OK Here we go this is due by tomorrow with a ten line spit
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OK Here we go this is due by tomorrow with a ten line spit
ok lets do this then.........Quote:
Originally Posted by JollyRoger
actually 10-13 as as stated in the initial challenge.Quote:
Originally Posted by JollyRoger
HEre we go.......
You call yourself the realest but the realest of what?
Realest of emcees who can only win by the luck
of the deal or the die cuz he's gotta get paired up right
to an emcee who can't even put up a fight
I saw how crowd pleaser splattered ya last
You were destroyed so fast it was like shattering glass
After the second bar I laughed cuz I knew who had won
With no flow and no structure I guffawed when the slaughter was done
Please don't enter more bars that have no heart and are thoughtless
Keep cool and don't move like a boiling crawfish
You said you'd improve and I guess its a promise
Because I want a real battle so keep yourself honest
i did say i would improve.....an that was a promise
now im gonna bring it to u harder than a boss pissed off at the office
this time its gonna b 4 real an im gonna spit the fire
rite afta this u will be wishin u were retired
i did get destroyed in the last battle fast
but this this time i brought the heat....so im gonna last an whip ya ass
u call ya self new an unused....well u no wat....ya gonna b used
afta im done beaten the fuc out of u
i am a real mc.......i neva win by luck
even my shittiest spits would cut u up
ur to embarrased to show ya battle records cuz ya left column equals none
but u no wat ill do 4 ya....in the right column ill put a 1
:shoot: :thefinger
uppin 4 votes people...............................
Jolly - Very basic vocab and punches, but you left a little damage with him. The opener was aight and the mentioning of his last battle was aight. Work on coming more original though. Also, don't continue your bars like this is a freestyle. Start fresh every line with a new concept or if you are going to continue the last concept, don't keep it going like there was no end of sentence.
Realest - Basically, you defended yourself for most of the battle. You never want to be on the defensive in a battle, you should be dissing him instead. Also, he dropped some punches. You just made statements like you were going to beat him, the only real diss was your closer. Write more shit like your closer
Vote - JollyRoger for better punches
Plz hit my sig, thx
Ugh, not a BAD battle, but have seen A LOT better. No offence to both emcee's but you guys need to elevate. I liked Real's closer, it was aiight for a punch, but could have been reworded better. Jolly had some alright punches, and he gets my vote, simply because the other guy doesnt really even know what a punch is! So I give this one to:
JollyRoger!
Hit up my battles!!!
Upping for votes. Pleese vote cuz i've done battles but people don't vote
uppin 4 votes.........c'mon vote ppl..............
both verses came good, and some of real's lines were stretched.....but jolly had good punches, i like real's verse better cuz it really stood out to me...so vote goes to realest one, pz
jolly roger-
not a very good opener
You call yourself the realest but the realest of what?
Realest of emcees who can only win by the luck
you played yourself in this line
of the deal or the die cuz he's gotta get paired up right
to an emcee who can't even put up a fight
ok closer
You said you'd improve and I guess its a promise
Because I want a real battle so keep yourself honest
realest one-
ok opener, 2nd line was a bit stretched/off flow
i did say i would improve.....an that was a promise
now im gonna bring it to u harder than a boss pissed off at the office
a real mc wouldnt spit shitty
played yourself too
i am a real mc.......i neva win by luck
even my shittiest spits would cut u up
ok closer, bit played
ur to embarrased to show ya battle records cuz ya left column equals none
but u no wat ill do 4 ya....in the right column ill put a 1
vote-realestone, need to put more in it, keep elavatin
uppin.............................................
JollyRoger
You call yourself the realest but the realest of what?
Realest of emcees who can only win by the luck
Hmm...No
of the deal or the die cuz he's gotta get paired up right
to an emcee who can't even put up a fight
Very basic
I saw how crowd pleaser splattered ya last
You were destroyed so fast it was like shattering glass
Nice second line
After the second bar I laughed cuz I knew who had won
With no flow and no structure I guffawed when the slaughter was done
flow was a bit off, on that,
Please don't enter more bars that have no heart and are thoughtless
Keep cool and don't move like a boiling crawfish
crap line
You said you'd improve and I guess its a promise
Because I want a real battle so keep yourself honest
bad finisher
v bad verse tbh i didn't like it not enuff punches and focusing on one thing too much
TheRealestone
i did say i would improve.....an that was a promise
now im gonna bring it to u harder than a boss pissed off at the office
Bad start...need a better punch
this time its gonna b 4 real an im gonna spit the fire
rite afta this u will be wishin u were retired
lol better
i did get destroyed in the last battle fast
but this this time i brought the heat....so im gonna last an whip ya ass
Bought urself down in the first line...but nice multi
u call ya self new an unused....well u no wat....ya gonna b used
afta im done beaten the fuc out of u
that REALLY sucked
i am a real mc.......i neva win by luck
even my shittiest spits would cut u up
Lol nice line!
ur to embarrased to show ya battle records cuz ya left column equals none
but u no wat ill do 4 ya....in the right column ill put a 1
Nice finish
Tbh not a really good verse but better then jolly
v/realestone
Hit up one of the links in my siggie (or hit up both)
PLZZZ vote HONEST :P:P
you both are at the same skill level...
you both came with some played lines, like...
^^^ played....Quote:
of the deal or the die cuz he's gotta get paired up right,
to an emcee who can't even put up a fight
^^^played...Quote:
this time its gonna b 4 real an im gonna spit the fire
rite afta this u will be wishin u were retired
both had personals, and ok punches, i think realest one came harder...
V-realest one
hit a battle in my sig with an explained vote honestly...
uppin 4 votes............1 more vote to close this......
JollyRoger
You call yourself the realest but the realest of what?
Realest of emcees who can only win by the luck
mm weak opener
of the deal or the die cuz he's gotta get paired up right
to an emcee who can't even put up a fight
mm ok slap i guess
I saw how crowd pleaser splattered ya last
You were destroyed so fast it was like shattering glass
sly personal like the flow
After the second bar I laughed cuz I knew who had won
With no flow and no structure I guffawed when the slaughter was done
seems a bit stretched on 2nd line
Please don't enter more bars that have no heart and are thoughtless
Keep cool and don't move like a boiling crawfish
mm nope not feelin this one
You said you'd improve and I guess its a promise
Because I want a real battle so keep yourself honest
ok closer but no ko
ThE ReAlEsT OnE
i did say i would improve.....an that was a promise
now im gonna bring it to u harder than a boss pissed off at the office
seems a bit stretched but ok opener
this time its gonna b 4 real an im gonna spit the fire
rite afta this u will be wishin u were retired
ok yeah like this
i did get destroyed in the last battle fast
but this this time i brought the heat....so im gonna last an whip ya ass
like the flow but not too sure about structure
u call ya self new an unused....well u no wat....ya gonna b used
afta im done beaten the fuc out of u
sly slap but no hard punch used maybe over used
i am a real mc.......i neva win by luck
even my shittiest spits would cut u up
ok jab i guess
ur to embarrased to show ya battle records cuz ya left column equals none
but u no wat ill do 4 ya....in the right column ill put a 1
like you closer good and strong
so there you go a few of my thoughts on your battle...JollyRoger think you came in this one a bit too cocky cos he came in here an beat ya fair and square, just guess you need to elevate your vocab but your rhyme was still ok...ThE ReAlEsT OnE liked your closer on this slyly personal and strong you done well...keep on elevatin'
vote : ThE ReAlEsT OnE