Candy Drop( candy shop remix)

Chorus)
I'm rolling in a candy drop, rims twisting and the trunk stay poppin'
Paint drippin' look like rain drops, hoes boppin' when I hop out.

(verse)
Candy drop color changin bumpin as I roll up,
mayonaise and mustard vogues like my tires stuck to cold cuts.
Blow enough dro to make ya never wanna roll up,
smoke like the fog, pouring out when my doors up.
Rap king's evident, ya better put ya flows up,
neon lights cursive reading, better cuff ya hoes up.
Beat in the trunk to make a virgin get swole up,
speakers vibrating so she cum and curl her toes up.
weak niggas, hold up, I'm all about cash,
gripping wood like a lumber jack, when touching on the dash.
You ride around on spinners, that's okay, it isn't bad,
chrome rims cut the road and leave it full of broken glass.
I'm clearly smoking hash as I pass, sticks of grass,
laws wanna pull me over, I'm a light a blunt in laugh.
Somebody tell Ro and Trae to add me into S.L.A.B.,
fifty thousand and a half to buy, my slab is up for grabs.

ha ha.

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

Hey credz, how long does the feedback have to be? I mean, I'm not a rap critic. If I like it I'll tell you what I like about it, do you want us to do a breakdown of the verses? Or just give long feedback.

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Hey credz, how long does the feedback have to be? I mean, I'm not a rap critic. If I like it I'll tell you what I like about it, do you want us to do a breakdown of the verses? Or just give long feedback.

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^3 lines minimum for feed back... for yo links^

this was pretty damn good yo.... good rhymes and alot of good flow on this... the stucutre was good.. could be better.. with sum practice and elevation you can get way better... good job anywayz.... :) have a good day and keep up the good work..

Thanks. I appreciate the feedback both the good and the bad. It's all love
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If you think that's tight check out my battles.

Leave longer feedback next time. i wont close this since you asked. But go a little longer.

Alright. Preciate that. Hey, what do I have to do to get some of my battles closed around here?

Second verse.
If I took a x-ray(cameras flashing), while sitting up on it,
to make it see thru everything inside the dash you want it.
It's like I bought my slab a chain, diamond's flashing on it.
Ocean blue watermarks look like the waves crashing on it.
Gotta park and get out when I feel like "puff passing" homie.
You askin why like you don't know I don't want ashes on it.
Don't lean on my car if ya fake nails get to scratching on it.
I'll say give me your face and get to slapping on it.
Just kiddin', but that gas get to smashing on it,
if you lucky instead of walking, you'll be "smashing" on it.
Passenger side gettin inside then she replied,
Hey baby why, you treat me like I ain't a dime.
I take a glance at my Rolex and tell her I ain't got time.
Keep it in mind, when you see me posted up by the sign.
Sippin' some wine, damn this verse is straight off the dome.
I'm trippin' cause I been sippin' on a fifth of petrone.
Let's Get It on like marvin ma, I'll take you home.
You mesmerized by the mouth full of glistening stones.
Visions of chrome, you'll dream about when you're all alone.
Cause I came through in a candy drop looking like 3 sno-cones.
ha ha

what da hell? mayonase and mustard vogues like my tires stuck to cold cuts?
wut da hell does dat mean, yo candy shop was a song bout girls dog, a remix is a different version of it but stayin on da same subject, u changed da subject to cars homie, didnt feel it sorry

Well I honestly think anything is better than 50's version of "Candy Shop", unless you have no creativity. But I liked this one. Took a song like that, and really made it into your own vision. the descriptions get better in the second verse, which is good. Hot one.

You actually took time out of your life to do this?




You could rap beside 50 any day.


(Not a compliment).

At least this version is better than 50's. The lyrics were typical and pretty much predictible. The flow was alright and the concept could of been used better. The rhymescheme is nothing special, just an average drop. You got potential though, just try being more meaningful with ur rhymes instead of playing around remixing weak songs. Keep dropping.

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^please give me feed-back.

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Originally Posted by Chuckles

what da hell? mayonase and mustard vogues like my tires stuck to cold cuts?
wut da hell does dat mean, yo candy shop was a song bout girls dog, a remix is a different version of it but stayin on da same subject, u changed da subject to cars homie, didnt feel it sorry

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Evidently you've never heard of H-Town underground music. Why use someone else's instrumental to make remix of a song just like the one they laid to that beat. That's worse than using 50's lyrics. People with no sense of style are like dikes with no vibrators. What the fuck?

Mayonaise and mustard vogues like my tires stuck to cold cuts
(white and yellow stripes on vogue tires make my tires look like they ran over a sandwich.) lol!

well i aint gonna hate at all....this was tight....i love tha H-Town Underground shit...im more for hip hop myself....but i love paul wall and chamillionare(even though there not together anymore)...this had mad potential....and dont let em get you down here..as long as you dont come with that gangsta bull shit...everybodys tight....and for tha record..fifty sucks....i liked tha vocab and wordplay...i like tha imagery....tight piece.keep droppin and elevatin.1~

Preciate the love. DiverseSyndicate hey that's a playa ass name.

thanks.~1~