Ill Rappa

Yo i need this rated for my book, but don thin kany differently of me this was a long time ago i wrote this in 2002

Yo, ime the ill rappa here to shut you out...
All my Fame and glory is enuf to make you pout...
They call me the Evolution and i'm here to rock the mic...
My skillz so tight, they'll take 1 glance at me and tell you to take a hike...
They set a date for you to go on tour...
ten minutes later them bitches knockin on my door...
I aslo got the looks to score...
You sittin there thinkin how the hell i fuck this whore...

Follow this plz:
1) overall rating 1-10
2) Flow rating 1-10
3) word play rating 1-10
4) structure rating 1-10
5) critizism and or comments

thx this is to help my book

Remember this isn't my elevated shit

overall rating 4-10
flow rating 7-10
word play rating 2-10
structure rating 7-10

there was nothin special in this piece.. it was ok.. not good, great, or anything.. it was just ok. also it was very short.. yeah and i no your much elevated now

its better than some stuff i here

lmao thanx guyz and kidd thats sad cuz i was 12 wen i wrote that...rofl

Need help on my votes. Please up.

Lol...sure can u just leave a rating? In return ile vote

Lol @ telling us how to critique you.. ratings are gay.

But yeah, i didnt like it that much i guess, the title didnt even really set me in the right mood for reading. But yeah, i didnt really "Feel" it much i guess, i mean, im not trying to shoot you down. Keep doing it, and ill keep checking your stuff and seeing you progress, because if you keep writing, you will get better. Dont get discouraged, get better.

Yeah.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=237533

overall rating 3-10
flow rating 6-10
word play rating 0-10
structure rating 5-10

elevate and get rid of everything a the end
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its annoying as fuck

and post the rating chart in a different post so it looks better

I aint gonna give u the 1-10 ratings, but i will say i liked ur flow, i think u could have elevated your vocab but eveything else like structure was good, id give u a 7/10 overall... good work.... EDIT: for somthing not elevated...

Hey guys check the link in my pro vote fairly...

arite ile hit your link and thanks for the feed

and pharoah last time i used the "/" this 1 dude sed it made my raps look like i was illiterate...lol

Uppin for a few more ratings

1) overall rating -4.5
2) Flow rating -7
3) word play rating -2
4) structure rating -5


5) critizism and or comments-had some good character about.. just too short for me to really get into

pz

nice flow i think u can rap wikid 10/10

Wow thatx vortex that was very helpful and right about my estimations thx man that was a solid

thanx mcbad but i think it was good for back then but if i sed that now people wuld b like... :wtf:

Upping for more rates

one more rating and ime good...

all of a sudden eryone is sleepin?

Extremely basic...that's all that really comes to mind when you read this...but 2002...that's a long time ago...and by the looks you've elevated since then...
No clue why but that Hike line made me giggle....lol Other than that..structure was decent not good...flow was pretty tiight but the vocab was too basic....and you need 16 lines for an open mic....lol anyways...Peace

Lol i know but the point of this was to get ratings fdor my old book...but u didn't read that part :stupid2: , lol :laugh:

bump

o0o...whats the matter people too tired to read like...8 lines?

bump

1) overall rating 1
2) Flow rating 2- I gave you 2 because it atleast rhymes but thats all it does....it has no real writing techniques and is completely pointless from line to line
3) word play rating 0- There is no wordplay...you kids need to learn what the fuck your talking about....and learn what wordplay is
4) structure rating 2- Its only 8 Lines and all ending in simplistic one syallable rhymes
5) critizism and or comments---already added

lmao...i hope u read the part that i was 12 wen i put this together ;-P and that was harsh critisizm