topic: loving someone
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topic: loving someone
no crew/ hate/d/r votes
no recyclin rhymes
due 3:00 pm today
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Check in, I'm going to sleep, though. I'll have it up by 3:00.
In a Ladie's Voice
Loving some one is suppose to be the best thing in life
but how is love shown when ur constantly beatin ur wife
u say it was a mistake.... but u did it more than twice
what makes it worse is that every night our son have to see this
when is this gonna stop, that question leaves me speechless
this is not a relatioship that a wife should have with her husband
sometimes when im alone i wonder where the love went
I turned somewhere else to find that one special comfort
i finally found it
I never knew drugz can be love cause its nothin but a substance
I thought about my life and my son but I ignored my conscience
I took a long sniff and waited for the warm sensation
i never felt like this in years and it was good to have it back
never knew all this could come from just a sniff of crack
I never thought things would end up this way
now I was taking 3 to 6 packs a day
i was getting skinny and ugly
but the love i got made me feel happy
my son was startin to not recognize me
my husband lost interset in me sexually
I realize that this was not the life i want to be livin
at the blink of an eye i didnt notice what was happenin
it was too late.....doctor told me i was dyin
i never did anything wrong, i just wanted to be love
later i realize the solution to the problem was to get a divorce
Narrator's voice
How can love be shown if Love was never known
Could it be denied if it were never tried
Could Love be real if we didnt feel
Would love die if we never cry
Would it last if we said goodbye
Could it be expressesd if no one confessed
can it be protected if its not respected
could love be royal if we were never royal
could it exist without a kiss
could love be true if there was never you
Love is a deep..ineffable feeling of affection
You are a goddess..‘cause you are reeling in perfection
Meeting you was a blessing..and I thank God every day
Girl, you blow me away…in every single possible way
There’s so much I want to say..but it is hard to express
But when you came in my life, life instantly became a success
You are the only one I’ll caress for all time and eternity
I love your appearance but more importantly, I love you internally
Girl, you burnin’ me ‘cause you so hot like an infernal domain
Your personality has me addicted as if I was snorting cocaine
Life is hard, I can’t complain because you maintain and hold my joy
You authentic, you ain’t another girl playin’ my mind like a toy
You showed me what there is to enjoy and to appreciate in life
Girl, I’m a get on one knee now, “will you please be my wife?”
Bump #1.
uppin 1
skull breaker - i was feelin this shit! alot! good drop. it was one of them verses that wasnt borin and kinda dragged u in.
jas - i was feelin this too but not as much as skulls. it was an ok drop couldve won a few topicals with this drop but it wasnt good enough for the win here.
v/ skull breaker, i was feelin this alot more. vocab was good and it flowed well.
no hate...
this was a alright topical
skull ur verse was iight u kept me interested and i wanted to finish reading it when u do a topical thats how u win capture ur readers and u did just that i also liked how it flowed and ryhmed
jas ur verse was gd to but i wasnt feeling it like i felt skulls im sayin ur verse flowed well and u had gd punches to but skull kept it interesting thats how he won this battle imo
v skull
a this was a hot topical to me i gotta say skull won dis battle cause his shit was deep and like boogie said i wanted to keep reading it.gd shit my nigga keep doing wat u doing
ja ur shit was ok it wasnt hittin as much as skulls was but some of ur punches were simple to when u write u supposed to keep the flow going wit metas and shit like dat but gd shit doe
v/skull
uppin 2
uppin 3
Up your topical battle with Dat, and maybe he will vote on this. :evilgrin:
Both peeps dropped a vicious verse. JasII hit this topic with great flow and vocab usage, while SKull had great metas and wordplay... When it boils down to who held the most interest and attacked the topic better, I have to go out on a limb and say SKULLBREAKER
Vote - skullbreaker
uppin # 4 yo we need votes to close this aight
Both had ok verses...
Skullbreaker had an air about his that made me realise he is searching for what he might feel, if he were in love. This is good, helps to bring out some really meaningful lines.
I liked his structure, it was kind of Kanye-able.. Which fit the fact that he wrote the verse in a non-serious way, and more a 'lets compare love with a sniff of crack' way.
He had OK wording, kinda iffy on the seen it before scale though.
Jas at first glance had the better verse, i really liked his punctuation etc. But after reading into the lines and trying to feel what he meant - i had trouble seeing anything meaningful at all.
It wasnt a bad thing at all, it just pointed out that for all i care, 50 Cent could have wrote it.
Both were very good for the topic, but my vote goes to SkullBreaker for having a better feel to it, and for putting the meaning into my head instead of just being there to read.
Jas, drop a vote on this please. An honest vote.
Me vs. SkullBreaker
Thanks.