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what fuck u talkin bout/battlin cease
wit that niggas wack flow/what u waitin on me
im returnin this cuz ur ass is bitch
callin black cease /but u hatin bitch
u an purple can get it/u think that's deaded
once u dropped that shit/ i will never forget it
cease
Rofl,
Dope as fuck.
Hmmmmmmmm...
R u serious?
If you are....
Elevate a LOT, take time over your pieces.
Drop something thats actually decent,
I think this is worse than something thats just off the top of the head, its like you had to think about it to make it that bad?
Anyways, um, Keep dropping?
caramac your an idiot, "Dope as fuck"......go back to the rock homie..... yo this verse was way to short, to simple, and lacked good wordplay and vocab, extend ur lines, and work on complexity, but ne ways keep droppin
It looks like you attempted internal rhyming, only one time it worked. Take more time and post something longer. Practice your freestyling in the cypher. It was only six lines, and you had to rhyme bitch with bitch.
WRD: IT WAS MO' SIMPLE THEN 1ST GRADE MATH.
NEEDS ALOTTA IMPROVEMENT,
WRK ON IT: A BIT;
n ILL TRY n BE LENIENT NXT X'IME, W/ MY FB: ---------> ~WUNN~
:shoot:KALIKOZE9/11:shoot: gimmie a holla: feedback plz
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You need ta elevate yo lyrics a whole lot more.......
This would be aight for a beginner,but for a real rapper
this shit is bubblegum.....Keep practicein',practice makes
perfect......
You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
wtf was that ceasar
this is open mic not diss the bitch above u cypher
have a point to what ur writing
IMprove on ur word play and everything else
you need to make it longer like 16 bars thats 32 lines an put more thought into what ur sayin. then it might be a little better.
Hows about you get a fucking clue before you start flapping your gums in my direction, slappy?Quote:
Originally Posted by Gotti
lmfao at you fools taking baron seriosuly....but word
this was some of the illest shity ive seen yo...omhof for real maybe even legends.
^ Glad other members of the board know ill shit when they reading it .. ;^)
Archive this. Now.
word to your fruit bowl
I nominated it for thing of the month.
good looks...i may nominate for legends?