04 Bonnie and clyde

(Chorus)
Just the two of us We can make it if we try Just the two of us Just the two of us Building castles in the sky Just the two of us You and I.

Yo, Look at this still here laying with my chick
No longer are you just a bitch or somebody to warm up my dick
Ya took ya pick coulda had an easy life, stayed livin at home
Insted you by my side with the knife, traverlin the globe
No longer on my own i think i like this though
We havin fun duckin, jivin, divin and escapin the po
Who wuda known, fuck who wuda thought
This wouldnt effect ya or have you lookin a little distraught
All the things we bought, all the nights we shared
The thing i like bout is you dont give a fuck, girl you dont even care
The one thing you care about, the one person you love
Is this guy by ya side, we go together yeah like the hand and the glove
Shit we gotta get up damn its time to move on,
Get ya clothes on girl we gotta be gone.

(Chorus)

Fuck girl that shit was so fuckin close
Thank god we stole this car way back in the grove
Its pritty funny how weve always liked the same things
Like when we knocked out that rich girl and took all that bitches rings
How bout the day i finally got released
You took me home to the hood where we found that fuckin beast
That fucker who hurt you the one i tried to kill
Second time round, now hes buried over the mah'fuckin hill
Now we on the run but like i said you dont even care
Sat in the passenger seat makin goo goo eyes at me playin wit ya hair
Deep inside i got all these feelings but i dont wanna share
Late at night im kicking having those same old nightmares
But i wake up and you got me in your arms
I feel the warmth of ya heart all the way to my sweaty palms
Your always there the sun that melts away the snow
Bitches come and go, but ride or die will always be there thats fo'sho

(Chorus)

I knew you were special on the day our eyes met
You were takin the dog over the road to that dirty old vet
We got to talkin bout how you wanted to get out
The hood was draggin you down you just wanted to shout
Let ya anger out, yeah im likin that damn
sick minded freak who turned out to be ya man
20 years down the line ya gotta understand
we still gonna be together side by side, hand in hand
When ever theres a battle we handle it together
We told each other forever and forever is forever
Never apart cause thats the way we gonna ride
We fight the fight together and thats the way we gonna die
(chorus x2 fade)

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Ok this is a ryhme that come to mind while on the computer 2nite after i heard the old "just the two of us" on the tv, so its kinda keystyle but i would like feedback on this piece. Holla at ya boy
nova and out

yer das hot i was feelin that nova nice lyrics there lol at the bit bout tha vet

it was alright (like dat freeway...lol)....i mean u had some weird shit in there like the opener.....but nice structure and nice vocab.........it was strait, ok not bad

Can i get some more feedback??

it was alright, it had some good vocab and nice structure and i also liked the opener. keep posting

Thanks for the feedback, come on lets have some more, whether its good or bad.
Holla back

aight i liked the vocab and the structure of this piece...usually peeps in here dont post piece on love so that was nice to read something different...keep elevating...one

Nice feeling and sentiment here...

Good shit...stupid story...but good shit.

And I say stupid shit, cuz...

Anyone involved in crime, well...that's stupid.

Anyone involving their bitch in crime with them...even stupider.

But whatever, Biggie's "Me and my Bitch", Eminem's shit...

Has you kids thinking it's glorious to have a "hood ho"...or whatever.

You'll get over it.

I'm not going into too much detail here...

Just work on ya flow some, it stumbled in a few places towards the top...
Pay attention to ya syllable count.

Other than that...s'good shit for what it is.

Real good.

Peace

i liked it it had a nice flow annd structure was good as well as vocab... i'd like to see this rewrittin into more of a song instead of a keystyle...

Keep it coming, lovin the ffedback so far.
Holla

Nova its ya boy, loved the track playa, created real imagery like a movie n shit... flow was tight cant wait for ya next piece... keep reppin boy
PEACE

Thanks for the reviews people, keep it all coming, good or bad.
Holla back at ya boy.
Nova and out

Yo I'm feelin tha keystyle Exspically tha opener Keep posting

Yeah.......it was good, I liked it kinda like Pac's Bonnie and Clyde, the lyrics was straight, alright chorus......nice job............

man it was good i really like it it was hot as hell wasnt as good as jay-z's but it was good it really was.

9/10

umm.........sorry but i am not feeling this piece. it rushes through with a lot of emtion but no solid story line. you don't build up the events and the rhyming is very simplistic. i think you can do better then this. keep writting.

some parts was okay but then some parts was like eh the 1st and 3rd verses were your best and the 2nd one can be removed totally but this kinda came off as one of dem songs for the ladies and thats all good because that's who buyin records but the concept is coo so i say it was alright just clean it up and stick to the script cause u drifted a lil but keep writin

Yo Nova,
That Shit Was Crunk as fuck.
I like ya vocab.
I like ya Structure Too.

Holla Ya Boy,
PBK

yo i liked this thread, i agree with impersonal it was different, the structure was good, the vocab was good, the story was alright, but anyway keep on postin wanna see more posts from you.....return the favor


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9.8/10

The story and theme of it was alright, but for what it is it was tight. The thing is that this topic is old and has been used a lot. All in all I enjoyed the sentimentality of it, but you still kept that ruggid edge to it... sweet. Out of a ranking of 10, I'd give a 7 half. It also seems like you didn't spend much time on it because I feel you can do better... From here on out you'll get better and better. Deuce up... >>>Youth<<<

yea was good to see someone post sumthin with a structure..

fed up of seeing people writing with no storyline n no emotion

so nice to see a change here

keep it cumin

Yea i liked it too, it read pretty smooth...

Nice feeling throughout this peice, and it kept me intrested... good job.

Thx for feedback on my peice as well Nova.

yo this was an alright drop, yo the title is alittle used but thats alright the title dont mean anything unless the text is good and you proved your text was pretty hot, flow was good, structure was decent.....keep postin peace out return the favor.......check out GC Mixtape Volume 1