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live it up
i lost my personality fatal fatality how is da whole world mad at me
im 1 person,1 thing,1 juz gestured a gun shot,i lost mo dan my hommey
i lived life like killer....mad in da head an fleaz from place 2 place
picture ur self not noin were u goin..if there is a god why he pic this fate
im a grown mayne tryin to find my step,get back all of my sences
restart time..turn back tha hands of god from takein me this lenght kid
my soul cant take no mo..so i type my dreams hopes an land it on a note B
wit a cheap beat machine tryin from station 2 get my demo tape released
neav left,neva fell back on a rap i juz have competion dat is tryin 2 keep up
life soul, wat this really mean we have dem but some dont really use em
reluctant behavior tryin 2 prove im worthy,God where u at arent u my Savior?
wat should i no my faith aint worn out itz juz on da edge,i'll think bout it l8er
(chorus)X2
1 moment 1 life 1 voice 1 chance
live dey way u want da way u can
split second run of chance will u take da glory......wat u got
live up wat u can make ur life a god damn story.....uh huh
aint a preacher but i follow da 1 thing i knoe da most holy scriptures
but if dey are true den why our voices dont make perfect pictures
LIVE......IT.............UP........
DONT.....U........FRONT.......
so if u lived 4 one moment would u give ya life up?
God, my fam...dey gave up on me but i didnt leave them
hard 2 do wen da only thing u got 2 live with is u an Him[God]
gave me life gave me sight give me a sense of wat i gotta do
where im from i knoe wat 2 do...u think u smart im from da hood
police cant stop me dey hear me speak-ing an dey still fear me,we keep apart
talk shit 2 make life a spark,beef makes heat,i gues im da frank of da ball park
a lyrical disaster 2 u.....but a God 2 those who wat 2 accomplish
fuck this shit ima post it down, knoe itz only worth da comments
live life proud.take up time pound per pound live life from da sky 2 da ground
u think u str8 kickin it u betta not be thinkin it wen da shot 2 heaven is now
Chorus X3
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okay here is something u really need to do. i think u started off as a text person am i right? in text spelling isnt really important, but when ur dropping a topical spelling and grammer can bring u from dope to nope. U need to also work on getting all of ur lines around the same length and rhyming the words. also use some multies and ull get the flow comming together better.
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oh.............check out my om called sitting here :yes:
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aight thanx 4 da feed nigga
mo feed?
any1
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this was a good piece from you homie.The only things you need to work on is your words rhyming like Flavin said and try puttin more emotion into it.But the storyline was good in this piece.I don't know if you had used a beat or not to the beat that what I was wondering.But your structure was ok and and your wordplay was ok too.Just keep on workin on your shit and you'll get better homie.
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good flow good stucture good job
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okay thanx bumpin
tips sugestions wateva
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how do u post one of these
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suggestion: dont up so much it causes me to close your thread
