Jekyll Ft. Eddy -Brainstorm?

Jekyll

We brainstorm, like cerebral electrical storms
Stay inside and cover your children ..
.. A typoon is sweeping in fast, you have been warned!
The streets are deserted, a perverted emptiness in the air
You can either stand there and stare ..
.. Or try to hone your natural flair
Elemental forces – they are diametrically opposed,
Somewhere in nature’s garden,
Someone, just pulled the plug and condoned ..
.. Millions of people to death,
It seems that fate and fear are juxtaposed
You will look me in my eyes ..
.. And I at once become unclothed

Switching y0

Eddy


So weak .. so weak .. whats inside .. inside my heart and brain?

my being is just in a state of incongruity
giving all i got .. everything i AM!
without any gratuity.. of any kind
the simple mind, will say its obvious
you just took the wrong WAY!
and just let it happen ..
enclosed it in your broken heart and made it stay
breaking my encephalon just too find out any kind of solution
but even with all my wrongdoing
i just needed too find the path of retribution
i am, yes i am .. a prisoner ...trapped inside this collision of love and hate
though i kept my faith .. i couldnt execute any actions for revision
a chemical reaction from my own corrupt decisions resulting into visions:
.. blurry and clouded
those origins of life are just shrouded in mystery
but i just fail too see .. the truth ..

Theres this storm, inside my brain.

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The two verses actually gelled surprisingly well.

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Ed, that "you children" is actually supposed to be "your children."

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Read this.

Very dope piece fellas. Jekyll held it down, starting things off with dope imagery, and kept me interested. Suicide had a dope character voice and expressed a little more emotion which was pretty dope. Both ya had dope verses, both compliment each others. Jek, I see your using the half bar structure which helps alot when you need that crucial stop, I know eds been using it for ages.

This had a great vocabulary and a vast ammount of content,but the rhymes seemed lacking somewhat.Just rhyme alittle better and more.
poetically,this was great...filled with imagery and emotion,but since it was posted in open mic,I see room for improvement rhyme-wise.

fucka good writiers... making my shit not look as dope...

naw just playin.. this was good.

jek mentioned that the verses gelled well, and i agree for the most part.
prolly cuz they were really different in the style and approach, which made it interesting to read.

this was cool guys.

check out behind the music,

This was cool. The styles were very similar. I could see this in the poetic scriptures section. Decent shit.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=182419

Yeah - Sirus, I mentioned that they gelled well, because neither of us knew what the other was keying up, we just went off of the word "brainstorm," without too much of a plan. And they still came out kinda similar. Lol.

& Wicked - I'll get at yours tomorrow, when I have a little more time. For now, upping.

That Shit was fire but kinda short you left me hanging but it was still hot the verses sound good together

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This was really good

I prefered Jekyll's verse to Eddy's because it just seemed to catch my eye more. But both were dope. Flow was good in both but the creativity stood out more than anythin...

Good work by both

Can ya's both hit this up please: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...03#post2240003

thanks for replys

quik collabbo's are dope .. good job Jek ..

next time we will put in more time and effort .. ok :)

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Decent peace, I'm not really into that poetry stuff, But is was still decent.

^lmao

.. kids these days, only replying towards names .. dont even read.. bleh

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^ True that.

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Ed, that "you children" is actually supposed to be "your children."

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So.. you want to maybe edit that for me? :)

oh sure :)

Yep.

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Decent peace, I'm not really into that poetry stuff, But is was still decent.

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^lmao...decent peace...

now back to you guys...it can be seen it's not something you've put time into it because in some parts you could've rhymed more.Beside that nothing to criticize.The imagery was done well with the use of good vocabulary.And the two verses really fitted togheter well,and i liked that especialy that you both did this as a quick collab.Overall a fine read...Keep it up guys!

lol at could rhymed more, go elevate y0

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alright, i'm glad i checked this out and i find it very interesting how you didnt know what each other was writing and it came out the same way, that's really cool.. great minds think alike yes?

i liked how the lines rhymed together and it just seemed to fit.. good job to the both of you.

yup..

sigh

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