Fuck What You Heard

Im an anti social asshole so im not Closer To My Peers
Im more demented than R Kelly still jerking off to Posters Of Aaliyah
Aborted babies adorn all four Walls Of My House
I picture Mother Theresa when im Balling My Spouse
Then i turn into Hannibal and bite her Clit Off
Then fist her ass with a barb wire Wrist Watch
I abuse mad drugs, right now im Tripping With God
I told my girl i was sensitive, yeah on the Tip Of My Knob
Im dead broke so i let Michael Jackson Rape My Son
What? he said he'd give me a million now the Papers Come
Im such a nice guy when i die my destination is Likely Heaven
Fuck that im a thug i hold more weight than Missy in Ninety Seven
Im a psychotic preacher so whatever i say my Sermon Stands
Me and authority figures get along like DMX and his German Fans
Now shut the fuck up and let the Chorus Stutter
Now im out like that bitch C. DeLores Tucker

Im the sickest bastard around fuck what You Heard
You talk shit literally i just forced fed you Two Terds
If your into drugs give me two fucking Thumbs Up
If your a thug give me two Fucking Guns Up

I just saw my neighbour shooting up he goes through the Day Stressed
My rhymes and outlook on life is more negative than a virgins Aids Test
Let me stay at your house you'll find your Cash Gone
Im the type to rape Cherie with a Tony Blair Mask On
I wanna do a good deed so i can go to heaven and Battle God
Murder every metaphor he musters then kill him with a Cattle Prod
The place that im from motherfucker We Stab Gays
Ive had more court apperances than Whitneys had Rehab Stays
Im embarassed for you slip me a grand i'll write your Next Release
Then i'll steal all your royalties while you Rest In Peace
Oh you really want me to Ghost Write No Brother
Im real hip hop i write Quotes Like No Other
Rhyme Sceme, Maybe Class, But Dope Aint A Friend
Time Seems, Crazy Fast, Cut Folks With A Pen
I evolve evidently faster than the Rest Of You Average Cats
Im the one so you pricks cant even Detest Even Two Savage Raps

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Originally Posted by warchild

Im an anti social asshole so im not Closer To My Peers
Im more demented than R Kelly still jerking off to Posters Of Aaliyah
-hahaha i love this fuckin line-

Aborted babies adorn all four Walls Of My House
I picture Mother Theresa when im Balling My Spouse
-hahahahaha this is genius-

Then i turn into Hannibal and bite her Clit Off
Then fist her ass with a barb wire Wrist Watch
-i said G-Damn do you ever stop the madness-

I abuse mad drugs, right now im Tripping With God
I told my girl i was sensitive, yeah on the Tip Of My Knob
-im gonna stop quotin lines cause your having to many to quote on this piece-

Im such a nice guy when i die my destination is Likely Heaven
Fuck that im a thug i hold more weight than Missy in Ninety Seven
-OMG you needa quit that....lol great line!-

Im a psychotic preacher so whatever i say my Sermon Stands
Me and authority figures get along like DMX and his German Fans
Now shut the fuck up and let the Chorus Stutter
Now im out like that bitch C. DeLores Tucker

Im the sickest bastard around fuck what You Heard
You talk shit literally i just forced fed you Two Terds
If your into drugs give me two fucking Thumbs Up
If your a thug give me two Fucking Guns Up

I just saw my neighbour shooting up he goes through the Day Stressed
My rhymes and outlook on life is more negative than a virgins Aids Test
Let me stay at your house you'll find your Cash Gone
Im the type to rape Cherie with a Tony Blair Mask On
I wanna do a good deed so i can go to heaven and Battle God
Murder every metaphor he musters then kill him with a Cattle Prod
The place that im from motherfucker We Stab Gays
Ive had more court apperances than Whitneys had Rehab Stays
Im embarassed for you slip me a grand i'll write your Next Release
Then i'll steal all your royalties while you Rest In Peace
Oh you really want me to Ghost Write No Brother
Im real hip hop i write Quotes Like No Other
Rhyme Sceme, Maybe Class, But Dope Aint A Friend
Time Seems, Crazy Fast, Cut Folks With A Pen
I evolve evidently faster than the Rest Of You Average Cats
Im the one so you pricks cant even Detest Even Two Savage Raps

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look man this piece is a fuckin classic...i couldnt quote no more lines cause almost every line i read i was loosin my shit to....great great great piece...im lookin forward to reading more of your stuff man

Let me stay at your house you'll find your Cash Gone
Im the type to rape Cherie with a Tony Blair Mask On
hahahaha!


I'm wettin myself!

This is really really good shit, keep it up!

c0rrupt

This Is Some Freaky Ass Shit To Be Writin About
But U Had Good Everything In Overall Nice Drop

7.9/10

that was pretty demented.. lol.. nice piece.. it showed your true self, no matter how weird that may be.. jk.. structure was nice, flow was nice, there were not many multi's, but the metaphors were nice. this was all around pretty nice piece, ide say 8.5/10

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=242854
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=242235

Appreciate the feed, logging off now so im uppin this.

Ive had 33 views of this piece and 3 replies come on people ive replied to 13 other Om's i want some feed on this, uppin.

This has some pretty nice wording lol.

Liking the fact that your OMs recently are based on just randomly bein witty, but i suppose its one of the rare good ways to self-glorify :rolleyes:

On a real, nice piece. Some of your concepts got a bit predictable, in the sense that i could work out the next few lines because you had used the scheme earlier, but im only saying that because its the only thing i can criticise.

Dope drop, keep em comin - and most of all, keep em original! :thumbup:

this was pretty slick... I'm impressed... one of the better drops... just a few things I think you can do better on... but... good job...

good shit b

good vocab, and flow was good, structure was aight. Try to get your lines to match up a little closer on the syllable tip.

Shit was a lil' fucked up tho....lol

o yea, and wordplay was off the hook...more multi's woulda been nice tho.

o, and if anyone could check out any of the battles in my sig, I'd appreciate it.

one.

Appreciate the feed, i replied to 13 Oms yesterday so how about a bit more feed on this.

i loved the multies in this, very impressive.....rhymes were incredible....i see you are very exprecienced at rappin and i can tell, the flo was smooth and strucutre was good
topic was cool, i liked it...nicely done an, good drop..keep it up....peace...............

Appreciate the feed, these were pretty much on the spot punches and metaphors i havent sat down and really came up with really dope shit for a while this is me at an average level when i actually sit down and create my punches cant be touched but its hard to actually find time to really take time with writing when you work shifts but i'll be working on new shit soon. I thought some of the punches in this were tight but i can do a lot better but its nice to see people appreciate what i write, peace.

Uppin.

Haha that shit was off tha hook! funny shit right there, that sum new Eminem shit homie... tight... the rhymes was good, i liked the multis... there was no topic at all and it worked lol! it was just some random bullshit that was fun as hell to read... the multis was great, at times there u was rhymin the whole line, i liked that... it flowed nicely, no prollems there, but i found that the structure was off a bit... 1 thing i didnt like at all was the chorus... u need 2 change that... honestly... but that was pretty good, i think it would have been better in an audio or something tho...

keep it up man... peep the OM's in my sig... thanks pc

yea Diz Was Hot No Doubt, Had Some Real Creative Punchlinez..
Shit Was Grimey hahaNo Doubt..
Bout Everything Was On Point..Keep Dat Shit Up Yo

Get At Me

-1-

Your fuckin crazy man!!!! I love this shit tho this is gotta b a classic all the punches were hot as hell...this shit should go down as the funniest piece ever to be dropped...overall 10/10 man this shit was crazy hotttttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This peice was real good man...besides the fact that it was super fuckin demented at the beginnin...you had good word play...nice structure, some lines was off but fuck it...crazy topic...overall it was a real good peice dog...good shit and thanks for the feedback on my OM
-Play-Boy

Appreciate the feed, im working afternoons this week so im on here early uppin this so i hope it dont get slept on, Uppin.

:angelsmil

yeah this shit is pretty dope man.. got mad jokes up in here.. enterrtains me more than 98% of the crap on this board at the moment.. your sick character is begining to shine thru..lolz
some punches were doper than others but fuck it its all held together pretty well..

some nice multies as well like you expanded the syllables some more now

so you get my 2 thumbs n 2 guns up

1

Your verses were fuckin crazy. Ya had some creativity like a mufucka. The shit you rapped about in some of it was weird as fuck but your wordplay made up for it. That shit was entertaining and put a smile on my face. I give it a 9/10. I dont like the hook. That shit sucked but the rest was sick. Keep it up.

~one~

Just got in from work uppin this mothafucka. Oh yeah urban babe your shit is wack face it lol.

Ive had 166 people view this piece but only 14 have replied i do appreciate the feed but id like a bit more. Some of the better writers of Om should be replying to this im just as nice as anybody on OM.

Sorry it took a soldier so long to hit u up on this but this was a great piece. You gave me joke all the way through. You had some very good rhymes in your piece and i liked the way you through the punches. Nice wun warchild.

Lemme pop up the shop and I'll reply when I get back.

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Originally Posted by UrbanXBabe

Biatch not only did you diss me u dissed most the others, u think ya 2 gud wel herez my response n i do knw how 2 spell ayt!

Batty boy sayz hez good
Wot da fuk is he thinking
Ya rap is so lame
Itz incredibely stinkin
watch mama rap
Ur eyez wil stop blinkin
Ya self esteem wil stoop
N in minz u`l b sinkin

Ama whip u wit ma linez
N show ya dat i shinez
U say 2 battle god
Yeh try it retarted sod
U luk so fukin butter
We mistake u 4 da gutter
Ur wordz r so twisted
Da meaningz? Oh am disgusted

Ur feedbakz full of shit
Batty boy, little prik
Ya js jealous we do beta
Insecure little fretter
No1 commentz on ya work
Coz ur a weird little jerk
Am a leave causing disaster
Coz indeed I am ya master

biatch this woz a freestyle n i can do milez beta but im bein impatient coz u f`d up

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AHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH.. :wtf:

She must of been on her period how weak were those rhymes lol not even worth wasting my ink penning a response back.

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Originally Posted by warchild

Ive had 166 people view this piece but only 14 have replied i do appreciate the feed but id like a bit more. Some of the better writers of Om should be replying to this im just as nice as anybody on OM.

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Word.

Rofl.. real nice man.

First four bars had me smiling.. great punches. Another typical Warchild piece man.. every bar holds a funny punch and good metaphor.. and it's consistant throughout.

Second half of the second verse seemed to get more complex which was good.. a few multies and shit too.. which was a good way to end it.

Overall.. great drop spa.

I abuse mad drugs, right now im Tripping With God
I told my girl i was sensitive, yeah on the Tip Of My Knob
Im dead broke so i let Michael Jackson Rape My Son
What? he said he'd give me a million now the Papers Come
Im such a nice guy when i die my destination is Likely Heaven
Fuck that im a thug i hold more weight than Missy in Ninety Seven

If your into drugs give me two fucking Thumbs Up
If your a thug give me two Fucking Guns Up

I just saw my neighbour shooting up he goes through the Day Stressed
My rhymes and outlook on life is more negative than a virgins Aids Test
Let me stay at your house you'll find your Cash Gone
Im the type to rape Cherie with a Tony Blair Mask On
I wanna do a good deed so i can go to heaven and Battle God
Murder every metaphor he musters then kill him with a Cattle Prod
The place that im from motherfucker We Stab Gays
Ive had more court apperances than Whitneys had Rehab Stays

...these were the dopest lines, i mean dont get me wrong..the whole thing was good, these were just the best lines. i think you were pretty creative, had some good wordplay and flow. im not sure honestly what the overall point you were trying to make, but it seemed like you stuck with your story the whole time and didnt go off the topic. also, thanks for the feed. this was a pretty dope piece man...keep it up.

It was all pretty dope...decent flow, an okay structure, and a lot of it was pretty funny. Some good metaphors, and corn-chips. A lot of it was pretty funny, and there was some good dopeness. :) I think most you can say about this has been said.

Thanks for dropping feed on my piece. I told you I'd RTF

-coughtendayslatecough.-

this is why im always on the lookout for ur OMs.. u really are the most entertaining writer in this forum... 97% of the other heads (except for the real dope ones who know what they're writing) bore me to fucking death with that wack shit.

2 thumbs up homie.

peace

nice very nice good multi's nice flow keep that shit up