Warfare must be blurry,
.......................He's hardly seen with back to back Ws
Lol nice...
Thor aint religious, baptizing words? they get boo dissed
Would tell ya to stick thread up ur ass,
....................But ya girlfriend's G String beat me to it
Hmm ok...
Even his notes are off, ur a little flat when ya singin
Been quotin the Renegade so long U even voiced his opinion
lol Ok...
Bitchin so much he became one, and bought a teeny purse
Lost by a hair so many times,
.......................Ud think he was waxed by bikini amateurs
Lol good...
Ya writtens a jargon, symbolic of Twisted recruitment
Yeah he's leavin a permanent mark,
.......................even has the ink stains to prove it
Decent...
Kids got no bars, ya broke to the point even ya poor sweat
Yeah, RB got you on lock
...........that's why no crew forums open up the doors yet
lol...
Straight rippin through (T)s, now a (hor) status is shown
Are you crowned as Double D..,
....................or did you just milk yourself to the thrown
Nice finisher..

Vs.

ima whore ya so badly, ull come up short, you aren't tight
this would be 1 hell a' ride,....
...but u dont meet the required height
Ok..
the seasons be changin and your still not elevated, ya soft
Yea winters almost on but it doesnt mean YOU should fall off
Lol decent...
too bad we gota up key verses, cuz i could use a 1 liner...
that would leave you fucking flat like titty sex with minors
Lmao dope, best bar of the battle
dont pull a liar and say i suck, and that im played as shit
or ill leave u hangin on msn when u ask for elivation tips!
lol...
my harshness will terrify u good, this is far from close, son
ill scare the hair off your head cuz i wont win by just one
Good punch..
TNL dont need u, they see ur on a dead end route, which
is the ONLY reason they still havent turned on you, bitch!
Nah...
ill be affraid if this fags over confident, scared as shit, damn
cuz the last time he got cocky there was also his right hand
Lmao again a pretty dope punch and a strong finisher

Vote/Thor For his titty sex line and his finisher, the rest of his verse was consistant and those 2 punches won him the battle, whereas AB just came wiv consistency. But good battle guys

vote thor,

antonio you had a stretched line, that fucked up ya flow, first punch was good, could've done without "with", but still good second wasn't as great, but ok, renegade was alright, the amatuer line was stretched, ink stain wasn't good, crew was okay, last and first punch was the best of ya verse,

thor first punch was good, second punch good, sex with minors line was okay, not that great tho, third line nice personal, foruth seen it before, it was okay tho, didn't like the fifth and sixth punch was okay coulda been worded better

antonio that stretched line lost it for you, so watch those, and try to stay consistent with your lines, thor yours was good but rewording punch 3 and 6 would've made it better so check your wording.

vote thor

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Originally Posted by Liljay921

Crucial Were You Be At damn like you pop up unoccationally anyways yeah my vote said it all

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yeh i come around every now and then. ima be active now. once im in this league at least.

kinda left rb for some other sites. =)

still true to rapbattles though.

good battle guys.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Crucial.

yeh i come around every now and then. ima be active now. once im in this league at least.

kinda left rb for some other sites. =)

still true to rapbattles though.

good battle guys.

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damn i been trying to leave this site but i aint seen no otha good ones but werd good to see ya back

Thor wins

Thor (2-0)
Antonio Banderas (1-1)