Addicted

Addicted
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Im addicted...
...Convinced?
A convicted Prince....
...Charming. Starving for you.
Darling, im hardly just 'falling for you...'
Right now... I'm following you.....
But this is how I'm honouring you.
My picture of perfection... Object of my affection...
My protection... My obsession.
You should feel proud to be my addiction...
Im addicted...Escaping your conviction...
You're so wicked... My love, now its evicted from your heart...
It's found a new home in your mind... Set to tear it apart...
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I'm quiet like a riot, twice as single.
Im gonna die, I wanna try it...
Give me a symbol that you wont be my thimble...
Nimbley play with your hair while Im watching,
Sing 'til it hurts, lullaby to my coffin...
Curse me soon, blow me away like a baloon...
Burst me... Wound me... Break up my platoon.
Woo me... Use me... Be true to me... Confuse me.
Sue me... Run away... You never knew me anyway...
Hidden in the background of your mirror, I see it clearer,
I cower in your footsteps...
I hide amongst the clouds as I feel you getting nearer...
Fantasise... Good sex... Rough sex.
Enough...........
Lets just push ourselves to the limit with what we already pocess...
I'll just watch you from a distance... Hopeless... Homeless...
Making slow progress...
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Boneless... Lonely... You don't even know me.
Hold me... Console me... You once told me you owed me.
Standing there cold you were the only one to notice me...
Boldy you approached me, this wasn't supposed to be...
You openly accused me of being hopelessly devoted...
Abused me verbally, saying I doted on you...
Carefully... Carefree... You took away my world...
It was like genocide in front of me... Killing both boy and girl...
My fairytale was ended by the princess's accusations,
These allegations... Amazing!! Fabricated...
The only consolation of the confrontation is that now I own you...
You now sleep here with me... I now know you and your history...
My misery is replaced by the mystery of your face...
Your glazed over eyes and your lips without taste...
Tears to dry to cry... Replaced with a spray of mase...
With haste you took out the can,
I took it from your hand hand and you pushed it to far...
And now with a face full of stone, I sit on the throne of your heart.
My home is here with you... After I tore yours apart...
Im starting to like it... But I regret you felt you had to fight it...
I told you to take your lip and bite it... Hide it within you...
Silently I'll cry, 'I'm sorry I killed you......'
Goodbye.....
:)
xxx
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Take what you like........ Trying to curve the boredom! So trying out something new, kinda... Meh to all y'all who sleep... Fuckers!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=195231
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...76#post2458476
UPPPPP Muh'Fuckas

Upp'n this......

Whoa... I really really liked this. It was very abstract, which was interesting... Something different than usual. Your new style worked very well, had a consistant flow, great vocabulary, great story. The twist at the end... The scattered oxymorons all worked flawlessly with this... I was very impressed.

There isn't much more to say.... I'm nominating this for HoF because this was something brand new which takes courage to do... You wrote very well and you had a great storyline. Nice work...

Peace

This joint was serious the word were right and the money!
I didnt get the killing point till you said stione and untill the last line about killin.
This piece was overall a great one.
Keep doin ya thing cuz!

hey jofuz! your getting better everytime i read something of yours, this was nice, kinda origional too, in your classic style jafutastical!

nicely set out and an easy imaginative read..not much else to say...work more on complexity, vocab could have been maxed..it was good though! peep mine if you get the chance...peace out and jafu!

FanTa x x x x x x x

Ill peep yours after work..

Thanks for the replies, and thanks to Devi for the nom..

Upp

Thanks,

Elevate your feed...


Upp

ill piece,ill complexity,real poetic yet a hint of open mic,u r gettin a lot better,nice wordplay with this one too,easy to follow,strung together intricately,keep droppin and elevatin.~1~

haha good job issue, i gotta say homie thats my faveroite from u so far man! i liked that the bars wasnt so long like all ur other pieces bars r man! and u was droppin rhymes fuckin 4 times a bar dude! that shit was wacked man! anyways, i was vibin 2 that 1 man, u got my head bouncin homie! your vocab= me havin 2 use dictionaries man... ha, this piece seemed like it had a quick flow man and i thought that shit was bangin dude.... i like this new style of yours man, this shit got a bounce in a half dude... the storyline was kinda stalkerish tho eh? haha o well who cares that still top notch man! i especailly liked the ending there man, kinda topped it off real nice there.. wit him killin her n shit, i'm tryin 2 think o sumtin that i could tell u 2 improve on but, if i did i'd b a hipocrate... wtf? how the fuck u spell that? ahhh fuck it man u noe wat im sayin...

but dude check out my new shit, it's not a remix! haha i dono it dont measure up 2 urs but it's pretty tight on wax, i'm thinkin o re-doin it tho cuz sum niggaz didnt like it, i unno mayb split it up, instead o doin 1 song fo all my homies, i'll do 1 fo' each o them, giv em all their own bit o respect u noe wat im sayin? i lookforward 2 ur next shit and i look forward 2 ur feed on mine dude, i like hearin ur feed cuz i noe i can learn frum ya...

o yeah u might want the url... here man check this http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=194419
good job issue keep it up

Ill peep it soon mna, I promise, I gotta go to work now, thanks a lot for the feed :thumbup: stay up man,

Thanks to Diverse also...

Upp'n

Uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp...


I might start handing out pillows, i gotta start giving feed again!

wow, been a while since i've posted on RB

Your style has changed alot since the last peices i have read, honestly i like this style better..everything flowed great, emotion was also very good, you always keep me interested when reading your peices. you got indepth within each line. you just seem to be missing good vocab, i know your peices would be much better with some good vocab. dont get me wrong, your a very good writer as it is, im just saying vocab would make you that much better. but yeah, the whole concept of this was great, i loved it.. the end was a surprise, i didnt expect anything like that... To think of it, this topic is kinda played, but you came at it with a creative concept, i dunno how to explain it, but your style is unique, everything that i have read from you has been orginal...Oh and i forgot, your structure has gotten much better, it helped everything flow so much better. you've improved alot since i've last read some of your peices, keep at it, i'll be checkin RB out from time to time for some more of your peices.. keep at it.


Sorry if some of that wasnt to clear, im tired as fuck

Thnaks for the feed man, where've you been?


Upp

This was a great peice, I loved the flow and the topic, you did real well on thinkin of what to type. This was a peice that i've read over and over again. I thought there was really sumthin you were tryin to say. You were kind of tryin to say that you were expressin ya feelins to a girl. Thats the real deal. Keep up these great threads. :)

Thank You For The Feed.....

Upp

An interesting style switch here Issue, it had the really fragmented theme which i think reinforced the topic, along with the horrifying twist at the end. Are you gonna make this an audio? You should. Good imagery, great imagery actually. Strong vocab, occasionally simply rhymes but again this worked in the context of the piece. It was gripping from start to finish. Good work.

Keep reppin us right man.

Hit 'n' Run.

Kost, what's ur alias??

Thanks for the feed, Upppp

that drop was nice man a lot of twist in the story at no point did i get bored you used a lot of vocab I was very impressed not that i am someone to impress but u did your thing i liked how it started at one extreme and went all the way to the other great job

I like your sig, thanks for the feed.

Thank everyone for the feed so far,,,


Upp'n this...

I have to agree wid most people here.. you brought a new style
For me u told the story well and it was eays to follow
Was nice written with good choice of words which helps a whole lot more
Suprsing twist at the end
Good wordplay and effort gve u good resulst :)

thank ya.... uppppppppppppppppppppp

Ah a very dope peice, A nice abstract feeling to it. I like your use of multis, very well used.
Structure was also dope, Very original, which is always a good addition to a peice.
Your story line was also good,

Not much i can say, other than dope. Sorry i cant leave more feed. :thumbup:

I would nominate this for OM Hall Of Fame, But its already been done

Hit Up Me And Deviate collab
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=197248

I'll hit up the links later tonight when Im bored, when I can read them and leave at least decent feed lol.

Thanks for the feed man,

Uppppp

No thank you....


Upp'n for some good feed.

yo issue when u gon' check my shit out homie? common dawg i respect u tha most, mo than ne o these niggaz up in hurr! yo feed is important to me cuz i no i can learn frum ya man! check it out, s'in my signature... called: I miss my dawgs

I have done brother, sorry it took so long....

Very nice drop Issue...sorry i won't give you such an indepth feed,but it's already morning and i haven't had sleep at all.This was very nice.A kinda different style than you usual have.I think it suited the piece great.Your imagery was well done,sometimes simplistic but it just blended in with your aproach so well.The flow was solid,and i liked the rhymescheme.Again i feel it worked very well with your aproach.I feel the same way as Johnny with the vocab.I liked the emotion;it was complex.And your ending was great.Didn't see it at all.Very nice piece my man.Gonna go nominate it.Peace!

Thank you a lot K9!


Upp'n like a mofo...

this shit was sooo hot, man your creativity is on fire, your flow was there, the vocab was incredible, the thought was completely behind it, everything was great abotu this man.....we should collab sometime....peace out man

thank you for the feed mixtape, glad you liked it...