"Multi Mayhem"

Trying To Succeed This Rap Scene
I'm In The Back Seat, While Seeing The Gats Sqeeze
Trying To Trash Beef, But Stay Ready To Shoot
I'm Steady And Proof With The Deadliest Groups
Through The Darkest Nights I'm Holding Scars And Fights
My Heart Of Ice, Is Waiting Under The Apartment Lights
My Card Of Life, Is Close To A Wasted Breath
I've Tasted Flesh And Set Many To The Gates Of Death
In Basements-Wet While Trying To Create Respect, Ace This Deck
I'm Bold And Ruthless And Trying To Own The New Shit
Left Alone And Useless Just To Roam With 2 Clips
I'm Reppin In A Storm When Waves Crash And Collide
A Weapon In The Seat, Gunman In The Passenger Side
Passing The 9, Whats This Nigga Just Asking To Die?
I Come To Strangle The Game At Every Angle And Aim
Bang Up A Gang, Fuck It I'll Just Gang Up The Same
This Shit Wrecks My Knees, Mentality Just Expects To Bleed
Its Stressing Me I Just Wana Leave And Rest In Peace


Time For Some Language Arts People..

A Lyrical Titan And Lord, Comes Igniting A Storm
Striking With Swords As I Come Sharpen The Blade
I Darken The Pain With Gernades I'm Bombing Brigades
With Arsonist Play My Light And Fire Is Carving The Way
To The Moshpit Of Fame With My Anger That Often Remains
With Ofensive Rage That Stands And Slaughters The Slays
The Source Of My Worth Explodes Before My Organs Disperse
Torments It First, A Mercury Burst Fed On By Serpents And Birds

Nice Man I Love The Multi's If You Peep My Battles Cuzz, We Should COllab This Rhyme Scheme Was Nice Cuzz Keep Doing Your Thing Don't Forget To Leave links Man

Nice, I loved the Muiltes no t a bad piece at all descrption was great could have made it a lil longer though good job

Links:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=191469

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...16#post2398716

Meh decent drop, Keep it up.

MainFrame, Those 6 words were a waste of my time for reading them..

Shit man....it's reading through these forums that show me how much further I have to improve. I have to give you a lot of respect, b/c i read some shit that tries to do the same, but they throw in a lot of extra words that don't further what they're saying, but here every word fit in with the story you had to tell. This'll be a good piece to look at when I'm trying to incorporate multi's into mine....thanx for droppin' it.

Thanks, appreciate it

I Didnt See One Decent Multi Located In This Entire Piece, Im Agreeing With Main, Aint To Hot.

try an stunt on me put the torch 2 ya spine, keep ya distance, i shoot like jordan in his prime. u aint got a chance go head try an stop me, goons follow u around like paparazzis. i got kids from the hood thata run in ya crib,, take a box cutter and dig out ya ribs. simple as this shit is real, if dr. dre was ur dad u still wouldnt get a deal. no matter what u do u cant spoil the saga, get shitted on like toilet water. im the real deal the rest faker than weave, lyrics one of a kind erase mc's. walk the other way dont follow the beef, i pack a punch thata make u swallow ya teeth. dont try to battle me, u aint half a me, nother tragedy , if u comin bring a cavalry

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Originally Posted by Awh.Chew

I Didnt See One Decent Multi Located In This Entire Piece, Im Agreeing With Main, Aint To Hot.

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ROFL... Your nothing nigga..

Trying To Succeed This Rap Scene
I'm In The Back Seat, While Seeing The Gats Sqeeze

The Bar Doesnt Even Rhyme, Let Alone Does It Contain A Multie.

Trying To Trash Beef, But Stay Ready To Shoot
I'm Steady And Proof With The Deadliest Groups

Again Does Not Contain One Multie.

Through The Darkest Nights I'm Holding Scars And Fights
My Heart Of Ice, Is Waiting Under The Apartment Lights

You Have One Ending Multie, But Not Any Doubles Or Internels.

My Card Of Life, Is Close To A Wasted Breath
I've Tasted Flesh And Set Many To The Gates Of Death

Doesnt Have A Multie, But It ACTUALLY RHYMES!

In Basements-Wet While Trying To Create Respect, Ace This Deck
I'm Bold And Ruthless And Trying To Own The New Shit

Nothing Rhymes At All.

Left Alone And Useless Just To Roam With 2 Clips
I'm Reppin In A Storm When Waves Crash And Collide

Nope Nothing.

A Weapon In The Seat, Gunman In The Passenger Side
Passing The 9, Whats This Nigga Just Asking To Die?

Nope Doesnt Stick Out.

I Come To Strangle The Game At Every Angle And Aim
Bang Up A Gang, Fuck It I'll Just Gang Up The Same

You Finally Rhymed Again!!

This Shit Wrecks My Knees, Mentality Just Expects To Bleed
Its Stressing Me I Just Wana Leave And Rest In Peace

Doesnt Rhyme, Nor Have A Multie.

A Lyrical Titan And Lord, Comes Igniting A Storm
Striking With Swords As I Come Sharpen The Blade

Doesnt Rhyme, Nor Have A Multie.

I Darken The Pain With Gernades I'm Bombing Brigades
With Arsonist Play My Light And Fire Is Carving The Way

No Rhyme, No Multie

To The Moshpit Of Fame With My Anger That Often Remains
With Ofensive Rage That Stands And Slaughters The Slays

Again No Rhyme.

The Source Of My Worth Explodes Before My Organs Disperse
Torments It First, A Mercury Burst Fed On By Serpents And Birds

Again, No Rhymes.


Overall- For Being Titled "Multi Mayhem" You Would Think This Would Have A Multie, But Its Funny Because It Doesnt Have One At All. You Rarely Rhymed At The End Or Inside Of Your Lines. So As I State Again, This Isnt To Good.

that's a very harsh evaluation chew.....I thought this was ok..I mean it didn't blow me off my seat but that's prolly cuz u were concentrating too much on flow and multis and didn't put any meaning in this....it has no topic/ theme but i guess u weren't aiming on making this meaningful so it's ok

Considering Its Called "Multi Mayhem" Youd Think It Would Have Multies In It, So Why Wouldnt I Judge It On That?

[B]this was iight
inspite the lack of vision
good rhyming
the flow was so so
structure ok
over all decent

a yo check it

bitchs say i am gone na yall are wrong thats why i made dis song u punk ass bitches/ u be in the form of rags never the riches u be givein me the itches when eva i am around u yea i olny say that cause that is true/my flow can be slow i think that is what everyone knows i be getin blows from my foes,my rhymes rolled up in fours, heavnly hoes stacked up on my door ready to roll i got 24 inches rims in my car also ready to roll/bump into some one up in the dance floor tellin me he want ta fight me he frontin all up in da mix and dont even know what the flava be i think he came in with out i d/so any ways i am back in da game did u prepare ta lose ya hair?blast past ya when i start ta write about ya uhh ha

You You Stil lDown For That Collab Man Holla At Me

what are u talkin bout me or someone else

i kike that

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Awh.Chew

Trying To Succeed This Rap Scene
I'm In The Back Seat, While Seeing The Gats Sqeeze

The Bar Doesnt Even Rhyme, Let Alone Does It Contain A Multie.

Trying To Trash Beef, But Stay Ready To Shoot
I'm Steady And Proof With The Deadliest Groups

Again Does Not Contain One Multie.

Through The Darkest Nights I'm Holding Scars And Fights
My Heart Of Ice, Is Waiting Under The Apartment Lights

You Have One Ending Multie, But Not Any Doubles Or Internels.

My Card Of Life, Is Close To A Wasted Breath
I've Tasted Flesh And Set Many To The Gates Of Death

Doesnt Have A Multie, But It ACTUALLY RHYMES!

In Basements-Wet While Trying To Create Respect, Ace This Deck
I'm Bold And Ruthless And Trying To Own The New Shit

Nothing Rhymes At All.

Left Alone And Useless Just To Roam With 2 Clips
I'm Reppin In A Storm When Waves Crash And Collide

Nope Nothing.

A Weapon In The Seat, Gunman In The Passenger Side
Passing The 9, Whats This Nigga Just Asking To Die?

Nope Doesnt Stick Out.

I Come To Strangle The Game At Every Angle And Aim
Bang Up A Gang, Fuck It I'll Just Gang Up The Same

You Finally Rhymed Again!!

This Shit Wrecks My Knees, Mentality Just Expects To Bleed
Its Stressing Me I Just Wana Leave And Rest In Peace

Doesnt Rhyme, Nor Have A Multie.

A Lyrical Titan And Lord, Comes Igniting A Storm
Striking With Swords As I Come Sharpen The Blade

Doesnt Rhyme, Nor Have A Multie.

I Darken The Pain With Gernades I'm Bombing Brigades
With Arsonist Play My Light And Fire Is Carving The Way

No Rhyme, No Multie

To The Moshpit Of Fame With My Anger That Often Remains
With Ofensive Rage That Stands And Slaughters The Slays

Again No Rhyme.

The Source Of My Worth Explodes Before My Organs Disperse
Torments It First, A Mercury Burst Fed On By Serpents And Birds

Again, No Rhymes.


Overall- For Being Titled "Multi Mayhem" You Would Think This Would Have A Multie, But Its Funny Because It Doesnt Have One At All. You Rarely Rhymed At The End Or Inside Of Your Lines. So As I State Again, This Isnt To Good.

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I agree with u i was a let down the title is y I looked at it and no multis, get a better title like kinda rhyming mayhem

nyce nyce sounds liek u got a chi ttown flow

lol multi's were ehhh.. not that good,flow n structure didnt like it and it made no scence to me at all,i didn't understand any of it.. pz~

are u talkin about mine ?

yall just mad cause no one does it like t.w.i.s.t

Lmmfao Who The Hell Are You, This Wasnt Even Your Thread.