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Home Truths
Title: Home Truths
[Chorus - Sing]
From the heart, a childs life torn apart
This is the story of a painful youth
People throwin darts, why do they start
This is nothin but home truths
[Verse 1]
I try to keep my composure despite rumours and exposure
The grapevine around me adds to the weight on my shoulders
I'm only 17 but gotta act older and at times it's hard to handle
I wasnt ever shown one, so how can I set a good example?
I've been trampled on and kicked down through the years
And it appears my peers like to see me close to or in tears
My biggest fear is that my brothers sometime feel how I do
I'd die for 'em so they dont live with what I've lived through
And I aint gon' renew no-more grudges, they not in my plans
Ya'll gotta understand I aint a coward I'm just the bigger man
I dont wanna put my hands on anyone, turnin over a new leaf
My beefs will be brief coz I'll just sit back and I'll grit my teeth
I just can't believe everybody always gotta run their mouth
Talkin bout me and talkin bout shit they know nothin about
[Chorus - Sing]
From the heart, a childs life torn apart
This is the story of a painful youth
People throwin darts, why do they start
This is nothin but home truths
[Verse 2]
In 2002 my uncle died, my whole perception on life changed
Between me and my friends hurtful words were exchanged
So I had to re-arrange my thoughts, I admit that I was wrong
That shit went on too long, but we back where we belong
And as a unit we're strong, cant nothin ever bring us down
All my life ya'll been around, and we growin up together now
I vow to be here for you all, how could I allow myself to go
I want ya'll to know I wont leave, no-matter what life throws
Although we've had our highs and lows we got through it
And if there's anythin I can do for ya'll, believe me I'll do it
So I commit my future to bein with my friends, by their sides
Coz they've been by mine everytime I smiled happily or cried
So I think of ya'll with pride, it's just the way that I should
Coz I'm glad ya'll have been with me through my childhood
[Chorus - Sing]
From the heart, a childs life torn apart
This is the story of a painful youth
People throwin darts, why do they start
This is nothin but home truths
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Mos def a nice ass drop...vocab was on point...Imagery was decent...and i liked the flow alot....Overall for a comeback drop..u getta
8/10
Good job
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This is very honest, I liked it. It was tight, and very structurally sound. Kinda reminded me of Kanye West...in a good way.
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im used to seeing good stuff from u LM we go bk along way!
this piece was beautiful...and 2 b honest youve been tru 2 your word!
8/10
keep up the gd work babe!
Luv ya :)
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It was a good piece, except I have to say for the first verse, it looked like you took a lot from the Eminem song "LIke Toy Soldiers" I don't know if this was intentional or not, but I think if you listen to the song you'll find a lot of similarities. If you've never heard it before, I'd say 8/10 If you have, then it's a 5/10
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real coo piece....word choice could be strengthened..and the flow was coo...this was pretty good actually..feeling the chorus..make an audio...i like..polish it up a bit more though..
-nique
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Thanks for feedback so far
And yeah I've heard 'Like Toy Soldiers' but I didnt wanna take anythin from that. I just wanted to write about me and my feelins and shit, thats how it came out. But feedback is appreciated.
Uppin
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REAL nice piece man...seriously. I could really relate to the story you were telling. Vocab and imagery proved that this was a heartfelt topic for u and it showed in your work. Definatly a worth while read. Few flaws if any.Will be checkin out some of ur other post.
Plaease Return the Favor. Check the Sig.
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pretty cool man..liked the story...deeply written..enjoyed it
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A nice piece... Good story... The vocab and imagery really exposed the skill in this piece. Nice structure, was easy to look at and read. Showed good emotion. Very few problems here and if there were any they were small.
I enjoyed this - nice piece.
I'll drop a link later...
Peace
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Nice peice.
I liked the chorus and your imagery, it was dope
keep it up
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I'm only 17 but gotta act older and at times it's hard to handle
I wasnt ever shown one, so how can I set a good example?
^^^says it all
real nice piece here, i usually dont like verses that have a simple rhyme scheme but you used it very affectively i thought, the verses were very fluent.. very good at keeping the reader interested, stayed on topic like a pro, u got alot of potential kid, stay up and keep at this shit, peep mines
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172961
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yo i am deffinitly fellin this drop i like the hook give the song deep ass feelin (in my opinion)
i would give this bitch a 6/10
but .......
with that hook it is deff a 9/10
keepin comin
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Thanks for feedback
Uppin
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structure was flawless! the flow was easy to catch like good quarterbacks
