First Post Of 05..Feedback Plz...

ayyo ive been gone but now im back in the game
ready to spit, rip n put these fony niggas to shame
wit more metaphors n punchlines to joggle ya brain
n since ive been gone aint a damn thang changed
still the same muthafuckas thinkin they raw
still the same,mayne ya flows got plenty of flaws
its the same thing everytime u open ya jaws
u wanna talk about shit but u dont know of cause
im like dwayne wade ..i got plenty of heat
im my own man so i stand on my own two feet
growin up in tuff times, i would repeat defeat
i had so much beef that my face discreted meat
i hustled too man i got the scars to prove
got stabbed in the back for a sack of blue
rushed to the hospital,but nothing they'd do
cuz when u from the street they dont care about u
i dont know n e of yall so i really cant be judging
but i hate the fact that u think u thuggin
cuz if u was u wouldnt spend ya whole day on this site
waitin for something to pop in ya head that u think is tight
jus dont try to emphasize this whole stuggle
cuz i hate to be the first one to burst ya bubble
its the double the trouble, triple the violence
once u become a menace to society...ya put to silence!


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uppin....lets get some feedback

g-money what up dog...nice work here a lot of emotion and a lot of good things were brought to my attention. the rhymes seemed a bit simplistic, but had they not been that way the emotion would not have come out the way it did. i am glad to see you are still writing and tha return says you have some songs for me to turn into mp3 for you guys.......my aim is dustinjohnbailey get on and lets get this stuff worked out man...but nice drop.

fa sho i appreciate the love..... yeah i'll get at that

Yeah I like this fam keep it gangsta but speak the truth..........

Say cuz u fa show , i'm dat boy they can't deny, Port City's son

SOUTHSIDE stand up!!!!! -young peep dis
I don't like 2 work a lot but I know how 2 work tha block/
fuck wit bytches dat twurk a lot after they slurped a lot/
tha weed I smoke sticky like I got syrup on tha pot/
me fuckin wit cops is obserbe like findin a slurpy dats hot/
prepared 4 beef at anytime i'mma circle tha block/
wit a 4-5 or a glock 9 its purpose 2 pop/
cause its a lotta niggas out there dats lurkin 2 plot/
and everybody on dis site know dat i'm tha shyt like squat!!!


quick 8 peep it see dat its strait -holla

dont freepost in my shit ...... u could of at least left some feedback

yeah this was a good piece. this had good emotion and good vocab. it had good structure. i was really feeling this piece and i liked it alot. keep it up....peace

feelin dis shyt good struk keep droppin fam

peace

yea yo, i liked it ... lmao @ wouldn't spend ya time all the time on this site, or whatever the line was.. str8 goods... flow was almost perfect from what i seen man... it hard ta catch a flow readin shit tho.. so whatever... peace tho... i'm out..

man i liked this good shit man....your first post of 05? make it one of many yo keep droppin this shit this was awesome

and yo return tha fava hit up one of my links in my sig

NM

thanks for the feedback i appreicate it....

yer yo!! good drop!! was feelin it.....good vocab.....good emotions....but the rhymes were a bit symplistic.....other than that it was a good piece...keep it up...peace

thanks for the feedback ....i like the love im gettin ...keep it comin

I liked everything about it got no advice fo ya keep it up

uppin........

this was decent the vocab and structure was good ok punches but you need to work on the flow. You had a couple of nice lines but nothing major.

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