12 lines
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drop weneva
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12 lines
no d/r
no crew votes
drop weneva
good luck
jus checkin in ill drop before i lay muh head n shit.....bring the heat babe
My stressful endeavours with weak rappers one in the same
Have you runnin round ya block like that nigga under yo name (look @ her avatar)
You say you royalty?, well you a got damn liyah (liar)
I'm the messiah, you cant take it to me down to the wiyah (wire)
Stick to the hair and laytex, now who really wan (wanna) play next?
This chick needs more practice like she practices safe sex
Go head and succumb, like i lyrically punctured a lung
I already won, ill seperate ur spit from ya tongue
Dont even ask, hide ya face ill give u a mask
I aint here for no tea party, ima stick to the task
I said it before, dont even try to settle the score
Your rhymes are poor, now spare me from readin such a bore
u said 12 lines i was rushin it, its not my best but fuck it my mama gon get me arrested so i rushed it cuz i had to get off but here it go
ugh boi watcha talking this wackness 2 me in yo rhyme
im running the block cus i gotta keep this body fine
and everythin u jus sed sounds to me like it totaly fake
it will only take a few words to wet you asif u jumped in a lake( meaning im wettin this mc)
guess ud no all bout safe sex cos u get told chu was a mistake
n u bitter cos u got insults every birthday instead of cake
i mean cum on u fool wot kinda wack name is L-b ?
lonley-bitch? ..lil-baby?... lyricaly bad ? hey ur all three
that rhyme aint notthin but slimey like another snake in the grass
and ur rhymes r fuk3d like the ass of the alter boy after mass
before i go heres some advice dont call yourself general like yo someone
next ull b calling ur self the sargent while ur only rockin ur brothers cap gun
Originally posted by:L-B
My stressful endeavours with weak rappers one in the same
Have you runnin round ya block like that nigga under yo name
THIS WAS A WEAK OPENER PLUS THAT AVATAR LINE I ALREADY HEARD
THAT SHIT
You say you royalty?, well you a got damn liyah (liar)
I'm the messiah, you cant take it to me down to the wiyah (wire)
WE KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN YOU AINT GOTTA EXPLAIN YA SELF
YOU SHOULD OF SPELLED THE WORD'S CORRECTLY THOUGH THERE
WAS NO SPECIAL THING THERE AT ALL PLUS IT WAS A WEAK BAR
Stick to the hair and laytex, now who really wan (wanna) play next?
This chick needs more practice like she practices safe sex
THAT WAS WEAK AS FUCK YOU COULD OF CAME WAY BETTER
Go head and succumb, like i lyrically punctured a lung
I already won, ill seperate ur spit from ya tongue
THAT WAS PROBLY YA BEST LINE OUTTA YA WHOLE SPIT
Dont even ask, hide ya face ill give u a mask
I aint here for no tea party, ima stick to the task
WEAK AS HELL
I said it before, dont even try to settle the score
Your rhymes are poor, now spare me from readin such a bore
DEFINATELY A WEAK ASS CLOSER
Originally posted by:Princess
ugh boi watcha talking this wackness 2 me in yo rhyme
im running the block cus i gotta keep this body fine
THAT WAS NOT A GOOD OPENER AND YOU SHOULDN'T OF EVEN RESPONDED
TO HIS WEAK ASS OPENER.
and everythin u jus sed sounds to me like it totaly fake
it will only take a few words to wet you asif u jumped in a lake( meaning im wettin this mc)
I GOT CHA DON'T TRIP AIGHT PUNCH
guess ud no all bout safe sex cos u get told chu was a mistake
n u bitter cos u got insults every birthday instead of cake
DAMN AIGHT PERSONAL
i mean cum on u fool wot kinda wack name is L-b ?
lonley-bitch? ..lil-baby?... lyricaly bad ? hey ur all three
THAT WAS PROBLY THE BEST PERSONAL FROM BOTH SIDEDS THAT WAS
THROWN
that rhyme aint notthin but slimey like another snake in the grass
and ur rhymes r fuk3d like the ass of the alter boy after mass
GOOD SHIT
before i go heres some advice dont call yourself general like yo someone
next ull b calling ur self the sargent while ur only rockin ur brothers cap gun
THAT WAS A GOOD ENDING I LIKED IT
V/princess
for overall better spit and punch lines
hit my link back up!!!!
LB- ok ure vers was minda wack u were respelling word to the fitted ure lines liyah wiyah etc. anyway part from the most stuff was weak... if u had decent punches u wood have brung it up a bit.
princess- nice verse only bad bars was your opener but i aint gonna go it to that jus coz it was basic... u came harder than him i like the personal about his name.. read well and had gd structure well done :thumbup: v/ princess
vote=princess
For better punchlines and better rhymes.
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Celestial
uppin .. thanks for the feedbak sick can u do the poll plz
My stressful endeavours with weak rappers one in the same
Have you runnin round ya block like that nigga under yo name (look @ her avatar)
pretty good opener
You say you royalty?, well you a got damn liyah (liar)
I'm the messiah, you cant take it to me down to the wiyah (wire)
-no
Stick to the hair and laytex, now who really wan (wanna) play next?
This chick needs more practice like she practices safe sex
-not feelin it
Go head and succumb, like i lyrically punctured a lung
I already won, ill seperate ur spit from ya tongue
-filler
Dont even ask, hide ya face ill give u a mask
I aint here for no tea party, ima stick to the task
-filler
I said it before, dont even try to settle the score
Your rhymes are poor, now spare me from readin such a bore
-filler, weak closer
ugh boi watcha talking this wackness 2 me in yo rhyme
im running the block cus i gotta keep this body fine
-self glorification, bad start
and everythin u jus sed sounds to me like it totaly fake
it will only take a few words to wet you asif u jumped in a lake( meaning im wettin this mc)
-ok
guess ud no all bout safe sex cos u get told chu was a mistake
n u bitter cos u got insults every birthday instead of cake
-ha
i mean cum on u fool wot kinda wack name is L-b ?
lonley-bitch? ..lil-baby?... lyricaly bad ? hey ur all three
-nice
that rhyme aint notthin but slimey like another snake in the grass
and ur rhymes r fuk3d like the ass of the alter boy after mass
-lol, i like it
before i go heres some advice dont call yourself general like yo someone
next ull b calling ur self the sargent while ur only rockin ur brothers cap gun
-not a good finisher
This was a decent battle, I was really disappointed cause LB's opener was good, so i expected a better verse, but then he had nothin but filler and wack shit, no punches. Princess started out weaker, but finished stronger, her last 3 bars were good, which won her the battle, she through punches, and nameplays which are essentially for a win, and which is sunthin LB didnt have much of, so my vote goes to Princess
uppin ..... numba 2 .........
L-B:
My stressful endeavours with weak rappers one in the same
Have you runnin round ya block like that nigga under yo name (look @ her avatar)
--sucked, I especially hate when people explain shit in parenthesis at the end, if it doesn't make sense without the shit in the parenthesis, don't put it.
You say you royalty?, well you a got damn liyah (liar)
I'm the messiah, you cant take it to me down to the wiyah (wire)
--what the hell? why not just put 'liar' instead of 'liyah (liar)', etc...
Stick to the hair and laytex, now who really wan (wanna) play next?
This chick needs more practice like she practices safe sex
--meh...kinda boring.
Go head and succumb, like i lyrically punctured a lung
I already won, ill seperate ur spit from ya tongue
--as someone else said, pretty much filler
Dont even ask, hide ya face ill give u a mask
I aint here for no tea party, ima stick to the task
--1st line is played, 2nd doesn't make sense
I said it before, dont even try to settle the score
Your rhymes are poor, now spare me from readin such a bore
--probably the best line here, although it still sucked.
Princess:
ugh boi watcha talking this wackness 2 me in yo rhyme
im running the block cus i gotta keep this body fine
--weak opener, don't feed
and everythin u jus sed sounds to me like it totaly fake
it will only take a few words to wet you asif u jumped in a lake( meaning im wettin this mc)
--not bad, but like I said earlier, put stuff in () just makes it dumb
guess ud no all bout safe sex cos u get told chu was a mistake
n u bitter cos u got insults every birthday instead of cake
--good punch, I liked this one the best out of both verses
i mean cum on u fool wot kinda wack name is L-b ?
lonley-bitch? ..lil-baby?... lyricaly bad ? hey ur all three
--not bad
that rhyme aint notthin but slimey like another snake in the grass
and ur rhymes r fuk3d like the ass of the alter boy after mass
--pretty good
before i go heres some advice dont call yourself general like yo someone
next ull b calling ur self the sargent while ur only rockin ur brothers cap gun
--seemed real stretched, not a good ending
Sorry, I typed that review^ up and then I hit send and my internet went down, and then I typed it up again quick but I forgot to put who I voted for...
Princess
yo this is obvious that this gurl killed it man so im gone have to vote for princess
vote:Princess
iight ma
u had better structure then dat clown L-B, i liked your wording and u had harder punches thane he did, including the name and the birthdat and safe sex lines...nice shit....
my v/ princess
a yo i think my girl pricess got it sorry but she got it for real
Princess is banned for a d/r.. which means she probably had a ring
l-b wins