you happy peche' hota babosa?
go and drop you stank ass biatch :spit: :spit:
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you happy peche' hota babosa?
go and drop you stank ass biatch :spit: :spit:
Maybe Later.
Check.
no maybe's go ahead and drop and come correct or dont come at all.
are you going to copy and paste your other verse from the other thread into this one.
...Eclipse.../ im a treat you like my pit and feed you gun powder so you can eat these clips/you's a Heroin junkie so you need these bars-a-fix/ im a have you switch ya style like a muslim who made wuhdu/ to practicin voodoo/to a born being born again so who knew/ i'm like that potient princess purple/ 1 hit of me will have ya talkin like steve erkyle/ my flows is like a merry-go-round got ya mind in circles/ not wit j-prince but i rap-alot/ hit the fence on the task cause i stash a box/ your crashed on the market just worthless stock/ im diggable on this planet, i'm cool like that/ Ron Artest of the rap game a fool like that/ lyrical splinter cell in stelth i move like that/ do this on my lonesome dont need a crew to prove my raps/ i see ya life means nothin cause you came to me for lyrical scrafice/ like a run away slave i aint actin right/ im not polite rick flare rude boy and lik J.J. im Dyn-O-Mite/ ...eclipse...please, I am the light/ Alpha Omega/ stop waitn on Christ I'm the new sayvor/
there's your answer. i come a new every time i drop cause i dont write i freesty;e all my shit. so drop 30 minuets was your request.
Sigh...
Kid, Your just coming apart, You need to fix a loose screw
& I use many clocks, but I don't wanna waste my time on you..
Are you serious with that verse, killing newbs in my routine
You got no clue, plus the shittiest structure i've ever seen..
You need major evelvaton kid, but you'll never be ready
& It's like New Years the way I throw up `Fetti..
Its obvious you need work, but nobody will give you theirs
Find someone that'll help ya, better yet someone who cares..
Get a new hobby, cuz this aint cut out for your spread
Just leave, Cuz Dumb fuck tried to Bold the title of the Thread..
Easy...Votes.
Sean fetti...........
...Eclipse.../ im a treat you like my pit and feed you gun powder so you can eat these clips/you's a Heroin junkie so you need these bars-a-fix/ im a have you switch ya style like a muslim who made wuhdu/ to practicin voodoo/to a born being born again so who knew/ i'm like that potient princess purple/ 1 hit of me will have ya talkin like steve erkyle/ my flows is like a merry-go-round got ya mind in circles/ not wit j-prince but i rap-alot/ hit the fence on the task cause i stash a box/ your crashed on the market just worthless stock/ im diggable on this planet, i'm cool like that/ Ron Artest of the rap game a fool like that/ lyrical splinter cell in stelth i move like that/ do this on my lonesome dont need a crew to prove my raps/ i see ya life means nothin cause you came to me for lyrical scrafice/ like a run away slave i aint actin right/ im not polite rick flare rude boy and lik J.J. im Dyn-O-Mite/ ...eclipse...please, I am the light/ Alpha Omega/ stop waitn on Christ I'm the new sayvor/
Not hot at all....I think this verse was a lil' played...like you wrote it a long time ago and fake updated it....Think...I know you can come harder...
Eclipse....
Kid, Your just coming apart, You need to fix a loose screw
& I use many clocks, but I don't wanna waste my time on you..
Are you serious with that verse, killing newbs in my routine
You got no clue, plus the shittiest structure i've ever seen..
You need major evelvaton kid, but you'll never be ready
& It's like New Years the way I throw up `Fetti..
Its obvious you need work, but nobody will give you theirs
Find someone that'll help ya, better yet someone who cares..
Get a new hobby, cuz this aint cut out for your spread
Just leave, Cuz Dumb fuck tried to Bold the title of the Thread..
...Well..I think this was tha better verse ALTHOUGH not by much...
but I do think the structure was better and it had harder lines...
My vote Eclipse....
return luv when you can.....
Up1.
too bad he cant vote and you wouldnt know structure if yoiu was locked down 23 and 1. 0-0
throw up fetti/ some one who cares were good lines.. sean u had some kool rhymes but the disses and the punches were a bit lackin.. clipse seemed to be more targeted and to the point with his disses.. a little more personal w/ a steady flow to compliment it, he was also more consistant, v/ eclipse
please take time to return an honest vote on this
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=165639
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Thanks for votes..
Sean- Your Flow Was Off. Try Reading It Before ya Post. You Had Some Lines That Had 2 Syllables And SOme With 15. Your Punches Were Ok As Was Your Rhyming Scheme. You Needa Elevate. Work On Syllable Count
Eclipse - Nice Punches And Personals. It Flowed Nicely And Was Readable. Kept Me Interested ALl The Way Through. Rhyme Scheme Can Be Improved But Ya Did What Was Needed.
V/ Eclipse
.....Damn weak ass battle. Both came wack but whatever you don't need anything to vs. wack.
heres how it went down:
Sean Fetti - ...Feather-Weight punches, horrible structure, bad flow, ....Try using a new style... For real...
Eclipse - Had good structure, meh punches.
v/ - Eclipse 'cause thats all he needed to win...
.../ im a treat you like my pit and feed you gun powder so you can eat these clips/you's a Heroin junkie so you need these bars-a-fix/ im a have you switch ya style like a muslim who made wuhdu/ to practicin voodoo/to a born being born again so who knew/ i'm like that potient princess purple/ 1 hit of me will have ya talkin like steve erkyle/ my flows is like a merry-go-round got ya mind in circles/ not wit j-prince but i rap-alot/ hit the fence on the task cause i stash a box/ your crashed on the market just worthless stock/ im diggable on this planet, i'm cool like that/ Ron Artest of the rap game a fool like that/ lyrical splinter cell in stelth i move like that/ do this on my lonesome dont need a crew to prove my raps/ i see ya life means nothin cause you came to me for lyrical scrafice/ like a run away slave i aint actin right/ im not polite rick flare rude boy and lik J.J. im Dyn-O-Mite/ ...eclipse...please, I am the light/ Alpha Omega/ stop waitn on Christ I'm the new sayvor/
you have to have structure in your verse....
"like a run away slave i aint actin right" that line was ridicoulous
Kid, Your just coming apart, You need to fix a loose screw
& I use many clocks, but I don't wanna waste my time on you..
meh u didnt try
Are you serious with that verse, killing newbs in my routine
You got no clue, plus the shittiest structure i've ever seen..
k
You need major evelvaton kid, but you'll never be ready
& It's like New Years the way I throw up `Fetti..
ha
Its obvious you need work, but nobody will give you theirs
Find someone that'll help ya, better yet someone who cares..
k
Get a new hobby, cuz this aint cut out for your spread
Just leave, Cuz Dumb fuck tried to Bold the title of the Thread..
k
eclpse obviously takes this....structure and punches,,,i liked th hrwoing in the air bit ha
V/ EClipse
hit my battles
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this vote goes to eclipse without a doubt...i really wasnt feelin fetti's verse at all...where as eclipses was really nice and witty....loved the throw up fetti line...nice wordplay and also stronger personals...feeti came alright but didnt flow as well as eclipse or have better punches....nice effort tho fetti came ok but man, you seriously need to work on that structure...was really shitty and unessesary.....eclipse has this one..
vote eclipse
could yal please return the favour just need votes on this battle..my oponent clearly aint gonna up it and ive used all 5 of mine...peace
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=164981
Nothing
vs.
Are you serious with that verse, killing newbs in my routine
You got no clue, plus the shittiest structure i've ever seen..
Get a new hobby, cuz this aint cut out for your spread
Just leave, Cuz Dumb fuck tried to Bold the title of the Thread..
Vote Eclipse, for more quotables, harder punches, personals, structure,flow, and the fact that he actually directed his verse at his opponet. Fetti, most of ur verse was pointless self glorification, which is no good in a BATTLE. You gotta throw punches and come at ur opponet, ur structure was also pretty horrid, look at eclipse's verse compared to urs.....which is easier to read, ok then, work on that, clipse u obviously half assed this but the to bars i quoted were the best in the battle and the first made me laugh, so u win.1