10 Lines.
30 Minute Check.
1 Hour Drop.
No Swaying.
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10 Lines.
30 Minute Check.
1 Hour Drop.
No Swaying.
check. my verse will be up soon.
In this...
Aight look...
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
Sir Loin:
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
Uppin this ish...
aight
LOIN
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
(no, dont act hard, just tease him not threaten)
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
(not bad, but neva rhymed)
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
(lol, funny but sorta weak)
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
(wtf,, no)
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
(self glory,, spare me)
ur verse was average, needed work on ur punches and metas.. i think if u used more wordplay and metas instead of self glorification u woulda done nicely.. u mite have underestimated this newb..
WOOT
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
(nice, good open)
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
(no)
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
(meh.. wasnt much of a punch)
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
(nah)
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
(hmm. pretty weak)
this was another average verse, but had more punches and few metas. ur structure was basic like loin and no wordplay used much there.. both need an extension of vocab in their verses.
overall pretty average battle here, i give this to woot cause of more punches, metas and not much use of self glory.. both came out to rap but maybe loin underestimated woot, i dont noe but woot got this 1 in my opinion, good luck to both..
hit this up plz wit an honest vote.. thnx
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=155960
#2...Quote:
Originally Posted by Sir Loin
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=155525
return the favor allright...........ok..cough cough
Sir
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
-good flow n multis thas it..
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
-no
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
-atempts to punch..but no..lol..could have been better
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
-coo coo..this was decient
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
-good finisher...
k now Woot
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
-no
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
-this is decient...bad setup thugh
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
-no
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
-decient set up..weak punch
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
-no this was weak
Woot wins this battle..better punches....in all..and he came with some ok wordplay n decient multis....good battle kids
shit..my bad...^it wont leme edit...i mean Sir wins....i got mixed up..cuz i read woots verse last..sorry...change that...Sir Loin wins this battle..from better punches ..n multis n wordplay..thanks
uppin, i need votes. close this cmon.
#3...Quote:
Originally Posted by Sir Loin
v/ woot. return the link
this shit was pretty close, but woot had this because he had the better punches/concepts. his verse was also overall better. sir loin came out okay, expected more from him and his verse seem forced, but my vote goes to woot.
hit the link in sigs guys
#4...Quote:
Originally Posted by Sir Loin
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
NOT BAD FOR AN OPENER.
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
NAH THAT SEEMS LIKE IT WAS RUSHED INTO A BAR. NEXT TIME TAKE YOUR TIME AND LET IT FLOW
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
NOT A DIRECT PUNCH, BUT IF YOU HAD MORE TIME YOU COULD HAVE MADE IT ALOT BETTER.
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
FUNNY, BUT STILL NOTHIN HARD HITTING IN THERE.
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
WASNT FEELIN THIS. Over all 4/10 seems rushed. You had a good opener, your best bar. Just went down from there. Dont rush next time, just let it flow.
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
OK...
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
GOOD PUNCH, LOL
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
DEEP...NICE BAR...
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
I GET WHAT YOUR TRYING TO PUT, BUT BE MORE SPECIFIC OR IT LOOKS PRE-WRITTEN. AND IT WAS A LITTLE STRETCHED BUT I SEE WHAT YOUR GOING AT.
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
DIDNT GET IT. MAYBE IM DUMB. You had enough to take sir loin on this though. overall 7/10 pretty nice with the apprentice line. Keep it up congrats on the win.
vote/ woot
#5...Quote:
Originally Posted by Sir Loin
Return the fava in the battle in my sig please, thank u
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
-nice multies, no punch though, ok start
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
-not feelin this
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
-lol, ok
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
-i like it
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
-iiight closer
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
-ok start
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
-decent at best
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
-no punch, filler
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
-decent personal, still no punch
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
-ok finisher
Im goin against the grain here and votin for sirloin, i dont c how everybodies sayin woot and better punches, when he didnt really use em in this verse, both had good structure and flow, but i felt sirloin took this with better punches, than his opponet, both were ok, but coulda been better cause ive seen better from both.
RETURN THE FAVOR,
SIRLOIN
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
fair opener
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
didnt rhyme and its filler
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
better then before
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
aiight decent
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
nice finish
WOOT
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end. (weekend)
decent nothin special
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
didnt really rhyme but meh
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
aiight meh somethin could have been better
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
alright thats more like it
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
decent finisher
OVERALL
sirloin and woot were pretty much on par nothing really stood out and but sir loins punches had a bit more flow a power so my vote goes to
v/ sirloin
return the favor vote fair
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=153376
Sir Loin
I'll bang the fifth, leave ya veins in twist...brains amiss
red stain ya fits, keep shootin till lead strains your ribs
** blah!
I'm walkin this earth with many unbelievable actions
& usin this 10 min key to murder ya like an evil blacksmith
*** didn't exactly rhyme but wasn't bad
flip it like a dolphin, rap so sick the mic needs flu shots
I'm makin Woot look stupid now, like flat bitches in tube tops
**** lol i liked this one a lot
My bars will abuse ya, somebody please talk to this loser
Cuz woots no-comp, like my room was b4 I bought a Computer
** sounded stretched and the concepts quite played
Now I switch pace with spits laced and extremele sick sprays
these 10 lines just left Woot 'abondoned rubbish'...a 'ripped waste'!
*** decent closure
woot
ya lines sway more eyes than palm trees in deep wind.
Loin spoils from core to limb. its sunday, and ya still the weak end
** pretty decent... sounded a bit poetryish at the start
ya index fingers key softly, sounding the best youve heard.
my target title, is the first & only time i'll address you Sir.
** blah!
hes 4-2. reduce by two and hes 50 percent at text.
why are you helping guests? when your just an apprentice at best.
*** decent
hell probaly drop a verse on how hell kill me, or lynch my neck.
ya signature is more embarassing than ya rec, hints Not vet.
** didn't get it
read slowly, or leave collecting ya dome from dubri.
either ya have mad guts for steak. or ya didnt know it was ME.
** weak closure
Sir Loin - 14
woot - 11
Not a bad battle...
Vote Sir Loins
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Sir Loin is dq'd for upping over the maximum limit
woot wins
closed