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10 lines
hs rules
explained votes only
due midnight EST.
check in a.s.a.p
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Check, ill be droppin this evening prolly around 10.
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LOL, dont mean to clown u, cuz it seems your coo
But everyone Nose ur wack....n everyone can fit in yours too
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
Im the bomb ho, and ur gay, lets all laugh at this brotha
Whos idea of SpongeBob, is giving a fuckin bath to his lover
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
ready 2 drop?
This she cock could be in D-Block but still couldnt key with Style*
All I hear from u is WACK..like abusive parents beating they child
punches leave u slump'd in the trunk like a stump of a tree
look, i leav leters out of my rhyms so i can battl Miss key*
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
Strike your vision with precision to invision you gettin another L
in this demention your bars in prision for having that awful smell*
punches el make u duck if u tail*, sorta like hewy, dewy, and louwy*
chewy*, u need start ya like over, press rewind then roll* like a movie
*Style=D-block Styles P
*miss key=......miss spelled.....miss a key on keyboard.......implies he's a grl
*hs rules= high school
*"college is better"= profile says college boy
*awful smell= implies his lines stink
*ducktails=T.V show with three ducks
*hewy, dewy, and louwy= 3 ducks on above show
*Chewy= herd dat was his last name
*roll= fill directors/ppl say roll da film/fottage
DUN UNDERSTAND DUN VOTE
wow this was simply ill let me break it down
opener:tie both were ill
closer:mr key that shit was ill and funny
flow:rizzo was easier to read
punches:rizzo he had some nice ass lines
personals:key thanx to those puc and ugly jokes
struvture:rizzo easirer
vote dqued unexplained
-Tim
mr key ~ how the fuck do u win any of ur battles homie........... ur rhmyes are so basic
all u got is a structa ....... im not trying to sound like a hater but that verse wasnt well put out at all . u had no personals and ur rhymes were too basic also u had no creativity at all . so i give u a 3/10 u might have jus had a bad day or somethin but keep ya head up and in the game
rizzo~ this is mos def not one of ur best spits ...... i have seen much better from you. u where extremely creative tho and the key on the bottom was a major plus and got my attention to read ur verse twice . u had a good structure and ok punches . great personals as well. 8/10 keep ya game up homie
vt/rizzo for reasons above
plez vote on my battles as fairly as i voted on urs
rizzo won this battle easily mr key had a funny opener but all of his shit was to basic i liked the way that rizzo flowed and the complexity of his rhyme nice battle
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VOTE DQ'ED BECUASE HE DOES NOT HAVE OVER 500 POSTS AS THE RULES WERE
-ACCESS
^^^DUN wanna sound like i don't apperciate da vote an use 1 of my uppins already..........but he kinda did have a personal bout da nose thing............so uppin #1
vote on this battle iite.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228799
key:
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
Not really a good read. but you had some punches. other times you concentrated mostly on his nostrils. which loses its humour after a while. but i liked your closer and that other bar but again, not a very thought out verse. but ok nonetheless.
vs.
rizzo:
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
^your verse was an FL verse. i didn't like the fact that you explained EVERY single joke. some weren't even funny. didn't have any wit, punches you displayed were child like. this bar here prolly was the most okish but others were blah. just improve on the humour the put in ya lines.
v/ Mr. Key. for having at least a funnier verse.
MAD DRS HERE
Yea to Rizzo, and lol, punches dont have to be complex for them to be good, seriously, but its all good regardless.
if i could vote rizzo gots it....overall in almost every category know to the living man...rizzo got it
aight yo hot battle forrreal.
Rizzo- damn homie dope personals forreal...that Miss Key line was a killer!!! you had consistent flow and good structure...but dont bold your shit homie...i know niggas retarded in this shit but you dont gotta do all that..lmao...multies..always dope in my book...overall your best drop so far homie....10/10
mr.Key-i like your personals in your verse too homie..your opener was funny ass hell but after that you started to fall off...you got a point..complexity dont mean shit but really you lost this battle fair and square...flow was good aswell as structure...i think you might of understimated yo opponent...8/10
v-Rizzo...no hate
key- ur punches were never direct, i mean, some were funny tho, was an iight read, n ill read more of ur up coming battles be sure of that cuz some of ur shit is funny, but u could of upped ur punches n came more direct, n that u lacked.
rizzo- practically the same thing, all though i think ur punches did hit a little harder, overall this was an iight battle, but i think you can both do alot better...jus step it up in every battle, thats what will make you better
v/rizzo, reasons above
ay yo, check the battle in my sig too iight, honesty please, i think myself im gettin dickrided from it, cuz i know his drop wasnt much...but w/e jus drop me an honest vote please...iight pz
LOL, dont mean to clown u, cuz it seems your coo
But everyone Nose ur wack....n everyone can fit in yours too
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
Im the bomb ho, and ur gay, lets all laugh at this brotha
Whos idea of SpongeBob, is giving a fuckin bath to his lover
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
vs
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
V/Mr.Key... for a better verse, his whole verse was better... Rizzo you got potential but your verse was too forced, seeing that you had to explain your punches...both ya'll niggas keep doing ya thing
niggz is dumb on rb..... :yes: thats why i explained..............last battle i had i an=int explaine i lost then when i explained voters was like OHHHH........shyts crzy........jus like it was helpful 2 lg..........everybdy won't always kno wha u tlking bout..so i do what i do..........................
Uppin #2
Uppin #3
rizzo won this battle
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
vs
nothin really.
-Rizo quit bolding your shit and explaining. if voters cant catch the wordplay
then they suck and need to go somewhere. plus your punches were weak.
you need to really insult the person. which Mr Key did quite effectrively even tho he could have and can come ALOT harder.
V/Mr Key
LOL, dont mean to clown u, cuz it seems your coo
But everyone Nose ur wack....n everyone can fit in yours too
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
Im the bomb ho, and ur gay, lets all laugh at this brotha
Whos idea of SpongeBob, is giving a fuckin bath to his lover
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
VS
This she cock could be in D-Block but still couldnt key with Style*
All I hear from u is WACK..like abusive parents beating they child
punches leave u slump'd in the trunk like a stump of a tree
look, i leav leters out of my rhyms so i can battl Miss key*
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
Strike your vision with precision to invision you gettin another L
in this demention your bars in prision for having that awful smell*
punches el make u duck if u tail*, sorta like hewy, dewy, and louwy*
chewy*, u need start ya like over, press rewind then roll* like a movie
I would expect better from MR.Key.
V-Rizzo
Reason-He had better punches and personals.
Hit my likn honestly.
vote dqued unexplained
-Tim
battle reopened
LOL, dont mean to clown u, cuz it seems your coo
But everyone Nose ur wack....n everyone can fit in yours too
haha. coolish.
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
eh, two in a row, kinda boring dog.
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
ok.
Im the bomb ho, and ur gay, lets all laugh at this brotha
Whos idea of SpongeBob, is giving a fuckin bath to his lover
LMAO.
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
lol. cool.
nothing really crazy dope, but you're entire verse was consistent.
v
This she cock could be in D-Block but still couldnt key with Style*
All I hear from u is WACK..like abusive parents beating they child
wack/beating = played since battling started.
punches leave u slump'd in the trunk like a stump of a tree
look, i leav leters out of my rhyms so i can battl Miss key*
please tell me you arent calling him a girl, as your diss...because thats really weak.
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
kinda creative, not feeling it, but this is YOUR best line so far.
Strike your vision with precision to invision you gettin another L
in this demention your bars in prision for having that awful smell*
what relation does bars in prision have with awful smell. you need to stop sayin shit just so it flows good, and make your set ups and punch lines all connect. anyway, saying someones lines 'stink' is the weakest diss dog.
punches el make u duck if u tail*, sorta like hewy, dewy, and louwy*
chewy*, u need start ya like over, press rewind then roll* like a movie
if he tells what? yea the ducktails is creative, but it just doesnt make sense. then you're saying in the actual punch that he needs to start his life over, then you use a creative way of phrasing it, but there isnt any insult in this bar.
dog, if you gotta explain your punches with all this bold shit and * everywhere, then your punch sucks. if you can write a punch thats witty, and creative, and you aint gotta explain it, then its a keeper. keys just on another level with you, you seem like you MIGHT be able to become good, but FL's isnt going to help you get better.
P.S. Dick Riders are homo.
v/ Key.
LOL, dont mean to clown u, cuz it seems your coo
But everyone Nose ur wack....n everyone can fit in yours too]
lol, ouch, hits hard
Im the shit, now bow slow, sry this win is not yo's
And that hat dont fit ur head...but im sure it'll fit ur nostril
another hard hitting personal
Get popped slow sry Riz, but ur not dope
But ill help u clear ur throat, when my punches rush to ur tonsuls
eh, alright
Im the bomb ho, and ur gay, lets all laugh at this brotha
Whos idea of SpongeBob, is giving a fuckin bath to his lover
Oh come on, I know you've used this concept before :)
U seem confused, but listen fag, around keys ur doomed
Cause i get to clappin.....like bitches when u leave the room
Word
vs.
This she cock could be in D-Block but still couldnt key with Style*
All I hear from u is WACK..like abusive parents beating they child
worded horribly, but ya know, this concept coulda been okay if you used it right
punches leave u slump'd in the trunk like a stump of a tree
look, i leav leters out of my rhyms so i can battl Miss key*
made no sense without the explanation.. and punches that need explanations are worthless
My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/
in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*
Same as above, wack as fuck
Strike your vision with precision to invision you gettin another L
in this demention your bars in prision for having that awful smell*
Played as fuck, I used this when i was a newbie, lol
punches el make u duck if u tail*, sorta like hewy, dewy, and louwy*
chewy*, u need start ya like over, press rewind then roll* like a movie
Statement, no punch
All in all, Key SHITTED, and I mean, SHITTED all over this fucking herb. Rizzo you and your lil friends d/r each other. You should leave the site, your a fucking embarassment that you get your friends to vote for you. I thought maybe Key half assed and it was close by seeing the votes, but even though he did half ass, he had some really funny shit in there which these imbeciles were too blind to see.
Vote - Key - EASILY
Polls set to 2-2 due to unexplained votes.
i cant vote yet but when i can i will...
Mr.key-u were good u had good punches and a good flow
7/10
rizzo-u were sick in this battle u had alot of good punches and good stucture
8/10
V/rizzo
oh...fuck ma bad 500 posts 2 vote nvm then but i still think rizzo 1
uppity upp
Stop upping now or i will close this whole battle
and people not with 500 posts dont freepost and sway
-Access
Vote/ Rizzo i dont know how Keys was considered better? Maybe im just retarded but i read it over a few times and saw nothing out of the ordinary, while Rizzo had nice wordplay and metaphores to go with this. Both had well structure but i thought this easily went to Rizzo.
word up same hurrQuote:
Originally Posted by lyricalgangsta
key- lol kinda wack.......you opener was iight....your middle was decent....your ender was bad man.....you need to add a nice punchline at the end becasue that will make your whole verse better....your flow was okay....your flow transition was decent also...your vocab wasnt that good......your wordplay was okay.....you need to use wordplay more because that will make your verse more interesting and also better.....overall i wasnt feeling this verse right here.....i couldnt even find key lines that i liked in there
rizzo-that was good....your opener i was liking....taht oepned up your verse well.....your middle was good also....but your ender was better....your ender supported your verse because it was strong......your flow was good..flow transition from line to line was good also.....your wordplay was nice......liking that wordplay....your punch lines was nice also....they hit better than mr key.....the lines that i liked the best has to be punches el make u duck if u tail*, sorta like hewy, dewy, and louwy* chewy*, u need start ya like over, press rewind then roll* like a movie...........LOL nice line right there......overall i liked this verse.........My rymhes el maek more cense than yuors if i meixd up the lettrse/ in the 1st post i put up "hs rules"*, he gone say "college is better"/*......that was a nice punchline man...
overall-rizzo won because of better ender, punchelines, vocab, and wordplay