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R.I.P 2Pac
I kno yer listenin 'Pac, wherever u r/
Hope yer in Heaven livin it up, puffin a cigar.
Your legacy will be carried on 4 years, for generations.
Through yer music, your movies, and the Amaru foundation.
Your frustration, your salvation, and most of all your dedication.
Helped you 2 become da greatest ever, i give my congratulations.
In your writing you gave explanations, that told of your situation.
The struggle, the rap game, and your determination.
You gave many the inspiration to fulfill their dreams with aspiration.
You gave many the motivation to fullfill an obligation.
You gave information, and in a way you gave an education.
And all that was accomplished through simple communication.
Your style was an innovation, using your head, imagination.
Told stories with relaxation, but alwayz kept it true with realization.
Heard you on da radio station, the way u made money was a revelation.
The government administration didn't like you or your occupation.
But racism only gave you more aggravation.
And you came back at 'em with even more elation.
During the duration of your time, you had total domination
But the westcoast was your one and only location.
Your affiliation with Biggie was nothin more and the an altercation.
You showed him no hesitation in showing him intimidation.
The talent you instilled required serious application.
You had an unreal combination of regulation and dedication.
There will never be a duplication of you, can't even give an imitation.
You were one of a kind, you were underivative.
Sent to jail, no bail, not even probation.
Alone in da cell, in Hell, isolation.
But that didn't stop you, only gave u more emulation.
And from there you still managed to continue your operations.
But later, 5 shots your dead, it was a crucification.
Don't know if your really dead, let's hold an excavation.
Said that you'd be buried in your writing, your oral presentation.
But instead 4 some reason, there was a cremation.
I wish you weren't dead, wish there was no assassination.
Wish you were still here 2day, wish this was all a misinterpretation.
All this is why my appreciation 4 you comes with out consideration.
'Cause without you, 'Pac, I'd be nothing than a creation.
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man this was ok......bit plAYED OUT.....
but it was ok....
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You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will get closed. Read the thread at the top of the forum if you don't know how.
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this was a pretty good piece, a little tiring with the -ation ending on all the last words tho
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You need decent feedback, decent feedback is where you talk about the piece in some kind of detail... not something like:
dude that stuff was ill beyond belief.
keep that up and you'll get yerself a record label mayne.
good work
HOW was the piece ill beyond belief? Was it the subject matter, the vocab, the imagery? Were his multi's and sense of flow good? Expand on your comments please.
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ok johnny my bad...gimme a sec and ill expand on my feedback
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aight i left feedback on da same 2 posts and left one da same kuz i thought it wuz good feedback
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uppin fer feedback.....can u guyz dat vote leave wut u think u would grade this out of 10?
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Eeeeeeh, Man I Cant Really Break This Down.
It Was More Like A Rhythmical Biography,
Which I Wasnt Really Feeling...
In Part Because I Dont Even Like Tupac.
I Mean, If Felt The Whole Time Like You Were Just Listing Things.
So For Me It Just Started To Drone On And I Got Bord.
You Didnt Even Alow This To Reflect On Your Own Life,
Which, With The Format Of The Piece You Should Have.
Like, Related How His Work Has Influenced You Or Motivated You
... Something Along Those Lines.
The Flow Was Kinda Blah Aswell.
*Shrugs*
Just Single Syllabol Ending Rhymes For The Most Part.
And Alot Of Them Just Read Kind Of Awkward.
All In All Man It Needs Some Work.
First And For Most You Need Better Concepts Though.
This One's Kind Of Pointless And Not Many Will Want To Read It.
Just Because It Feels More Like Reading A Book Rather Than Rap.
Stay Up And Keep Elevating Man.
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i dunno dog...as far as ya lyrics, flow, and structure go...it was a tight piece...but beyond that it lacked wordplay, originality, and true feelings...u aint never know tupac and the fact is a million people have done shit like this OM over and over and over again so its definitly played out'
just kinda makes u look like another tupac wannabee on the site
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well u had a cool topic and u rhymed but u needed multis and sum mo complex and wordplay. otha than that, hott.
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No Hate~just Elevate Yadidimean Fa Sho Yadidimean Fa Sheez
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nice shit man, nice nice shit.
I am totally feelin the love for pac come outta that, nigga thats great.
Good structure, great flow, great rhymes, good vocab, nice use of multis that was tight, good wordplay, you layed out the words deeply. Felt the emotion for pac and his music flow outta that, dat was some tight shit man. O ya he was killed by 4 shots....good shit though 8.8/10. keep da love for the greatest flowin...
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ill man real ill i feel the same way
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this was really good, topic seemed very popular and i wasnt really feelin it, i've seen like 20 of these types but this one had acually good rhymes, and good vocab, flow was smooth and strcuutre was even, nicely done, just choose different topics next time,, peace
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cinna it was tight my nigga ur flow was hot and u captured me into the moment i wanted to read the whole thing my nigga gd shit
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good pice, strong vocab, and good flow
just dont try and rhyme with the same thign for more than 5 lines
makes it look nobbish, but otherwise good piece, apart from the played out topic
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I'm not from the west, but I really felt that, you had nice creativity, good concept. It was a nice!!!!! Drop
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Ok...it was good. Obviously a lot of people have done Pac dedications...and this was yours. You had good structure and vocab...except I personally didn't like the one sound rhymin throughout the whole thing. I enjoyed man...it wasn't horrible and had good feelin to it. keep flowin man.
-Play-Boy
The Optimist
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Nice piece I respect it .You showed that u knew what ur talkin about. I know im not the first one to write it but i needed to know how it inspired you
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this was really good,topic was real cool man and i was really feelin it, i like your style this had sum great rhymes and great vocab, , flow was smooth and strcuutre was even, nicely done, just choose different topics next time,, peace and return the feed on ym new drop...night mares, thanks.
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the topic is a commonly used topic.. but i think ur had a nice flow on this, and i can see Pac is one of you idols.. good job
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uppin 4 timez man i still need feedback
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some body come battle me on quick flows
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it was decent...but you didn't know pac...why u writein about him
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That was fuckin good. Good topic, a lil played out but still good. liking the multi-sylabbles and more than one lline ryhmes
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it was alright
u need to wrk on ur rhyming a bit, but i know it can be harder to rhyme well wen ure stickin to a topic
gd topic - it was true
i couldnt really see the flow, and i think i can only see u talkin it, not rappin it
apart from tht the piece was alrite - 6/10
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that shit was tight except it was a little boreing after a while u need swithc styles
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this shit was allright i could feel ur heart and u tried 2 have some big words i respect that but damn hoime wtf is up wit the same ryme ova and ova again. u jus kept wit the tion at the end of each word. but it was an ight drop jus use some more creativity wit the flow and ryme sceme and ull be aight
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That is great, it flows very well.
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uppin last time...can i please get some more feedback....all da stuff u guyz have left so far has been great...thank you but i want more! lol
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dogg stop uppin this....u got enuff feedback u need to improve. just drop anuther one...............
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not hatin u just upped this too much................
