I Bet You Sleep On This (As Usual)

Fuck every living thing on earth except me you can quote that
Im calling you names, mauling you lames, who got the most tats?
I dont give a fuck if your covered in ink i put guns to minds
Im a crazy slob, who maybe god, when it comes to rhymes
My arrogance is just, who else could pen songs this tight
Im probably the sickest most slept on lyricist on this site
So ill i should of died at birth, at eighteen i tried a verse
Dope from the start, quotes from the heart, drive a hearse
To your funeral cause after these scriptures your lifes over
Im a booze addict, i choose classics, so i got to write sober
People on this site wanna hide the props and then pass envy
Why cause they know i wrote there favourite rappers last lp
Ive been boasting for twelve bars so now its crunch time
Go ahead be jealous as i smash you with some punch lines
My life has been nothing but shit so picture the movie
You pricks will have to do a track with hitler to move me
When i walk into a room all the bitches yell that im handsome
Battling me is like being stuck in a small cell with charles manson
The last three years ive been in an asylum now this mans free
Most of you rappers talk tough but still cry at the end of bambi
I'll listen to your single then spew up when the songs finished
Then send you a fucking fan letter with a bomb in it
To hold wit, flow, and punches like mine thats a hard grasp
Call me wack i'll have you looking like kanye after the car crash
I'll go to a concert and steal your favourite rappers wrist watch
But if its an LL cool J show i'll happily rip his fucking lips off

Fuck you haters sleeping on my shit, check the flow check the rhyme schemes, check the inside rhymes, check your jealousy and give me the props i deserve FUCKING HATERS

that is st8 homie!!!!!!! a lot of true shitt in there keep it up

sickkkk man, loved the flow and choice of subject, nice multis and wrdplay was ite.

nice wrk man, keep droppin :D

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=215121
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=215384

Yur multis Are Onpoint....Yu did Go on For 12 lines...Then Warmed Up A Lil....Punch Wise, I've Seen Better....but, for this board...yu were pretty str8....Good Flow....kew thing To Speak On Being Slept On...I Feel Yu....

keep writing....and do it for yaself..and not for them


RTF?..."The World Is Not Flat"

pretty decent a few lines seemed a lil bit jumbled or over-worded

sum tuff punches tho fosho

good way to vent.. overall pretty sick delivery.. mos def feelin it

stay the fuck up

peep this shite right here-

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=214404

Pretty dope man. Flowed perfectly.. nice and rolling off the toungue. Some good lines in there too. Multies were good.. and I liked the way you kept it continous.. like it didn't falter at all.. kept going and going.. each new bar complimented the last.

Nice drop man.. props.

i liked this piece.....your imagery was tight....iv eheard tha topic before but you did it well....your vocab was tight i enjoyed tha multis you used and your structure and consistency...all in all i thought this piece was real ill....keep droppin tha hottness.~1~

^Thanks for the feed, i was fucked off when i wrote this, it was just a couple of punches mixed in there, i just think my shit does get slept on my flow and multies are always on point i dont see anyone else on here putting inside rhymes in there bars and i just want my props im better than 90% of this site now thats a FACT. And this piece was just my decent rhymes.

It was boast piece with a lot of multi's and threats in it. Not an original topic, but some decent boasts and flow which stayed on point throughout. Vocab was ok, imagery was... well... random because of the nature of the piece. I'd like to see you tackle a constructive topic, warchild. I know you've got skills, you just need to push them in a constructive direction.

Keep posting, thanks for the rep.

I aint wrote a concept piece for a while now, im gonna work on something over the next week then post it up as my next piece.
Time i dropped something deep.

I was really feelin' this one, I know what its like to get slept on, it sucks, but I keep gettin' mine. This was hot fa sho. Kept the rhyme scheme and the emotion goin at a good pace as well as crazy metaphors as well.

Very nice drop, i liked just about everything.

Nice wordplay and multis, the vocab and imagery could have been better, butnothings perfect. I liked this drop a lot.

Keep posting.

this wasn't bad. i mean, this verse didn't really have a direction to it but then again i don't believe one was intended. it was kinda a self-glorification/random punchline drop. the flow was solid and the internal rhyming was on point. here's some of my favorite lines:

So ill i should of died at birth, at eighteen i tried a verse
Dope from the start, quotes from the heart, drive a hearse
To your funeral cause after these scriptures your lifes over
Im a booze addict, i choose classics, so i got to write sober
The last three years ive been in an asylum now this mans free
Most of you rappers talk tough but still cry at the end of bambi
I'll listen to your single then spew up when the songs finished
Then send you a fucking fan letter with a bomb in it
To hold wit, flow, and punches like mine thats a hard grasp
Call me wack i'll have you looking like kanye after the car crash

yeah, those were pretty good. that bambi line was funny to me for some reason. anyway, not much more to say about this.. i'd like to see you try writing a more serious verse with a topic or somethin. stay up and keep dropping. peace.

nice drop man, everyone already said what i would say, but i'll repeat it anyway. the flow was great, not one sytretched line, and the mulite in it were striahgt, the vocab fit the flow, if you used anything else, the piece wouldn't be as good. the lyrics and points you made were true, and very good as well.

Peace

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Originally Posted by warchild

Fuck you haters sleeping on my shit, check the flow check the rhyme schemes, check the inside rhymes, check your jealousy and give me the props i deserve FUCKING HATERS

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Lmao. Wow, ego.

Wasn't that good. Sorry.

started nice, very consistent...it was the same level all the way through. i liked how you expressed your thoughts so straight forward and aggresively. rhymes scheme was good, structure wise was average. i'd say 8/10

best lines were...

So ill i should of died at birth, at eighteen i tried a verse
Dope from the start, quotes from the heart, drive a hearse
To your funeral cause after these scriptures your lifes over
Im a booze addict, i choose classics, so i got to write sober
The last three years ive been in an asylum now this mans free
Most of you rappers talk tough but still cry at the end of bambi
I'll listen to your single then spew up when the songs finished
Then send you a fucking fan letter with a bomb in it
..lmao at bambi.

word.

Yea like they said before, this shit was nice man, ur structure was good, internals and mutlies were there, flow was good, content was all around great man. Keep writing and dropping and if ya get the chance can ya rate these for me

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=214926
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=215739

Shit aint never had this much feed on one of my pieces before must be working me getting fucked off with being slept on.
Thanks for all the feed nice to see lay doubt and fawn replying to my stuff i mostly get the new dudes replying to my shit.
Yeah bruklor this aint a real strong piece this is just my basic shit just punches i can do much better shit than this.
I hope next time i drop a piece the more senior members of the site will drop some feed again, thanks for the feed i appreciate it.

FLow was real. I liked the hate message in this one, cause It was an agry emotion I felt, just missing a storyline kinda, thats why I give this 8.1/10 It needs sumthin to happen, cause this was all thoughts, nothin bad about that..but some physicall action wud dopen this peace.
Stay up, pz.

^Thanks for the feed, im working on some deeper concepts at the moment so i should have something upnext week. Until then might as well keep uppin.

Sorry it took so long to reply.

this was decent.your flow was good,the rhymescheme wasn't that simple.i would've liked your rhymecheme more if you would've went with the same multisyllabe rhymes in more lines.also a change in meter would've made the flow more complex.the problem was with the topic...you should try to be more creative and come with topics that aren't that played.the vocab was decent,but i didn't like all the wordchoices,some words were chosen mainly to keep the rhyme going,some just didn't fit in.also i would suggest you try a better structure,use better punctuation,because in some parts that was really needed.the lack of punctuation in that parts made it weird for me to read your piece sometimes.keep writting.

yo dat shit was pretty bangin i like da multis used n how u kep it makin sense ,,big ups

Uppin this till i post a new piece.