The World Today (collab: Word.Play ft. Vafinest)

Haha niggaz! guess who?! its ta2_tears wit my nigga vafinest... hope y'all feelin it!

Word.Play= Blue
Vafinest= Green

Yo I'm strugglin, got me livin the notorious life
Tryin to live victorious, countless laborious nights
I have meritorious rights, but nobody willin ta give
Shrill cry's in da night, cuz killers killin ta live
Niggaz find it thrillin ta kill, shit it disgusts me
Plus G, i fear for my family cuz them niggaz discuss me
Trust me, I'll bust heat when my family involved
Aims rusty, but dont hesitate ta get insanity resolved
Shit gunz and knives is just profanity evolved
Cant wait till problems of humanity are solved
Hard gettin by, plus i gotta get my mothers food-and-all
But its hard when i gotta attend my brother's fu-ne-ral
Still makin it through it all, but shit the world bothers-me
How can people be so rich, when so many struck with poverty
And i find it hard-to-see why fathers-beat their children
The worlds corrupted, how we live in the society we buildin?
And may my words open your eyes and christen whoever shall listen
Question how can so many be dirty while others shine and glisten?
So do we all fall victim to the system, and pretend its perfect?
And why bother tryin? Is triumph in this world really worth it?

the world today,is so corrupted,by mainly the government
cuz there sending us to war,cuz of terrorist and 9/11
its going away slow,cuz bush is taking over
and hes a racist muthafucker,cuz he just another rover
trying to corrupt lifes,escpially the one on welfare
cuz he don't want them to eat,cuz he don't even care
but other things in the world,is going so crazy
gangs migrating everywhere,cuz the street is really blazing
crooked ass cops,put niggas in jail for sticks and seeds
when there more dangerous drugs out there,that will put niggas on there knees
and theres still bums on the street,that really need help
but the govenment won't do shit,cuz they only care bout themselves
people gettin killed everyday,still in this rugid world
and there getting away with it,and there still raping little girls
cuz these people are psyco,only give a fuck about themselves
but they will learn the hard way,when there burning up in hell
so take this as advice,and put it in your brain
cuz the world today is fucked up,and people are going Insane

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it was okay straight topic words verse was straight but van verse was to simple be creative your just talkin about bush and shit say things that are happening and say how you feel thats wat word did...............this was straight but ya could of did better overall 7/0

aight... yo thanks king...

uppin for feedback

damn, this shyt made me think, in Word plays verse i was feelin the vocab and the emotion wasnt all there but it worked out, the structure of both verses was good, in Va's verse the emotion was def there and the events in the verse made me reflect bac on thins from the past like 9/11 and all that so i liked the whole concept, the flow was decent in both verses...nice

Cool topic... it seemed more of an audio OM then a topical though. Thats not neccearily a bad thing, but I think u guys should record it. I would like to see both of u coming up with more interesting topics besides things like no welfare and such, yeah thats important, but then u dont gather much of a storyline. Keep writing though, cuz I think u both have potential with other more sophisticated topics, thats just my opinion though. Personally, Word.Play's verse stood out a bit more to me, more of a storyline and a tiny bit better vocab. Overall a 5/10, coulda been way better, but not bad, keep writing and check out my OM-PEACE

Rise...

yeah yall cats is crazy bananas...bananas and crazy...this joint had me thinkin like...im sayin the imagery and word play wasnt all that but i still felt it...it aint move me like it could have cause the complexity just wasnt there, but im sure if yall keep writin yall will get the skills up...with a name like wordplay you should be bonkers wit it figgadeal me?...but overall it was a nice piece...my favorite lines from both were:


he world today,is so corrupted,by mainly the government
cuz there sending us to war,cuz of terrorist and 9/11
its going away slow,cuz bush is taking over
and hes a racist muthafucker,cuz he just another rover

cause a nigga hate bush...for seriousness.

Yo I'm strugglin, got me livin the notorious life
Tryin to live victorious, countless laborious nights

nice flow and rhyme...keep it soon yall will be able to hustle and flow

yea i was feelin this

cool stuff you both did ya thing.....
vocab was on cue....a loy of emotion from both heads......yeah this was tight..

Thanx 4 da feed... upp

nice piece.. vocab was there, but it was lacking a lil emotion.. BUT WHO CARES lol good work

imagery wasnt there...but i didnt have 2 be ..cuz this piece rlly got u thinkin, like it was just a topic filled with nice wordplay/vocab/flow...just rlly made you think on the topic...i thought you both hit it well...it also went well 2gether cuz word.play got on topic with just the whole thing, while vafinest rlly touch down on specificz..and it just came down hard....it was a good drop

Favorite lines from---Word.Play

Hard gettin by, plus i gotta get my mothers food-and-all
But its hard when i gotta attend my brother's fu-ne-ral
Still makin it through it all, but shit the world bothers-me
How can people be so rich, when so many struck with poverty

Favorite Lines From---Vafinest

crooked ass cops,put niggas in jail for sticks and seeds
when there more dangerous drugs out there,that will put niggas on there knees
and theres still bums on the street,that really need help
but the govenment won't do shit,cuz they only care bout themselves

Thanx 4 da feed niggaz...

Upp

Leave feed and drop a link i'll return tha favor...

upp

this was some C-Murder Bossalinie type shit for real though...good write both of you...topic is over abused but I really don't think that matters as long as you get deep with that shit and ya'll did...both of ya'll got off pretty good...peace
-Play-Boy

Thanx for tha feed there man, u got ne shit u want me 2 peep there nigga?

yeah, hit this link up...good lookin out.
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