Tim Corleone vs. Ace of Aces (MT vs. PB)

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Topic will be posted...
House rules (no biting etc)
Good Luck to the both of you...
:)

check, choose the damn topic already.

check check when is this due

sorry.. it is due Monday...
and..
Topic-The Down Sides Of Internet Rapping

ight topic good luck

better drop tomorrow ace

~right back at ya sonny~

who the dopest heads? someone gassed by they own friends?
I'd show respect, but how can 18 year olds then, be known vets?
half yall, havent grown yet...some creative, but still not worthy,
its hurting, when pic battles prove most these kids are nerdy,
stay surfing...but I wont be evil & hate on u people's lives,
winning's ur ego's pride, reason I dont see why some need to bite,
cheat or lie...I thought this was competition to prove urself,
some just do it well, others are on AIM trying to shoot for help,
truth's been dealt...some dont get chances, some dont deserve it,
leave my mark for certain...

"while~wack-kids~put-it~all-in~they-verses",

then there's the herb list...the bitch type, kids that dont think right,
stay hard on the so called big names, as votes travel through dick rides,
but some punches are flipped tight...with all the mechanics but spittin',
audio heads hate, like if before recording, their verses weren't written,
no quittin'...so sue me then, everyone went through the newbie trend,
but tell me who the fuck said, u only dope if u post over and over again
& then...battling, I must say, no stories, nor dissing, if u wanna succeed,
must I repeat? u wont get a win without the set up/ punch technique,
but what's really funny is beef...why would u act tough on the net?
disconnect, but since when the hell is the enter button a threat?!

Could Be You

He sits clicking, scanning pages of his written lyrics
Looking back at whack tracks of a hidden appearance
He took pride in his life, despite the unknown factors
He couldn’t light up a mic, short of a full-grown actor
A fallacy in his reality but he fell into the great trend
Feeling slightly satisfied the time he reached elevation
His destination, was nothing short of a comp screen
Not nearly a geek, but miles from dating prom queen
The kid was quick but not legit enough to know this
Given a second time to spit, he would up and blow it
A slow thinker, it took him hours to read and key bios
But tricked himself into thinking that he could freestyle
Meanwhile, he practiced on paper and nothing more
Not realizing that a keyboard was all that he lived for
One day he felt ready, so he tested himself out loud
Saying things that not even he knew what was about
A joke, nothing more than a screen name to battle
A retarded art that he thought could peak shadows
Only fooled into thinking that he was achieving shit
And now its you who realized it too after reading this

okie doke

ace
your piece was nice,the vocab was good,the structure was nice also...your piece was complex...and you described the details well,i also lliked ya creativity in this piece...the were a few metas here also...so ill say this was a pretty solid work man....and you stayed on topic well and better than tim did..

timmy
you also had a nice structure,the creativity and the details were okay in this but not great,you also did good on staying on topic mostly....you did have an okay vocab to....and this was a well worded piece

overall...id say with a slightly better structure,and creativity,and also staying on topic better ima say that ace takes thgis....great drops from both by the way

v/ace of aces

aces of aces great apit actually great spit to both af yall this battle was sick but i think aces of aces took it because his flow and structure was better over all he took it by about 1 point more that tim in pointa outa ten please return the favor thanks

v/ a o a

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thanks for dropping votes, much appreciated.

drop links.

First off...

I really wanna say fuck you for making me pick a winner outta two cats who's verses I usually dig...I dislike hard decisions and this is/was definately one. So, I repeat, fuck you!

Great topic...very here and now.

I'm gonna give Tim the win because while both displayed extremely good flow and great story...his was personalized for what I see everyday. What I occasionally feel.

Ace's, I dunno...I just don't feel like that cat did... he seemed to wanna spit for real...possibly blow up at it. At least that's the vibe I caught. I don't relate, I'm older, already have a career and basically dislike people so the last thing I'd wanna do is get on stage in front of em with my shitty sounding voice.

Tim, good shit...great description of what goes on here everyday. While I don't have a need to blow up or achieve anything on the net...I do like coming to a community I don't have to see and can turn off at anytime. Your shit was an on the button assault on the corruption (can you believe that word applies to a fucking rap website???) that sadly goes on here.

Good observations, great way of relaying them.

Winner: Tim

Peace

I agree wit BTK...

Timmy - Started off good n stayed good all da way thru, i felt everything u said n u got a smile out of me on one or two bars. Very true, lot of emotion and sorta like a battle diss to everyone out there. Was diggin it, overall real decent drop.

Ace - U didnt start off all that good in my opinion. U got better towards da end n i like how u approached the topic, but iunno it jus didnt appeal to me as much as Tims did.

Vote - Timmy.

Plz return favor here at :

Vs Hoodstruk

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thanks for the votes peepz, drop links i'll get back at ya.

Ace tells stories that illustrate the topic, so it was no suprise he came up with this drop.. I liked the imagery, the structure is tops, and the wording was to the point that it flowed consistently.. I liked it, a nice drop all together.. I also thought that you stayed on topic well, so props for that man..
"His destination, was nothing short of a comp screen
Not nearly a geek, but miles from dating prom queen"
^^nice, I really liked these lines

Tim did this topic real well, cos he hit the spot in a lot of things I can agree with personally.. Topic was followed nicely, structure and vocab was dope, images aiite, but for me, its all about the way his ideas come off.. I got it.. and it helped me decide who was my vote ina hard battle between two formidable opponents.
"no quittin'...so sue me then, everyone went through the newbie trend,
but tell me who the fuck said, u only dope if u post over and over again"
^^lols.. I smiled at this.. dope..

Vote goes for Tim, Ace followed topic well, and presented mad images.. but Tim took it for really illustratin the downfalls of net rappin.. Props to Both..

thanxs for votes uppin 1

aoa....you came pretty tight...vocab was on point and you stayed on topic for the most part of the verse..but unfortunately i didnt think you came as hard as tim...got topic verse thou
best bars:

A fallacy in his reality but he fell into the great trend
Feeling slightly satisfied the time he reached elevation
His destination, was nothing short of a comp screen
Not nearly a geek, but miles from dating prom queen

tim...nice drop dawg...it relates to all the people on thiz site pretty much..lol..your vocab wasnt as tight as aoa..but on the whole you stayed on topic and some creativiy was there also....

best bars:

who the dopest heads? someone gassed by they own friends?
I'd show respect, but how can 18 year olds then, be known vets?
half yall, havent grown yet...some creative, but still not worthy,
its hurting, when pic battles prove most these kids are nerdy,
stay surfing...but I wont be evil & hate on u people's lives,
winning's ur ego's pride, reason I dont see why some need to bite,


vote=tim

aight, sorry but i gotta say Tim took this one, his actually stayed good da whole way thru, mayb even got better, but ace didnt start off too bad but then i dont kno wut happened, also i felt wut tim had 2 say a lil better, a bit more creative 2

vote-Tim

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lol you voted for the wrong guy

nevermind lol wrong battle

uppin for vote anyone leave links and can a mod delete the last two posts thank you

Tim..
Very nice.. A good read, and well on topic.. Some multies I think but not many, structure was ok, flow was nice.. Not too too creative, but ok in that department.. 7.5/10

AoA..
Wow, nice.. Structure was perfect, flow was nice, nice multies, nice staying on topic, and very creative.. Nicely done, keep up.. 8.5/10

\\//ote- AoA

there is nothing to say as u can see aces shit was shooting at tims and tim had nothing to protect himelf of off that cause ace was nicer and clean and everyword he wrote he meant it this battle is over

v///ace

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^DQ that vote. lol.

eh, uppin this for some votes. drop links.

Man first of all I'd like to say both pieces where dope as fuck... very nice Job

Ace: Dope piece... excellent flow, vocab and structure made this a joy to read. The way you laid it out was dope and some great imagery. Multies where also good.

Timmy: Also dope piece... excellent flow and vocab... great imagery and some of the lines really made me think. Great layout but multies could have been better.

V/Ace of aces for having better multies (yep that's all that separaterd these two.)

Tim Corleone has only one more up...

Anything you post after that is a DQ.

This battle's been open way to fucking long.

Peace

Played topic guys but anywayz...

Tim..Your verse was ok..but nothing really grabbed my attention when i was reading it..you was just making statements..rather than using meta4's to put a exclaimation point on his bar..flow was stop start also which didnt help..try and be clever with the verse and add some complexity with it

Ace- I was feeling yours more..the flow was consistant which made it more of a joy to read in my book, there was alot more complexity in your verse than tims and wit..like timmy u made valid points..but u came over better by making it more interesting of a read..maybe u coulda lashed out at users by saying something that the reader would be pissed off with like...y bother posting another thread will come alone and erase the fact in peoples mind that his/her work ever existed..know what i mean..it was an decent verse anywayz good job

i took time hit this up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...2&page=1&pp=15 pz

wow...first of all, i think both of yall did great...

Tim, u had a real good verse...ya structure was straight...overall it had a real nice flow...n i liked how u had a lotta complex rhymes in there, too. U definitely did a good job wit imagery...i got a good visual from what u were talkin about cuz u were describing the environment so well....good piece

Ace, i thought your verse was strong too...i particularly liked the structure cuz it was tight n gave your piece a very strong flow...again, there was real good imagery...u gave good details on the MC u were describing....n also, i really liked the closer...good piece

this shit was mad tough to decide on...i thought both of u were pretty much dead even....

V/ Tim by a hair, cuz i thought he kept a tighter grip on the topic...

i need an honest vote here if yall can:
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