Nuclear Backlash

Chorus:
its only been used twice for war
but the effects are much more
technological break through
mistake to outdo
another country with this much force

a nuclear key that opened up the doors
to a whole new era, with this error
a bold new terror was introduced
when the bomb was first used
then of course it was used again
the US praying without saying amen
just hoping that it would end the fight
with a mushroom cloud and a bright light
killing the crowd is made alright
how could you support the use of this weapon
so many civilians died, you didn't learn the lesson
how populations are lessened that quick
all because of a country's politics
how can you say that you're pro-life
when you'll nuke, like life has no price

Chorus

from a moral standpoint it set us back many years
all because of the fears, that reappears
fighting a war humanely, seems to still be a frontier
people won't change, there's not a chance
but it seems strange, that with this advance
in science, we use it with defiance
countries align with us because of our power
that could once easily devour another place
winning the arms race, setting the pace
but that will not last for very long
we should start our global domination swan song
with china and india we will have to share
our dominance that might turn to despair
the balance of power is about to shift
into asian hands will it soon drift
while we try and fight the war on terror
we are losing are international power
both through means of military and economy
we will be surpassed by what seems to be
around 2020, our problems will be plenty

Chorus

This situation deserves to be related to Hiroshima
our only hero seemstobea man known as W
who just tries to accrue, more wealth
while endangering others health
and being quick to bomb saddam
I can't blame bush for world war two
but its the same as how he overthrew
iraq and made it like america version two
not everyone can accept democracy
forgetting their heritage, a cultural amputee
assimilation destroying their diversity
like an all male university, standards are made
which gets me afraid, that we have betrayed
what allowed our country to be great
to be proud of each and every state
as we await for the next nagasaki
with nuclear power the president has the key
to unlock the havoc another time
and commit the ultimate crime
reducing cities to ashes with atomic gashes

Chorus

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172232

I enjoyed reading this piece even though im feelin a lil fryed right now so it was a little harder for me to get the flow going. I thought your topic was interesting i dont see alot of people rappin about politics or global issues like that so thats good it brought some uniqueness to it. I thought there was some truth in it however there might be some people that disagree. Thats my 2 cents so holla.... btw if anyone reads this you can post how to put a link in? cuz i dont want my stuff to be deleted because i dont know how to include links..

thanks for the feedback, don't ask questions like that in other peoples OM's, look in the help section
How Do I Place A Link In My Sig?

the code for making a link is:

[url*]www.rapbattles.com/forum[/url*]

remove the stars and that would make www.rapbattles.com/forum

Nice Drop man. Interesting. Wouldn't have minded seeing a little more complexed vocabulary but you were workin with really good subject matter. Appreciated what you were saying and I think you got your point across.

U get a chance check out Triple Homicide or Dear Social Service Worker . The links in my sig. uppin your next drop.l

Very politically driven piece of art, u seem 2 bring alot of good point of views out on the open.
It looks like u know your history an essential attribute into being an effective political voice in this world.
My suggestion is that u sup up your vocab 2 carry a more knowegeable state of mind.
Trust me people will listen if u could get this message tha way u did on this piece, but if u do it equipped wit a more expansive vocab in your arsenal.
good ups keep doing what u doing more power 2 ya peace!

Hmm not that bad man, pretty simple flowz, but tha actuall text was pretty nice n complex, but the whole concept/topic is played i think, well not played but used and i hear things about it 2 much, but this was an ok drop a felt, a few linez there were quite hot. my advice to u man is keep on spitting, elevating is the key
lol good shite

Good job. Try and use more multies, and watch your sylable count, it makes it flow better and creates more imagery by using a rhyme pattern, I find anyway. Be a little more indepth, reasoning. This was a good topic to reach out an touch on but I think you touched it vaguely. Even though it was a great read. It could be touched up. Well done.

yo dat was iight da subject is pretty good but ey can nybody tell me how u can battle som1 nd check out da shit i posted

lol at my thread being the help desk

How do I start a battle?

Go to Front Lines, then bitch slapped and find some one who wants to battle either by making a call out in your own thread or respond to one.

This was a decent piece, you had some ok vocabulary, and basic theme and concept. The thing I liked about this, was that it was an actual piece of work and not some freestlye a lot of kids always throw out.

Props, stay up and leave feedback.

uppin

iz pretty coo spitz

i like the way it looks and the subject is aaite

vocab is kinda simplified but used weel wordwise

good written skills displyed

style is pretty smooth and easy to read

keep elevating the script ma nizzle

go holl@ ma link if u could

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=173053

uppin

Yo This Is Tight. You Have A Good Flow And Its A Different Type Of Song Topic. The Only Nagetive Thing I Have To Say Is The Chorus Is Too Short.

Quote:

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Originally Posted by CrazyCarl

Chorus:
its only been used twice for war
but the effects are much more
technological break through
mistake to outdo
another country with this much force

a nuclear key that opened up the doors
to a whole new era, with this error
a bold new terror was introduced
when the bomb was first used
then of course it was used again
the US praying without saying amen
just hoping that it would end the fight
with a mushroom cloud and a bright light
killing the crowd is made alright
how could you support the use of this weapon
so many civilians died, you didn't learn the lesson
how populations are lessened that quick
all because of a country's politics
how can you say that you're pro-life
when you'll nuke, like life has no price

Chorus

from a moral standpoint it set us back many years
all because of the fears, that reappears
fighting a war humanely, seems to still be a frontier
people won't change, there's not a chance
but it seems strange, that with this advance
in science, we use it with defiance
countries align with us because of our power
that could once easily devour another place
winning the arms race, setting the pace
but that will not last for very long
we should start our global domination swan song
with china and india we will have to share
our dominance that might turn to despair
the balance of power is about to shift
into asian hands will it soon drift
while we try and fight the war on terror
we are losing are international power
both through means of military and economy
we will be surpassed by what seems to be
around 2020, our problems will be plenty

Chorus

This situation deserves to be related to Hiroshima
our only hero seemstobea man known as W
who just tries to accrue, more wealth
while endangering others health
and being quick to bomb saddam
I can't blame bush for world war two
but its the same as how he overthrew
iraq and made it like america version two
not everyone can accept democracy
forgetting their heritage, a cultural amputee
assimilation destroying their diversity
like an all male university, standards are made
which gets me afraid, that we have betrayed
what allowed our country to be great
to be proud of each and every state
as we await for the next nagasaki
with nuclear power the president has the key
to unlock the havoc another time
and commit the ultimate crime
reducing cities to ashes with atomic gashes

Chorus

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Wat up dawgy lets battle

the vocab was a little elementary but it fit into the song, just basic and to the point. i liked the use and placement of the chorus and the wording of the second stanza, keep droppin it like it's hot :thumbup:

Its a aight drop.. u can flow.....or keystyle i should say... not much more i can add in that they havnt already said but keep ya head up ya doin sumthin right.... peace playa

a few lines didn't rhyme too well on this. i liked the concept but i think you could've used more sophisticated language and better imagery to describe what you were getting at. i think a piece about someone being hit by an atomic bomb would be a dope concept.

keep on posting.

yo carl i was feelin this one, it took a while to read and my eyes feel pretty dry right now but that might have been the blunt I just smoked. anyways it was a tight drop
an thanx for the feedback on mine. Peace

uppin

it definitely brought a different vision towards politics, gov.mnt, that issue, even tho its not universally topic based in all forms of rap, its still a good stand point view...

nice word play, in certain areas, you like came n went, wit it....tho'!
some lines were stretched, some were 2 short...
even up them lines, n all will fall in place.......

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