Why Blame the Devil...featuring killamami1

1-Vortex
2-killamami1



Why Blame the Devil



People have been blaming Satan since the rising of Genesis
Adam ate the apple, apparently the serpent slid from the pits
And bit the heels of mankind, yet his location stays clandestine
Horn-headed, a vicious-mind... ever accused of malicious crime
Ranges’ from rape to deep hate, people say they can’t keep faith
In Allah, so they make a scapegoat, Satan made them break oath
Is this the nature of mortal beings? Some even pledge obedience
They feast on deviance; claim Beelzebub supplies the ingredients
Evil food-for-thought, points to the pitchfork exclude the court
Guilty as charged… it was Lucifer & his 7-demon entourage
The visage of a red-faced cretin letting Hell-raise to surface
Peoples lost in this circus forgetting their sinning on purpose
Are we living a dream? Placing all our burdens on the unseen
Muse its mystic myth’ I mean do you control your own physics?
Or…-can your arms & legs just artlessly swing devoid of notion?
War of the Heavens defiled kingdom, the light-bearers expulsion
Fictitious fairytales smear history… I see no truth in this fallacy
Still half of the Galaxy blames a sprite for hate lust & jealousy

Devil

weve been bought up 4rom tha beginnin 2 believe in heaven and hell
we've all heard tha story of how tha devil can come back and prevail
but neva have we asked tha question wen everythang goez wrong
y we gotta find somebody else 2 blame our wrong on??
i waz alwayz told tha devil do hiz job and do it right
and he jus sit back and wait for tha lordz people 2 get up and fight
kuz he kno if someonez killed thatz juz someone else he can take down
and on tha judgement day tha lord will turn dat person down witout a sound
we stay contridctin ourselevez, blamin tha devil instead of takin responsibility
but we go runnin 2 tha Lord when itz time 2 b set free
itz old az ancient history, but still we searchin 4 tha answer like an unsolved mystery
so 4rom tha beginning we've appeared stupid and easy 2 decieve
if we went 2 court 2day 2 testify up on tha stand and plead innocent
and end up guilty tha person dat we'll blame iz already evident
like open evidence, he seez were vurnerable and weak
which iz y he easily corrupted tha mindz of adam and eve
pleze believe dat wat im sayin people around tha world do
searchin 4 watz already found, kuz tha answerz in u

Devil

Links-
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=240181
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=234304
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=239712

damn..... this was dope, strucute was very even, making it more easier to read and more enjoyable as well, flow was smooth the whole way, complexity was here, rhymes were very good, overall this was dope, i liked the topic....very well written and thoguht out, keep it up, peace

this piece was aight.I really like the topic yall picked and it had a good storyline.But theres a couple of things yall need to work on.First wordplay was too simple try to use more complex wordplay.Second try to use more emotion in yalls verses it will make it way better.But the Imagry was good.Try to use some multis if you can and use more complex words and some metaphors.Just keep up the good work.

Both of your verses were hot. They flowed well and it was a good read. Good to see a female reppin wit some fire. It was a good topic, you both added your own flavor to it. 9/10

good looking out yo


uppety ups

Very good description on this piece. Done before, but I liked how you guys attacked this piece as a collabo. You 2 did a great job and making a structure and flow similar to each other. This made both your verses reinforce each other.

good looks blud

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uppin 4 feedback pleze

yo this peice was hot. but u coulda had some better wordplay, u coulda used some multies. Other then that it was good good topic though keep it up

yo i dont know where to start but ur joint was crazy u had me since the tittle man u made me think on some real shit

iight thatz watzup den...ayo v we need ta do anutha collabo somtime den my nig...rite now tho we need more feedback....

yo wat it iz??? help uz out and put ur opinion on diz hurr thread....thanx

i was feeling tha topic,
and i liked the first verse better
he had good structure
tha second verse was a lil simple
but still i liked this piece keep doing ya thang

Nice piece, obviously you know i like the dark concept pieces so i was really feeling this piece. The imagery really stood out to me very dark and really descriptive you had my attention after the first couplet which is good its always good to have a good opener it draws people into the piece straight away. And you kept my attention throughout the whole verses.
Vor i thought your verse was slightly better because you mixed in some multies and your vocab was also slightly stronger. But i still felt both verses gelled together for a good Om. I couldnt really criticise the piece except that mami coulda added in a couple of multies to make the verse more complex.
A good read and i loved the concept.

loved this, original topic,drew me in from tha first line,nice flow, and structured very well

thanx uppin 4 any more feed u got

good looking out yo

I just realised mami is 14
uhm good skills gal


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Good shit.
Let me start with Vortex's verse...Great vocab man...Flow was real good to, not that hard to follow. Had some good imagery and the concept was pretty unique. That was some elevated readin type shit...good work man.

Killamami1- Flow was good...some of the was a little bit longer but that really doesn't matter that much. You had good concepts but I think you could of been a little bit deeper. Shit was still hot though for real.

Overall it was a hot collab...both of ya'll keep doin ya thing...Peace
-Play-Boy
The Optimist

I really like the topic yall picked and it had a good storyline.But theres a couple of things yall need to work on.First wordplay was too simple try to use more complex wordplay.Second try to use more emotion in yalls verses it will make it way better.But the Imagry was good.Try to use some multis if you can and use more complex words

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both verses were hot, i was feeling both verses you both stayed on topic and had nice vocab. thr rhymes was tight, some lines seemed stretched at times but the flow was tight as well as i read, as i read i noticed that sometimes it didnt rhyme so try to be careful when you right so that if oyu tryna rhyme the shit, it actually rhymes at alltimes. it was still hot just messed up a little with the rhymes

return feedback to my drop please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=242018

HOLY SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! she's only a younga than me, dope rhymes 4 ur age, girl

thanx all yall....pleze dont underestimate mami bekuz im yung tho....datz all im sayin ;) well uppin 4 feed and yall leavin som good thought out feed....me and vortex appreciate dat thanx!!!!

thanks yo

i'd add is you meant Ladie that some of my lines dont rhyme.. then you must of missed the multies and internal rhymes (inside the line...i call it rhyme variation and assorted rhyme scheme play...gotta follow the whole line to see it not the end of the line and the next one



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watup wit da feed????