Beautiful Rose

i be on that emo tip :noor:

Beautiful Rose


taking nature's time, the beauty that grows

blooming so slow, that's the beautiful rose



afraid of rushing, unable to say when to stop

from being seeds imbedded in rocks

'till the time petals of fragrance would drop



the type of rose that's wrapped around at the heel

the type of rose that'll stand out in a field

the type of rose that love fools would follow

the type of rose used as a cure for sorrows

the type of rose releiving those wrapped in stress

the type of rose given to those lacking happiness



oh beautiful rose, you're like a beautiful artwork

providing us life similar to how hearts work

beautiful rose, thornless and smooth

worth more than a diamond

worth more than a few

sometimes worth nothing, you're as plain as they come

still i cherish your beauty in more ways than one



taking nature's time, you're still the beauty that grows

but beautiful rose, why are you blooming so slow?

beauty is your potential, though you're hiding it truly

beautiful rose please bloom and grow

and provide us your beauty

- Marvin

got bored . half hour. feed please. :boobies:

After I read this piece one word came to my mind. Elegant. The wording was elegant, the flow was beautiful, the structure was flawless. There was a beautiful emotion I felt as I read through this piece. This was a sweet thoughtful piece. I liked it a lot. Very nice drop.

thanks a lot, appreciate it.

bizzump.

Different. Different style of writing, I liked it. Your imagery was on point definitely. It was cool, and I liked a few lines and how your rhymed everything.

Good job.

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I thought this was dope.

First two line caught my attention straight away, the rhyme scheme was catchy.

Imagery was dope, especially the second part, with the list of "the type of rose......"


Shit was ill.

Deserves PSHOF.

Marv could be a poet :)

w00tyness.thanks people. howlar. a few more feeds pleasza.

WOW...I don't know how to explain this, but damn that poem was dope. Stay up and keep droppin

Perfect meter man, you hit it dead on. Everything was so masterfully put together and you had really good connotative use in here, especially when you described what a rose can symbolize. Definitely no new idea to poetry, but still you crafted a great poem out of something that seems almost too cliche usually. Good job.

thanks man, that means a lot, cool feed. i'll peep your pieces tomorrow or sumthing.

this piece was really touching felt it alot. nice concept. i felt the whole script. structure was well done, very clear to understand. the image was also clear for me nice piece....................

Love this poem, Wasnt a depressing one and it was a love poem, this drop was one of the best ones ive read, keep it up *God bless*

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Very nice... Solid through and through.
I wasn't to impressed with the way you ended it though. I was expecting more at the end. This would be a priceless peice if you re-configured the ending. I'm not saying change what you already have. I'm sayin add to it for a more spectacualar ending. Thx for the read!

StayUp.

Awwie Majik.. i kno this was an old thread.. like really old but i still wanted 2 give u props on the site, that was really beautiful the imagery was so beautiful and so was the emotive lang *bluetooth* lol :)

Had a very good flow, Wide range of vocab, needed no extra work, flawless strucure, wich is importent, had a vide to it that i really felt, good peice

This was laid out nicely. I'm not much for mushy stuff and I thinks its because I have trouble writting it myself. Its all depressing and shit. But, anywho I like the way you laid it out and you used some good description.

lol this is still up. w00t.
v/ HOF forever.

thanks for the feed peoples