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Originally Posted by Vaskez
ok that's your check. This is my check. Verses due in 30 mins, start writing.
yo i'll be back in 10 minutes wait for me.Quote:
Originally Posted by Short Fuz
haha! whatever, just post your verse, I'll post mine soon
AIght I'm done already, check it, this is some relatively quick shit:
Today I ain't in the mood for this crap, I'll lyrically murder-this-cat
He gettin hurt-by-my-gat worse than Jackie Chan getting hurled-on-his-back
Haha, he told me he droppin heat when he raps, well I agree
When he sees me, he drops his gun and flees swiftly
His shorty confided in me, "short fuz" means he cums too quickly
That's an old diss, but see, for this pussy, it still radiates applicability
His flow sounds pathetic, worse than a blind dyslexic
Tryina read Shakespeare from braille with fingers that's prosthetic
I'ma light this Short Fuz and watch him collapse and implode lyrically
Fall apart intrinsically, he'll be like "Nooo! This is confusing me!"
Like a dude after a sex-change op discovering a lesbian tendency
hehehe, hurry up and post your verse, homie!
Yo I'm gonna start this nicley
they ain't no probably
n i don't even talk
i just do it like nike
yo dude u a faggot/i don't mean to get personal
but this cat is a amature/like boxers that ain't professional
i'll run up in your house/ n put da four up in your mouth/
the only click u ever had was on a computer mouse/
so act like u want it with me/ how dare u try it/
i ain't even looking for beef i'm on a diet
n as far as getting pussy mudafucker u fail/ da only sex u gonna have is your gender male
yo that was some good shit. how long u been rapping for
cheers man, I've been listenin to rap for 10 years so picked up some tips, I only rap occasionally, just started writin on this site under 2 weeks ago, but had around 10 battles now.
I really just started writing like 3 to 4 months now. but good battle.
Vaskez came alot harder, better structure, punches, vocab and funniness...
This battle was really one sided, short needs to elevate alot...Keep dropping Vaskez
V/Vaskez
i have to give it to vaskez his punches were a little better although short fuz had some good punches in some parts the metaphores were a little basic
v/vaskez
return the favor on my battles if u can i would appriciate it.1oo
Vaskez for harder punches and better structure, short fuz you gotta be more complex wit ur metaphores...say shit no-one would normally think of, thatz how u get upz
vaskez came right at 'em with better structure and better punches.This battle was one sided cause short fuz really didn't got at vaskez cause he spit some shit that you could say to any body he didnt spit talkin about vaskez.One sided battle.
V/Vaskez.
RTF
thanks for the feedback, I'll RTF but maybe on sunday eve, I'm out all weekend. uppin
uppin for votes...................................
uppin............................................. .
vaskez won this i felt his stuff more it had better flow n better structure
V/V lol
return the favor plz
Vaskez came alot harder, better structure, punches, vocab and funniness...
This battle was really one sided, short needs to elevate alot...Keep dropping Vaskez
V/Vaskez
bump #5...........................................
lol @ this battle .
short .. ya gotta lot of work to do homie. you sound
like a pretty decent kid, so my advice to ya would be
to read some LLL battles, possibly check out the
help tutorials too. i dont wanna leave all negative
feedback cus its pointless. vaskez .. you got this battle
rather easily.. takin on a new kid. had a decent verse,
definitely not one of your top quality ones. but you
did win this simply for your veign of battling skills.
v/ vaskez
rtf vs shin .. forgot the link. on the 1st page i think.
Yo, that was some sick rap skills....i aint seen nothing like it
vaskez-
Today I ain't in the mood for this crap, I'll lyrically murder-this-cat
He gettin hurt-by-my-gat worse than Jackie Chan getting hurled-on-his-back
....nice opener and punch....
Haha, he told me he droppin heat when he raps, well I agree
When he sees me, he drops his gun and flees swiftly
....not bad here........
His shorty confided in me, "short fuz" means he cums too quickly
That's an old diss, but see, for this pussy, it still radiates applicability
.....good punch...and personal........
His flow sounds pathetic, worse than a blind dyslexic
Tryina read Shakespeare from braille with fingers that's prosthetic
.....another good punch........
I'ma light this Short Fuz and watch him collapse and implode lyrically
Fall apart intrinsically, he'll be like "Nooo! This is confusing me!"
Like a dude after a sex-change op discovering a lesbian tendency
.....nice punch and closer...
overall-9/10
nice verse here, especially for it being quick. thats some good shit. keep it up
short fuz-
Yo I'm gonna start this nicley
they ain't no probably
...uh what? elevate.....
n i don't even talk
i just do it like nike
...elevate.....
yo dude u a faggot/i don't mean to get personal
but this cat is a amature/like boxers that ain't professional
....elevate.........
i'll run up in your house/ n put da four up in your mouth/
the only click u ever had was on a computer mouse/
...decent actually.......
so act like u want it with me/ how dare u try it/
i ain't even looking for beef i'm on a diet
...hehe funny, not bad....
n as far as getting pussy mudafucker u fail/ da only sex u gonna have is your gender male
.....eh decent closer...
overall-4/10
weak verse. no hate man, you just need to elevate alot. just work at it and it will come. this was by far a one sided verse.
v/vaskez