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u spit first good luck homey
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unlimited lines
due by midnight today
no dickriders
no crew votes
no hate votes
explain every vote aight
u spit first good luck homey
Midnight your time. Check.
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yo son everywhere u turn life is a fantasy
niggas fakin to be someone just to make people happy
this is not the life that u want to be livin
cause u realize most of ur homies u know, is lyin
now a these days niggas aint what they used to be
cause they'll cut on ur ass like u was some kind of swiss cheese
u cant really trust niggas cause they quick to stab u in the back
back in the days you didnt have to worry about that
now people dont fight 1 on 1..... they just run in pack
u cant even love a girl wit out a question in ur mind
have u thinkin is she faithful and is she really mine
when u sleepin wit her, she might be fantisizing about some nigga
and u wish she was another chick when you sleepin wit her
now u see fantasy exist in this world weather u like it or not
but once u fantasize.... its gonna be hard to stop
fantasizing is like an addiction from some type of drugz
cause when u start its like u cant stop like dudes wit cigarettes habits
i hope u see fantasy is everywhere
so no matter what u do its always gonna be there
so the best thing to do is always live with it
cause sooner or later ur gonna have to do it
Topic: Fantasy.
Damn.. the damp dark cold cuts my breath.. Making it seem as though my own life is yearning my fall..
And for what i aspire.. is too much, too sudden in depth.. My only refuge is my cerebral.. Last thing keeping me warm..
Enticing thoughts swarm.. but i know if i stray then i may lose contact with my soul..
My fingers of gold tips.. i break ice and remove from the darkness, the few moments of happyness - before i start to feel the cold..
I soar.. across meadows of browns, greens, blacks, grays, dirty colours water holes.... to land at my door.
Knowing no more.. than what i had seen - my imagination was pure.. I used to dream up a realm where demand was no more..
Sands of time insecure.. I could follow my instincts.. the barrage of memories was medication for my sore heart..
Yet tore apart by.. by what my eyes saw - loose baggage strolling, lost in their everyday worlds - money is more dark..
Defence is in shambles.. terrorism on all angles.. I follow the right angle - so i can square myself in an amble arena..
Security is my eyes, i keep them closed.. Keeping my fantastic mind clean of an angry demeanor..
And sooner as i approach the runway.. let my take-off gear touch the track..
I remember that the few skylined lights are waiting for me to take my life back..
I lift.. i feel my feathered feet fail to feel the ground... arise without a sound, perspective grows on the world around..
A bright line of thought strays its bound, leaves the centered point and breaks away from the horizons surround..
It makes a dash towards me i catch it - i feel it jolt inside.. I cant wait - the higher i get - the more i get.. its how i feel alive..
Atop a mountain of reds, whites, pinks, yellows, creams, and colours that creed from a happy drive..
I relax back and see my friends dotted among clouds.. I start to shout loud.. but only a whisper amounts..
It seems its all i needed as they float towards me smiling - i grow anxious.. my blinded heart loses its count...
I reach for their hands - they are close! I feel amazing.. Oh im near my bliss atop heavens blasphemous falacy...
I am static.. i cannot move and i scream and yeild to joy! Yet i awaken my eyelids to find it was passed - no more than a fantasy...
Vizzotes.
Skull-not bad for your first time....remember when doin a topical you can take a verse in any direction your own imagination is your limit..your structure and flow was decent...your needed to up your vocab and wordplay....Make sure people are gonna feel your verse...you'll get better, you have a good foundation to start with.
DAT- Like the direction you took your verse, flow was on point, rhyme scheme was good, structure good, overall you had a better drop.....
good topical
v/DAT
i think skull took this even though it was his first time because in dat verse it didnt make sense, was confuse and lost. skull verse was easier to understand and his structure was there, but dat urs wasnt bad it just that u lost me and thats what gave skull the win.
v//skullbreaker
Log off :bored:Quote:
Originally Posted by Lock-Down
Your the reason i wish we had intermediate FL.
*Goes to tell Opey to add a dictionary to the site*
Upping.. Be warned - If you speak as much bullshit as the kid above, i'll just either lose my rag and whore you, or report bullshit voting.
Quite simply, don't bother posting unless you understand simple English Grammar or your more than aqquainted with topicals and why they are different.
2.
Flow:Dat
Structure:Both
Creativty:Dat
Grade Battle: B-
Both Dropped A Good Verse But I Say That DAT Had Allitel Bit More Feeling In Her Verse I Was Vibin To It Alot More Both Dropped Good Tho, I Like The Topic But I Have To Go With Dat
V/Dat
Upping.. 3.
SkullBreaker, you did a descent job, but you didn't really have any creativity in your verse. You flowed pretty well, but you didn't bring a vivid enough verse to beat Dat. Dat, on the other hand, covered the topic pretty well and left nothing for error. His discription of the topic was far more clearer and he easily won this...
Vote - DAT
Upping #4.
Fuck sake.. Last up. Can i have some people voting?
5 and out.
good topical form both of you, good creativity, and flow..dat wins this one because he was deeper, and more creativy, and had good flow...and be sure to hit up the battles in my sig...
i think that DAT is way better and his shit is ok
but i think he is the winner of this battle
yo dis was an ok battle but i give it to dat cuz he had better flow n he made alot of sense wit it vote dat
Yo I gotta say this battle was ight Dat the only reason u aint gettin this vote cuz I think u gotta the abillity to do better Skull for someone who jus started u did kinda good but not anything hot so Ima give this vote to Skull
v//SkullBreaker
Ok this was a decent battle..
Skullbreaker, you had a decent verse, but i think you were lacking a bit on creativity, wordplay, and vocab, which in a topical battle are all important. You did have some pretty good lines, but an advantage for Dat is that she used more lines..
Dat, you had some creative lines, better wordplay and vocab, you seem like a good topical writer this one was definetly a good verse. Room for improvement still , but i think you did enough in this 1 to beat your opponent in every department..
Vote/Dat
good battle u guys r dope