SinAmen vs. White Dogg (Topical)

Figured I try this shit out...

Rules:

No more than 20 lines
Due in two hours after check
Topic: Shadows
Good Luck.

check..................................imma spit in like 20 mins!!!!!!

whats up with the non-pollage? learn how to set up

^ Oh. Idiot.

There I was, walkin in the alley, dark figures approach me in the night,
This scares me half to death, Like a darkness is comin out of the light,
The moon shines down on me, but it doesn't help me see this force,
A force that follows me at all times, In the light it gains its energy source,
Like an eternal stalker it follows for some wierd reason, Barely ever seen,
These creatures are demons or angels or a somehow unknown being,
These beings are called shadows, they're there all of the time, except at noon,
Look at us two, me and my shadow, we have a special "bind", from July to June,
Like an everlating darkness that never changes color, even when it's in the light,
My head is spinning and I'm afraid when the darkness folds into the night!!!!!

can we change it to 10 lines!!!!! 20 is hard for me my skillz aren't too good yet!!!!!!!!

Shadows.

Shadows are the windows inside people: created by an emotion
For light is the key to opening them, the bright energy explosions.
When this light shines through your window, darkness is staged;
Stands behind your every movement, the feeling known as rage.
This state casts evil, the second form of anger... It has eyes too
For if you watch them too close, the light behind will forsake you.
Watch your back, if you wish to touch please remember its death's
And if you do, please gather your strength and collect a last breath.
The shadows are your windows, the opposite of a man's bright soul
When there is beauty and light above, there is always darkness below.
There are two tunnels to choose, Good and Evil are the only paths
For God casted his light, and shadows behind it became the clash.

How was that for my first topical?

I hope I dont suck too much x_x

sin i think u got it again man shit ur good at everything but how was mine!!!!!!!!!!!

damn hot battle.... white u really impressed me wit ur verse homie but Sin got this... his imagery and the way the shit stuck in my head really got him the vote... he jus seems more experienced wen it comes to shit like this.. jus overall sinamens shit seemed much stronger.... good drop by both dope battle kids


vote - sin

can yall vote on Sylentz VS Skrollz thnx

this wasnt bad.. white u had a solid verse, stayd on topic.. smooth flow.. sinamen.. for your first time, very nice.. flow could have been smoother in places, smoother the flow the smoother the story u feel me, u want it to roll off the tongue.. while u had a slightly better use of vocab u were both equally on topic, i just feel white's wording better and that he was a little more consistant, vote-white dogg

hit this up honestly plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=171754

center sight y did u feed then not vote!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sin got this. He showed great imagery. White your verse was nice but his was better.
Sin i liked your structure too. White you could of worked on that and your rhyme scheme, it was too predictable

V/sin

doggs this battle hit home on both of your verses but um.....im so undecided cuz vocab was better by sin but stories were both good and white had good approach so undecided...sry!!!!

^ haha noob kid!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

well neither of you came very deep to me.........maybe it was the topic........shadows are hard to go off of.................well white doggs verse seemed to basic to me......to predictable.........sinamen this was good for your first topical...........you had pretty good imagery and description...........overall this wasnt too bad..........

Vote Sinamen

i dod vote bro... watchu talkin about..........

this battle was fucken hot.....congrats to both for droppin hot

but this has to go to Sin man...
for your first topical man you dropepd real hot
great imagery an your structure rocked man

Thanks for the votes yall.

Uppin this shit.... #2.

white dogg wins

it's poppin 2 morrow cinnamon

v/white dog

very undeep., both verses sucked but im going to give it to white dogg cuz that shadows as windows was corny as hell

sin-nothin too special some complexity,wordplay was good,flow good,structure good
7/10

white-complexity was very simple,wordplay ok,flo was decent,structure ws a lil off at points
4/10

v-sin
vote in my batte wit Jay Rell and Victoria vs Me lmao

my vote on this one goes to sin, yall both stayed on topic pretty good so that i cant give to someone but sin came with it when he was usin his word play and his rhymes and his structure was a lot better then urs dogg sorry but good battle both of u

v/ sin