aight hommie same rules n shit as bitch slapped, 10 lines..
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aight hommie same rules n shit as bitch slapped, 10 lines..
iight then dawg im checkin on.....................
as am i
ReCorD GooD SiNcE WhEn?,..'I-SeRiOuSlY-DoUbT-ThAtS-TrUe'//
DaMn ThE BoArD WoUlD 'LiTTeRlY-Be-A-BeTTeR-PlAcE-WiTOuT-YoU//
NoW DaT I ThInK AbOuT It YoU DoNt EvEn 'DeSeRvE-To-Be-HeRe'//
ChAnGiN Ur NaMe To VoTe To UrSeLf 'YoU-PooR-ExCuSe-FoR-A-QuEEr'//
ThEy CaLL Me daKoRe MaUfUcKa Cuzz 'I'll-LeAvE-Ya-FaMiLy-To-MoUrNe'//
AnD U SeCoNd GuEssIn Ya SkIll* AnD 'ReGrEtIn-To-EvEr-Be-BoRn'//
I'll HaVe U LaYiN UnCoNcIoUs On ThE 'FLooR-As-If-U-OvErDoSeD-On SlEEpIn-PiLLz'//
FrAnKlY Im TiReD Of PeePiN Ur 'PoSt-Cuzz-Its-AlWaYs-ThE-OppOsItE-Of-PeePiN-SkIllz'//
MeSSiN WiT Me Ur 'BiTTiN-Off-MoRe-ThEn-U-CaN-ChEw',..Cuzz I'll CrUsH 'U-AnD-Ya-ImAgInArY-CrEw'//
'AcTiN-LiKe-Ya-KnOw Me-BuT-U-AiNt-GoT-A-cLuE',..'FaCiN-WrEcK-LooK-WhAt-U-GoT-UrSeLf-InTo'//
theres ya 10 lines waitn for u 2 spit....
uppin for ur verse.............................
fuck dude why you right like this "yO sOn iM To FUKiN tO tAke OfF mY CAPs So I rIghT lIkE ThIS CuAes I CaNT fUKin ThINK"
to hard to read.
quit free postin i write how i wanna write....uppin for ur verse a half hour lata
i gave him mexican beans and bitch still couldnt erect
and i can tell u wack as fuk, and i aint even hear u rap yet
its like magic, i give u a chance, but u fuk up b4 gettin ur acts in prints
and if ur ass wrote the laws, ill be breakin all 10 commandments
he couldnt be "off da chain" cause hes shits too "rusty"
this "clown" got surgery to look good, but still looked like "crusty" (simpsons)
so now hes busting, so he puts CAPITALS in his verse to sound big
but its a "critical combination", ull stay wack n little, like ur "sig"
ur last battle didnt go well, a ko will never leave u forgeting
and cause u da "kore", thats the only "heat" ull be gettin
sorry man i been busy wit assessments
Record took this battle, simply because he had harder hitting punches....and actual personals. DaKore, all of your disses were abstract.. and fake punches are wack. You also had too much self-glorification along with empty threats. I'm goin' with Record for focusing on actually dissing you... nuff said.
Vote-Record for the reasons stated above.
Return the favor and hit up my battle against Assazin.....pz.
upping numba 1.
yeah i would have to agree wit gen on this one. i think record took dark in all catogories. he had better punches. his structure was much better and legible (i should never have to say that when you type). Record had some above average personals and more creative wordplay. it was a much nicer read and he had some added wit. dark some of your lines didn't even really make any sense. it is hard to win a battle without making sense. read some of the battles in legends to get a better idea of how to battle on this site. anyways keep writting and stay up. this was not a dr or hate vote.
can you guys please return the favor on my battle. record you forgot to poll.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&page=2&pp=15
alright, record took this no doubt. he had harder punches and presonals. rec, you had some good flow, rhymes and structure too. daKore, your shit was aight, but didnt have the punches. you need to make it clearer....TyPiNg LiKe ThIs MaKeS ShIt UnClEar...aight?
v/record for better punches and flow
uppin for 1 more vote.. leave a link i got 100 posts
daKore: I understand you can write however you want to write, but if you want us to peep your battles, you need to give us a reason to! TXTin' like that ain't only immature, but annoying. Keep that in mind next time you want votes...now, for your verse - general punches to kick it off, nuthin' hittin' hard. You had good flow throughout, but the content was lacking. More ferosity, and some personals, would fix that.
Record: Same case, nuthin' special about your opener, and your flow was consistant. No personals, either, but I did notice you tried to attack his character, which is more than what I can say for daKore 'cause he ain't even engage you at all. Still got some work to do, but you steppin' in the right direction.
VOTE: Record
Check sig...return favour (will poll once I'm 100+ posts)
Dakore's verse:
ReCorD GooD SiNcE WhEn?,..'I-SeRiOuSlY-DoUbT-ThAtS-TrUe'//
DaMn ThE BoArD WoUlD 'LiTTeRlY-Be-A-BeTTeR-PlAcE-WiTOuT-YoU//
NoW DaT I ThInK AbOuT It YoU DoNt EvEn 'DeSeRvE-To-Be-HeRe'//
ChAnGiN Ur NaMe To VoTe To UrSeLf 'YoU-PooR-ExCuSe-FoR-A-QuEEr'//
ThEy CaLL Me daKoRe MaUfUcKa Cuzz 'I'll-LeAvE-Ya-FaMiLy-To-MoUrNe'//
AnD U SeCoNd GuEssIn Ya SkIll* AnD 'ReGrEtIn-To-EvEr-Be-BoRn'//
I'll HaVe U LaYiN UnCoNcIoUs On ThE 'FLooR-As-If-U-OvErDoSeD-On SlEEpIn-PiLLz'//
FrAnKlY Im TiReD Of PeePiN Ur 'PoSt-Cuzz-Its-AlWaYs-ThE-OppOsItE-Of-PeePiN-SkIllz'//
MeSSiN WiT Me Ur 'BiTTiN-Off-MoRe-ThEn-U-CaN-ChEw',..Cuzz I'll CrUsH 'U-AnD-Ya-ImAgInArY-CrEw'//
'AcTiN-LiKe-Ya-KnOw Me-BuT-U-AiNt-GoT-A-cLuE',..'FaCiN-WrEcK-LooK-WhAt-U-GoT-UrSeLf-InTo'//
Result: WACK!! Man change that structure, matter of fact your whole style man. There no punches or personals, and if there was then it was probably to wack to see them
Record's verse:
gave him mexican beans and bitch still couldnt erect
and i can tell u wack as fuk, and i aint even hear u rap yet
its like magic, i give u a chance, but u fuk up b4 gettin ur acts in prints
and if ur ass wrote the laws, ill be breakin all 10 commandments
he couldnt be "off da chain" cause hes shits too "rusty"
this "clown" got surgery to look good, but still looked like "crusty" (simpsons)
so now hes busting, so he puts CAPITALS in his verse to sound big
but its a "critical combination", ull stay wack n little, like ur "sig"
ur last battle didnt go well, a ko will never leave u forgeting
and cause u da "kore", thats the only "heat" ull be gettin
Results: I liked his verse. Started off kinda sluggish but made up for it in the middle to the end. keep it up man
Vote: Record
Hit my battle up in my sig.
One
dakore your shit wasnt bad you had good vocab structure was swaying, and the punchs were weak...
record nice structure punches seemed to hit a little harder because they were personals, vocab on the other hand was pretty simple...
Vote: record
aight mods close this..
Record, I voted in this battle and you ain't returned the favor... can you check my sig and hit up my battle with Tic?..pz. Sorry for the freepost.
Yeah me to he took this battle hands down..... didnt realy like the other dudes verse better luk next timeQuote:
Originally Posted by Genocide`
V. Record
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Celestial
"Record took this battle, simply because he had harder hitting punches....and actual personals. DaKore, all of your disses were abstract.. and fake punches are wack. You also had too much self-glorification along with empty threats. I'm goin' with Record for focusing on actually dissing you... nuff said."-genocide
i agree fully he said it all vote/record