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You/your....
YOU always looked down on me...YOU, YOU, it's all YOU
Demoralized my spirit with all the harshness YOU threw
Played catch with my soul, and sadly I started believing
That I was insignificant, and thats a horrible feeling
YOU mock the way I look, YOU laugh at the way I speak
And YOU poke fun at my race, I'm not white so I'm weak?
I jus stood in the corner smoking, but the light revealed my fright
Lung's black I didnt wanna see YOU, so I exhaled night
The sight of YOU disturbs me, and I wonder if maybe YOUR saying the truth
Am I really good for nothing, cause I'm a minority and a youth
All the headlines and top storys, in all the newspapers seem to agree
But what YOU don't understand, is that those headlines aren't me
I could tell YOU "Don't stereotype" But it would fall on deaf ears
Cause YOU only hear, what YOUR brain wants to hear
Picture this, a dark alley with trash littering the ground
The streetlight fades in and out casting shadows all around
An open dumpster against the wall, and a body halfway in
Face is face down, looking towards where his new life will begin
The outskirts of the ghetto, three gunshots in the back
What do you assume, I bet it's that the murderer is black
Look at the fuckin headlines, when a white kid kills someone
"Nice white varsity athlete gives in to peer pressure and drugs"
You blame video games and movies, cause white people aint criminals
You always blame something else, and it makes you feel better yo
Aint nothing ever your fault, yall can't ever take the blame
Your rules and your game, where I'm forced to play
Now same situation where the killer is of colored skin
"Asian gangster compromises innocent lives in a street shootout again"
"Black drug dealer kills one as drug deal turns sour"
"Mexican gang brawl ruins store and kills innocent bystander"
The media skews images, and feeds into Your very fears inside
Land of equal oppurtunity? We got more of a chance to die
So FUCK YOU YOU piece of shit! I aint like YOU think bitch
I'm automatically trouble? Cause my first language isn't English?
YOU say we never change, same old shit and nothing new
But YOU have to give us a chance, and then we'll surprise YOU
I'm finally fed up! I swear next time someone gives me a look man
...Nah I aint violent, There that disproves everything YOU believe in
But Fuck you and you and you, but most of all especially YOU
Cause YOU have no idea, what its like to be me dude
YOU know who YOU are, but do they see YOUR face?
Do they know what it's like to be spit at in the face
Or kicked out of stores, cause people expect me to steal
And being randomly searched, cause I'm expected to deal
I could give YOU a name, but I must be weary of backlash to me
So for now I'll just call YOU.........................American Society
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Shit took me a while to read mayne.. but shit it was worth it.. i was feelin the topic.. flowed nice, and came out nice.. woRd..
Cant really complain about anything on this peace mayne, i was feelin it..
9/10
Stay up homes..
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This was a nice verse the topic was obviously something you really wanted to take your time on and get deep into the subject and you did.
The structure and vocab were fine the flow needs work but the emotion and feeling in the words made the verses hot.
Reply to this please.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176403
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first i want to say it was rasial.not rasist,rasial.ya spoken about the problems still lurkin near minorities and ya'r mostly right.i liked how ya used the "YOU" written in uppercase to empesize yar thoughts,yar hate...really helped to transmit the message mo clearly.the drop was good,ya expressed good yar own thoughts and was a fine read.i really felt this drop man.keep it up!
please return the fav
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176263
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ay, that was some deep shit son. i was feeling it from top to bottom, very long but def good. thats some work i enjoy reading. nice job. if you could return the favor and vote on one of my battles id appreciate it.
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i appreciate your work man its truely dope,i liked the new style man...if it even is a new style lol,thge emotion as usual; was dominant in this poem and made it more interesting to read,the imagery was decent also,but i felt this poem was made more for expression and emotion,so i didnt expect alot of imagery to be honest,,,this was a nice read man....
sincerly
Kay Oh Tic
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First true spoken word i've seen from you lyric, I gots to say I look forward to more. Very good read, I could see you emphasising and exaggerating certain words and their sounds, almost like you were doing this live. Good job on that and good job on this rant. The ending was done well, the only thing I can hate on is the fact that this should be an audio spoken word foo!
You are a really solid writer man...
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hell of a long piece but you replied to mine so in fairness..its was a good read man, like i said hella long but once i got reading it it actually seemed to hold my attention till the end, nice topic, this sort of thing is always good to do cause its an oppotunity to express some real raw emotion, and since thats what sells...i'd say your doing great with this style, keep it up...and you said you wanted to collab?
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What bounce said. Plus I already gave feed on this you dirty feed stealer...lol
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Liked it. felt the emotion. dont know what its like to be discriminated against but it must be a bitch. couldve sounded good as an audio track too. stay up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=176682
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very nice a very fucking nice read lmao from start to finish you realed me in not once did I schim down the OM to get to the end big ups to you on this OM this may be my first nomination lmao
I could give YOU a name, but I must be weary of backlash to me
So for now I'll just call YOU.........................American Society
^ keep it up man DOPE
peace
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You never cease to wow me wit your stuff, this was real nice. This whole concept was nice. Some real words, great vocab, great emotion, great everything........it was all on point. Keep spittin the hot stuff Lyric!!!!
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this was long as hell but way worth the while. i can relate to it in a different way . would like to do a remix to this if so hit me up on my pm. we can have the black an white version. peace out
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Eh it was as long as I thought it'd be, but it was very good.
Fav lines from each verse:
verse 1:
I jus stood in the corner smoking, but the light revealed my fright
Lung's black I didnt wanna see YOU, so I exhaled night
^ A poetic feel to it, I have had the same thought before so I liked this a lot.
verse 2:
The media skews images, and feeds into Your very fears inside
Land of equal oppurtunity? We got more of a chance to die
^ came right after the quotes, made it pretty nice sounding, I liked this the best out of everything.
verse 3:
Or kicked out of stores, cause people expect me to steal
And being randomly searched, cause I'm expected to deal
^ felt on this... Not taking it overboard but stating a point. Good.
Overall this was a very good piece. 8.8/10
Keep makin OMs.
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anyone who even mentioned that it was long.. is stupid.. haha.. it was 16 bars a verse, so it was a full song, not jus a lil 20 bar spit most you drop... onto reply, i liked it alot.. it is a very valid topic, 'cause i know in my city if you're tamil or persian, you get hated on.. there is a reason for the violent stereotypes.. mainly that all the tamils i know are fuckin mental.. swarm on you in a pack an cut you up like string cheese... but aside from that, not all are like that, and you did make it very clear in this piece that you were not.. the YOU YOU YOU think, yea i think as a audio it would have alot of effect, really get the point across... 2nd verse i ain't agree wit the headlines, 'cause living in toronto honestly, it about 50/50 white crimes to other races.. and we are all treated the same by the media and police.. but the imagery in the verse i liked, had teh crazy mental image..
overall i liked it.. good topic, an' you pulled it off...
IJL BABY... haha... peace
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yo dat shit was deep son, long read but definitely worth it. u got a real talent
