~sTr8-PUNCH"Z~PT.2 f/b plz...

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March 11th, 2005, 12:48 PM
KªL¡

~~~sTr8-PUNCH"Z~~~PT.2 f/b plz...

I'ma a Masochist Wit Massive-Fist that could easily Smash and Damage-This Adjective Savage-Wit Practice-Hits! (not trying)/ cause my Immaculate Acts- To-Rip are Accurate when Attackin'-Hiz Wackest-Scripts Wit a Placid thus orderly Fashion-Twist/lmagine-This ish (mentally) this iz MatRix-BITCH!, a mechanical Animist Annalist Dada-Disc(computerized) proGrammed-To-Spit Hazardous! «well Bustin'-Poemz, but still capable to Crush-Hiz-Bonez and smoke tha Ashes-Wit Cannabis... .

Face-Tha-Truth-KIDZ!, I Hate-To-Do-This but He'z a Basic-Cubic(square) Wit Ape-Acoustics spittin' Tasteless-Fluid/Fuck it!, I'll Erase-This-Dude-QUICK then Embrace hiz Face-Wit-2-Fist thus leavin' it Scraped-And-Toothless for rappin' Fake-And-Stupid(dumb ass)/Uhhhhhhhhhhh, gettinl Thuggish punchin' hiz Stomach well Braking-Through-Ribz/ (here we go»>Wit 2 Stakes-Wit-Toothpicks attached to tha Straight-End-2-Tips by Eighteen-Glue-Sticks thus Making-U-Sick!(dizzy from these sick syllablez)/ /...

I'll deMolish-Hiz-Tendenciez. Cause look!, I'ma Topical Diabolical-Enemy word Rhyming-SIC-He-Pretendz-To-Be/tha most significant Odde~t-Supremacy Wit tha Enmity to leave this extraterrestrial, Biological-Entity wit NO .Eyez-Nor-Logical-Energy / / ...

WOULD LIKE FEED BACK, DROP LINX ILL RETURN THE FAVOR....

MY 2EW LINX:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=174122
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=173525

KALIKOZE9/11.. :shoot:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/atta...&stc=1&thumb=1
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VOTE ON MY BATTLES: WILL RETURN THE FAVOR...............

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176857
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176588
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176852
March 11th, 2005, 12:59 PM
Lonely Child

I'm feeeling you but you not on my level!!!
March 11th, 2005, 02:00 PM
KªL¡

good lookn' 4 feel'n it,

but you shouldnt speak about 'SHIT' you dont know......
exactly,------what kinda level you on w/ two posts.....
March 11th, 2005, 04:49 PM
KªL¡

UPPIN.............
CAN I GET SOME FEEDBACK...........

CHECK OUT MY CURRENT BATTLES:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176857
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176588
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176852
March 11th, 2005, 05:13 PM
DJsmokey

damn man this was straight up sick, hard punches mixed wit a lotta multis, 1 of the best chemistry's out there.

Face-Tha-Truth-KIDZ!, I Hate-To-Do-This but He'z a Basic-Cubic(square) Wit Ape-Acoustics spittin' Tasteless-Fluid/Fuck it!, I'll Erase-This-Dude-QUICK then Embrace hiz Face-Wit-2-Fist thus leavin' it Scraped-And-Toothless for rappin' Fake-And-Stupid(dumb ass)/Uhhhhhhhhhhh, gettinl Thuggish punchin' hiz Stomach well Braking-Through-Ribz/ (here we go»>Wit 2 Stakes-Wit-Toothpicks attached to tha Straight-End-2-Tips by Eighteen-Glue-Sticks thus Making-U-Sick!(dizzy from these sick syllablez)/ /...

yea i'm feelin this!
March 12th, 2005, 02:00 AM
KªL¡

uppin..........good lookn DJsmokey, always appreciate the feedback.........thnx...
drop linx will return the fav:

VOTE ON THESE HOTT BATTLES:PLZ DECENT FEEDBACK, THNX

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176857
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176588
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176852
March 12th, 2005, 04:47 AM
Edicius

yes ..

this was very bad.
March 12th, 2005, 04:57 AM
Dan Dare

Ehhh.
Lah.
Vate.
March 12th, 2005, 05:22 AM
V.J.E

kali u change ya styles alot so i don't know if its off da top or w/e but it was nice
March 12th, 2005, 05:39 AM
Baron Mynd

Quote:

Originally Posted by V.J.E

kali u change ya styles alot so i don't know if its off da top or ..

Nope, he's a biter.
March 12th, 2005, 09:18 AM
Brooklyn Bob

not bad, kinda methodman/ice cube feel to it (obviously not as good, no offence)
March 12th, 2005, 11:18 AM
KªL¡

Quote:

Originally Posted by V.J.E

kali u change ya styles alot so i don't know if its off da top or w/e but it was nice

its not that i change my style, its pretty much;- right now, im tryna feel where im most comfortable @ in spittin,

tryna push my verbal vocab, as far as i can w/o having to keep the concept of its rapping, rhyming, etc.... INTO PLAY

its an art form for me, i do not try and really impress anyone but myself...because i know there is always way better than me out there.....
SO I GOTTA PROVE THAT I CAN DO BETTER, NOT ALWAYS SUCCESSFUL, LIKE EVERYONE ELSE, BUT @LEAST I TRIED, N DIDNT PUNK OUT.....

im just having fun with it...i have been doing this on and off for years.....not rhyming on the pc, just went i like went to the county & dudes wantd 2 battle write, so i did it, but didnt proceed with it after......

just recently i got in to again....i dont use my style from anyone elses i think, maybe b/c i never sat, and compared myself to anyone, but i dont feel i should have to anyway..........

FAR FROM BITTING....

in the elucid words of (B-RAD)--REPRESN'TN (BU).....DONT BE HAT'N.......

BUT SERIOUSLY THO' I JUST SIT HERE AND TYPE, YEAH I USE THESAURUS'S AND SHIT, FOR ALOTTA MY JUMPOFFS, AND DICTIONARIES, SO IT SEEMS SOME TIMES, IM STRETCHING TOO FAR, OR IT SEEMS TO FIT TOO PERFECT,
I CANT HELP THAT, BUT FIND ME WHO I BITE FROM........CUZ THERE AINT NONE.......ITS JUST SOMETHING FOR SOMEONE TO FIND AN EXCUSE AS TO WHY, SOMETIMES IM BACK N FORTH WITH IT..........
SORRY BUT I THINK ITS CALLED DIVERSITY.....

SO ALL YA THOUGHTS & OPINIONS ARE APPRECIATED, KEEP GIVING FEEDBACK, & KEEP DROPPING........
I AINT MAD @ MOST OF OFF YALL THAT DONT WANNA ADMIT IM NICE,
CUZ ITS TOO MUCH OF AN EGO DOWNER........
TO SAY SOMEONE ELSE IS BETTER THAN YOU...................
March 12th, 2005, 11:20 AM
KªL¡

Quote:

Originally Posted by Caramac

Nope, he's a biter.

its not that i change my style, its pretty much;- right now, im tryna feel where im most comfortable @ in spittin,

tryna push my verbal vocab, as far as i can w/o having to keep the concept of its rapping, rhyming, etc.... INTO PLAY

its an art form for me, i do not try and really impress anyone but myself...because i know there is always way better than me out there.....
SO I GOTTA PROVE THAT I CAN DO BETTER, NOT ALWAYS SUCCESSFUL, LIKE EVERYONE ELSE, BUT @LEAST I TRIED, N DIDNT PUNK OUT.....

im just having fun with it...i have been doing this on and off for years.....not rhyming on the pc, just went i like went to the county & dudes wantd 2 battle write, so i did it, but didnt proceed with it after......

just recently i got in to again....i dont use my style from anyone elses i think, maybe b/c i never sat, and compared myself to anyone, but i dont feel i should have to anyway..........

FAR FROM BITTING....

in the elucid words of (B-RAD)--REPRESN'TN (BU).....DONT BE HAT'N.......

BUT SERIOUSLY THO' I JUST SIT HERE AND TYPE, YEAH I USE THESAURUS'S AND SHIT, FOR ALOTTA MY JUMPOFFS, AND DICTIONARIES, SO IT SEEMS SOME TIMES, IM STRETCHING TOO FAR, OR IT SEEMS TO FIT TOO PERFECT,
I CANT HELP THAT, BUT FIND ME WHO I BITE FROM........CUZ THERE AINT NONE.......ITS JUST SOMETHING FOR SOMEONE TO FIND AN EXCUSE AS TO WHY, SOMETIMES IM BACK N FORTH WITH IT..........
SORRY BUT I THINK ITS CALLED DIVERSITY.....

SO ALL YA THOUGHTS & OPINIONS ARE APPRECIATED, KEEP GIVING FEEDBACK, & KEEP DROPPING........
I AINT MAD @ MOST OF OFF YALL THAT DONT WANNA ADMIT IM NICE,
CUZ ITS TOO MUCH OF AN EGO DOWNER........
TO SAY SOMEONE ELSE IS BETTER THAN YOU...................
March 12th, 2005, 11:21 AM
Illus'

Just too sloppy...
Structure...sucks
...why do people feel
they need to explain themselves
in their flow...?
March 12th, 2005, 12:04 PM
KªL¡

Not Explaining My Flow....

How + Where........points Plz. Dont C'm
March 12th, 2005, 01:24 PM
Seminole

I liked it....Part one was a lil better to me....I like how u flipped ya style and threw in the multis....there aint nothin wrong wit tryin out different shit...it only makes u better...and i can agree wit wut u said above...you doin this shit for YOU and only YOU...regardless of how good u do, niggas will always find a way to condemn ya shit...structure didnt bug me, cuz i myself write in paragraph form at times...and why does it matter about the stucture....WE ALL READ IN ONE DIRECTION....LEFT TO RIGHT...so it shouldnt be a big deal...but like i said, niggas will always find some dumb shit to say...good punches kid.

-one
March 12th, 2005, 03:39 PM
Lay Doubt.

I wans't feeling this drop very much. It was filled with self-glorification and vocabulary that was out of context and was used just for the sake of rhyme. Your multis were cool and it did flow well, but like I said, most of it made absolutely no sense in the way that used it. Work on learning what words mean before you type them just to make your verse flow. Your title implied you were aiming for straight punches, but there were no punches in this really. Read some LLL battles if you want to learn how to punch effectively, because punches > flow.. anyday.

Peace.
March 12th, 2005, 06:54 PM
KªL¡

Quote:

Originally Posted by Seminole

I liked it....Part one was a lil better to me....I like how u flipped ya style and threw in the multis....there aint nothin wrong wit tryin out different shit...it only makes u better...and i can agree wit wut u said above...you doin this shit for YOU and only YOU...regardless of how good u do, niggas will always find a way to condemn ya shit...structure didnt bug me, cuz i myself write in paragraph form at times...and why does it matter about the stucture....WE ALL READ IN ONE DIRECTION....LEFT TO RIGHT...so it shouldnt be a big deal...but like i said, niggas will always find some dumb shit to say...good punches kid.

-one

ayo seminole: appreciate the feedback, and its good to know that someone here understands the normality of wut im sayn plus, you always have good feedback, whether (-) of (+), so i take your words into deep thought,

what alotta ppl dont understand is that, i know yeah its all supposed 2 b in positive criticism to only make eachother better, in what we do here.
and alotta ppl forget that,
always saying yo ya structure is off, blah-zay, blah, but wut they need to get also, is that they are reading something someone else wrote.....and judging on how they wrote it........
their feedback should not interpret that their structure is off. Based on the fact that it wasnt written to fit their needs, and the way they would like to read it.....its not them who write it, so if ya cant follow the flow, or try to, maybe even grasp the concept of the writer........This shit isnt for them......

but enoughf of this long ass feedback, good lookn seminole.....

BASICALLY: IMA KEEP DOING ME.....& AINT NUFF'N GONE CHANGE-----1

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176857
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176588
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176852
March 12th, 2005, 10:10 PM
Seminole

Amen to that bro. just do u and only u...

~~~sTr8-PUNCH"Z~~~PT.2 f/b plz...

~sTr8-PUNCH"Z~PT.2 f/b plz...