Raindrops.

Raindrops.

Tightly situated..a condense package begins to unravel
lightly instigated by pressure..im released on my travels
my journeys began..i have a freedom of choice for location
knowing I have the Earths formation..to find my destination
I grasp new sensations..inventing new elements of speed
collisions with raindrops..praying ill be the one to succeed
with a need..to fulfill my duty..touching earth with my existence
as excitement builds up..now I visualize Earth from a distance
I use persistence..as a throttle to engaged on my quest
dodging more obsticals..before meeting my place of rest
finally a nest..a spot on Earth I have the right to obtain
these feelings are replaced as the wind changes again
a sense of shame..against the wind no home supported
and as this became a routine..i was tired of being aborted
the pain haunted..i was a single drop in a whole class of rain
a crystal clear line..continuing my trip down a window pain
I cant complain..cause its not like ive ever experienced better
Contracting from strain..now that im at one with the weather
So on to whatever..and wherever this gust of wind takes me
The pieces now fit..praying the pressure still doesn’t break me
Feeling free..as the wind swoops me by surprise to the floor
A sense of joy is upon me..I have that home feeling once more
My sides are sore..but on the inside im rejoicing my mission
And if I had the art of speech..id be voicing this ambition
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I freeze in this position..now the sun is out..my home becomes more clear
Lying unaware that im here to be condensated back into the atmosphere.



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wow.....lets begin.

Dope as hell yo..

Good flow.. Good multis..

I like the topic..

Imagery is good..

Just an overall dope peice..

Props yo..

I think someone nominate this into legends..

Werd.

strictly dope. great piece. great everything. not going to critueqe it, just going to say you topped drinking to stay sober, and that was a damn good piece. you should make legends. no joke stay up and keep droppin ill

wow.................thanks alot yall....ive found a fan^............w00t

Bounce.

Hot. Nice job. Good Multis. Concept was straight. Alot of imagery, which was very well done with the topic. Good Flow. This should be nominated for Open Mic Hall of Fame atleast. So If it isnt already nominated I will nominate it.

-Wise

dopeness @ all these legends/hall of fame nominations...thanks yall.

dope drop.. really liked it.. good imagery and nice multis.. flow was on point and never fell off... liked the topic, it was cool..

you always seem to elevate everytime you drop. .

so keep writing

*waits for you to make legends*

thanks slik

Bounce.

This was definately dope. Excellently written. Great imagery and vocab as well. The flow of it was also great. The topic has been done before, but you managed to write this in a way that it seemed super unique. Excellent work man, I'd say it's legendary.

damn thanks.....lol^ if it did get nominated that would be me 3rd noimination lol.....but i have to say i feel this is my best yet.

'blah blah blah blah'........now that im at one with the weather
So on to whatever..and wherever this gust of wind takes me

^^apart from the first half of the first line, i think this was the best bit of the verse, dunno, just it appealed to me..

man, id say this is mos def the best peice ive seen you do, i was pretty impressed man... i aint ever seen this concpet done before so that was a good start, i thought this was nicely written from the perspective you chose, good descriptive quality to it... you could build up a mental picture of it, so good work on that... and it progressed well, to a solid ending point... like a journey and you come to the end... nice.... BUT the only thing stopping me from nominating this for legends is... the complexity of it, it have liked to see a bit more fluidity, well not fluidity, sorta more internal rhyming going on, so it rolls off the tongue, ALSO, there was like no flip in it or twist, you could sortas predict where the peice was going

... all in all tho... a good solid read, props to my man, keep it coming

i liked this piece a lot...good multiez and nice concept..

I cant complain..cause its not like ive ever experienced better
Contracting from strain..now that im at one with the weather
So on to whatever..and wherever this gust of wind takes me
The pieces now fit..praying the pressure still doesn’t break me


^ WOW

loving that part

man this was one of the greatest yet playa good everything i really like this peice
stay up playa

lol thanks............................................ .bounce

bounce.

with a need..to fulfill my duty..touching earth with my existence
as excitement builds up..now I visualize Earth from a distance

wow now that was a good drop feelin those lines i posted at the dope you had a nice flow and a great rhymescheme on this piece the multies didnt over power it at all the emotion you used was also fantastic keep it up

thanks man.....................................

yea this wasnt as dope.. but yea it was really aboe average.... at some parts i though it wasnt as good but some parts was dope... nice shit nice drop... ya flow is good and ya had some nice structre... also i can feel wat ya mean.. nice imagrey too. the rhyme sheme was very good though some i thought was a lil elementary...... but the sylable counts for the rhymes was definatly good...

very nice kid i love peices that you can follow like a story and imagari was sicckkk

-Bounce-

loved tha multis bro, them hoes was ready, ya doin it big man, i really felt this piece kinfolk i liked the imagery, stay up bro

word.

last up...............

A science lesson? lol very good, I liked how you portrayed the rains persepctive. His feelings while falling. Really good.

Ha

This was an interesting read. Very different from my point of view. I was feeling the flow here. It seems you have a knack for topicals rather than battling. Imagery was smooth. Most defintely one of the better pieces I've read in awhile.

Stay Up

Dom

i liked it alot man u had good flo good use of words good jus bout every damn thing id love to battle u sumtime but not now ill just keep readin and learnin ya hurd lol. peace man keep it up and ull b a legend fo sho'

ECE
DJ

yea this was nice,
.. flowed good .. i specially liked the immagery in here.. potraited well
good multi usage, and the closer was real nice, well done mate.

And if I had the art of speech..id be voicing this ambition
.
.
.
I freeze in this position..now the sun is out..my home becomes more clear
Lying unaware that im here to be condensated back into the atmosphere.

yup