Thought You Was Never Missed

Thought You Was Never Missed
As a Young Kid I always Thought That I was Never Missed
Huges and Kisses,All The Trippen,While Im Always Wishing
Double Deeds,That Always Preceed,When You See Me
Trying to be The Man,That I Seen,While I Was Dreaming
I Never Had a Person to Lean On,While I was Growing Up
Being The One Pressured folding Cuz,but Im Holding Brah
Thought About My Life,Cuz Im Running From Food and Shelter
Reasonings About My Fam's,Cuz We Fight Like Ruthless Weather
Cleaning Like a Maid,but for your Mother Thats What Boys Do
Thinking About Your Self,So Tell Me What Your Moms Going Threw
Thought You was Never Wanted,but Dont You got a place to sleep
I'D Probably be on the street,If my momma wasnt Rasing Me
Sad to Be,But Its True,Cuz Im The Only Man In My family
If My Pops was around,We'd all Probably Live happily
Know What it Feels Like to Live off of Child's Support
Like That Same Feeling When Ya Women Wants Divorced
Pack Up Your Bags,Is The Last Thing You want to Be Herd
You Know In Real Life,You Know in Your Heart That You Are Scared
Place to Be,rasing Me,and a Place Thats Just Maid For Me
Your Always Missed,But the Tears inside is Hard To See

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this piece was nice. this shit made me think 2pac would write a rhyme like this. flow and structure were real good all the way through. stay up, one...........

yeah people sa i right like tupac some cuz shit is real werd thanx one if you need me PM me ill teach you homie werd

Straight drop dog.. You've brought some good stuff to the table. you delivered a well written verse and the positioning of word usage was descent. This was a descent drop homie...

werd thanx uppin

uppin this ish

Well written verse, i hadnt heard of you before this but that piece is quite impressive bro

Keep at it , you should be a good topical writer

i agree with antonio....this was a pretty descnet peice and it had sum good stuff in here..excellent flow and stuructre...i'm imprressed by this..rhymes wwere..jus keep at it...descnet drop....keep elevating....peace

werd uppin

Omg Uppin This Ish Mufukka

This is straight. nice structure, everything flowed rigght where it should be, except for some places. the content was described above-par, but i also felt like it could have been detailed a lot more. would have been better if it was just a tab longer. anyways, i enjoyed the read. peace.

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yo made me feel what you were sayin thats something alot of cats
lack u have talent to express good emotion
good flow u show add some complexed ryhmes schemes
to add to uour peice, personly this piece don't need it but
just consider it the topic was good, u expressed original thought
keep elevating

nice stuff here starit from the haeart... and thats how it should be... i like how you had great emotion and imagery carried you're flow nicely... keep at it make em a little longer dope peice man... i see alot of potential here...

It was nice but not the type of style of rap I like.Emotion was there..I just think you need to be more original.I mean alot of people do these but then again it came from the heart.Alrite shit just be more original with ya shit...

i thought it was a pretty good drop, i thought the structure could be better, the structure kinda made me feel like i was reading a poem but all in all il liked it, keep'em droppin dog.

structure really didnt mean nothen its more of the flow thanx err body for the feed uppin