automatic (1-0) vs Macabre (1-0)

LLL Jr. Week 2

Word

first week went kinda well no shows are gone and cats who showed and who signed up are now in...

same as last week check by wednesday drop by friday come good....if your opponent fails to check but shows then that will be allowed but they will be deducted 2 votes for failure to check.....
so all in all you MUST drop a verse this week.....

last of all voting.....im scrapping the 4 links this week, unless voting activity goes then this is how it will stay and if i catch anyone feeding off the first vote you will have votes deducted...constant offence then i'll boot your ass from the league.....


good luck all

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Yea.

Check.

10 lines

Got shit to do this week, been very busy so i gotta post my verse early. It'd be appreciated if u did the same. Goodluck.


Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.

lets get some votes.

auto

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows

coo set and punch

here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont

agen not amazing but i liked it



mac

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!

true and hurt him

If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving

boom best so far

Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.

blah not bad

VOTE MAC JUST...and i say just becuase his two punches hit harder but auto came more consistent, one more dope punch from auto and he would of had this, and btw kid you could be somthing very nice.

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
Windows wordplay is very played
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
not too bad, but he's kinda considered dope now so this is kinda fake
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
nah, just nothing special about this
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
reaching greatness is okay, but ya executed it poorly.. maybe you coulda done a punchline something like this, "Your tryin' ya best to reach greatness, but ya only 4 feet tall"
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
don't use lines saying like "my rhymes blow you away" in a punchline and statements like that. This woulda been good maybe with rewording

vs.

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
word, hits hard cuz it's true
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
pretty decent
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
lol, i feel ya coulda worded this better tho
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
pretty good once again, but enough nameplays
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.
aight, but follow your heart or whatever is played

Overall, I felt automatic came for the most part played and just needs to work on executing his concepts better. Mac coulda come better if he wanted to, but he came decent here and easily enough to take this with some simple and effective punches.

Vote - Mac

Auto

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
(Woulda been better if you said window, because win dows don't reall make sense. Anyway windows punches are played.)
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
(Nah not hard hitting and Mac is good now so it's a weak personal)
Just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
(Where's the punch?)
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
(Nah not feeling this, played concept)
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
(Don't use self glorification in text battles as the punchline)

Mac

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
(Haha nice opener)
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
(Ok)
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
(Could been worded better but was pretty decent)
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
(Nah sorry some nameplays are cool but I didn't like this)
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.
(Weak, played and simple)

Easy win for Macabre really, Austomatic came poorly executed and played, though he did show some signs of potential. Mac had a few nice punches at the start of his verse but I didn't like the last 2 lins, anyway he didn't need to come that dope here and still won comfortably.

V/ Mac

Vote Mac

Hadda a nice opener

decent verse & was more consistant

Auto had some dcent lines but nothin really hardhitting

Matic

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
...played plus worded badly
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
not hard hitting, very basic
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
nah
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
played
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
self G

Mac

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
lmfao
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
decent
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
nah
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
average
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace
witty but weak

V/Mac for obvious reasons

Mac request to battle me for next week I wana face you

just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
This could have been dope if you worded it better. Get witty man you can make some of your punches dope as fuck.

Vs.

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
lmao, because itz so true
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
This was chill. Wording could be a lot better

v//Mac. He came fresher.

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
(nope, weak opener, need to make them stronger and its played)
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
(its ok, but still doesnt hit hard)
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
(no, gay jokes are played unless there funny, this isnt)
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
("under me and below me lines are played and it didnt flow)
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
(this is ok, but you need rewording and to think it through better)

vs.

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
(good opener)
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
(decent punch, concept worked)
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
(weak, definattly needed rewording)
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
(not to bad)
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.
(meh, not to bad but could of finished stronger)

Overall - Mac gets this, he came more consistent even tho his punches fell away towards the end of his verse, auto....alot of your punches need rewordign and if they were slightly used differently they'd be less played and pretty good.

V/Mac

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
-lol gyea i like it..
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
-decent line.. not much of a punch
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
-nah, weak and sorta played..
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
-lol not bad.. cool punch
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
-nah ... dont like it

vs.

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
-lol funny...
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
-lol not bad.. good concept
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
-dont really like this..
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
-lol nice punch
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.
-decent line yo.

overall.. this battle wasnt too bad.. auto had a couple of nice lines in there... but mac just came more consistent.. windows lines are kinda played to me.. but it worked well in this since his name was mac lol.. auto has the concepts and ideas.. just needs to figure out how to use and execute them better.. but gj.. mac just had better punches.. n came more stronger and consistent..

v/mac

pz..

Auto
Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
^^ coulda been worded better but funny

Mac
I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace
^^ opener was harsh, closer was nicely worded

V/ Mac... Harsher and more consistent in my eyes.dope battle guys

Thanks for votin everybody.

And good battle Mac.

Word. Good battle. You got potential dude, just work on those concepts.

v/mac.. will explain in mag. good battle.

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
bad setup, nice delivery
here since 04', which is also the ONLY year u considederd dope
i hope YOU remember wen u were ill, cuz unfortunatly WE dont
he is dope, but this is still funny
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
i get it but its not good
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me
good concept needed some re-wording
voters like my punches and style, ur wackness just doesnt appease
my rhymes blow u away like a fuckin hurricane......macs...a breeze
this seems like two setup lines, where is the delivery line?

vs.

I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
LOL, so true
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
nah not feelin this
Fuck ya fake mob crew, you stupid posing wigger cunts, n Auto,
How you gonna launder cash when ya CLOTHES stay dirty for months.
Dont like the rhyme scheme, but 2nd line is good
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
nice play on the name
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.
aight nothing to special here

v/Mac basically cause to me it came down to the openers and Mac's was more personal and true which made it hit harder.

If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.

vs

mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows
just give up now faggot, ur future in LLL Jr. is lookin grim
queer took it the wrong way wen i told Mac i was crushin him
Could Reworded it^

v/mac his punches was just harder and wittier came more consistant in this good attempt auto pz

uppin votes.

Automatic!
Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows

~Vs~

Macabre
If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving

Auto- shit, nice opener!- i wish the rest of the verse were that complex- mostly basic 1-2 punches- u had like one other nice personal (2004 line)- decent closer, kinda played, but not bad- overall good verse not much filler- nice n consistant-

Mac- I liked that auto/drunk driving line- coulda hit harder with rewording tho- decent opener- the off n on multis really fucked with ur flow- ur launder bar was streched as hell- nice with the wordplay throughout- but the punches were still soft-


Vote Automatic more consistant punches throughout his verse-

12-1, Mac.

lol

V. Mac

If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.

ROFL^^

Just to clarify a little bit on every single person talking about rewording, someone else is not going to reword a concept the same exact way that someone wants them to. That would be biting. Heads say, yea reword this, but yo thats mostly the kids saying that that could not even come up with that concept in the first place. The fact is people word things the way they do because it is original to them. I mean shit, when you read the line, do you want him to say exactly what you would of said? No, people need to put thier own twist on it.

If this kid says he's the shit, then the punk's lying,
cuz I'll have auto in a ditch like I went drunk driving.

vs

Mac, despite ur name, ur no fuckin comp to me, ho
aint it obvious wen it come to battles, Mac cant Windows

V/Auto, liked the line better. No hate, but I don't see why everyone thought the ditch line was so dope, seemed kinda bleh to me.

uppity

vote mac, he more consistent than auto, auto's last like 3 bars didn't hit too well or at all in my opinion, greatest punch was more on the glory tip than actually being aimed at mac, so auto you need to watch that, mac just consistently attacked his opponent, which won it for him.

auto work on staying consistent you coulda had him.

vote mac

Auto:
ull never be among the best, this, anyone here will agree
sure ur reachin greatness, but thats only cuz ur under me

Mac:
I'm dope as fuck, so Auto ain't nothing to fear yo,
'n you rock ya record in ya sig, like HALF THE LEAGUE AIN'T 1-0!
Explain how this herb's gonna front like his flow's sweet,
Shit...
I'm quick to lay out mat like setting up for gymnast meets.
Why you gotta front on me? Dude, don't worry 'bout disgrace..
Nigga, follow your heart..I threw it over there someplace.

Overall:
Well, Auto, you had some funny ideas man, but they didn't
make me laugh at all. Your punch that I quoted was quite
played but it still made me laugh. Mac', your wording is bad
which hinders a lot of people battling. But your punches
are hella funny specially the gymnist one. Creativity is qualiy.
Props for both showing.

Vote:Macabre

AuTOmAt!c- The 'Windows' line was your crowning moment, but apparently that concept is played, so pretty much your stuff was OK throughout, nothing particularly creative shone through.

Mac- Far from your usual calibre, but you had enough humour in your jabs to get a few chortles.

Vote: Macabre

Mac Wins

Macabre (2-0)
Automatic (1-1)